Michael Edwards

A COUPLE OF QUINZAINES

 

 

A COUPLE OF QUINZAINES 

 

The cliff face was menacing.

Was she all alone?

Was she pushed?

 

 

In brick and mortar townscapes

Is wild life sustained?

Do birds sing?

 

 

 

 

 A quinzaine is an unrhymed verse of fifteen syllables. These syllables are distributed among three lines so that there are seven syllables in the first line, five in the second line and three in the third line (7/5/3). The first line makes a statement. The next two lines ask a question relating to that statement.

 

Comments6

  • Goldfinch60

    Two thought provoking quinzaines Michael.

    • Michael Edwards

      Thanks Andy - it's quite an interesting form in that it can invite intrigue.

    • orchidee

      Ooh good quiz-wotsits and pic M.
      I'm gonna do a douzaine (12), or quatorzaine (14) for example. I might do 100 of these, cos I can count up to 100 in French. Ohh, our talents are too much - no end of them! lol.
      Here's a unaze (1). Erm...'One'. That's it, the whole poem!

      • Michael Edwards

        Such an enigmatic poem Orchi - I love it.
        We could do a joint write.
        Here is my suggestion for a second stanza: Two
        Over to you for a third.

        • orchidee

          Oh would we technically have to start at three syllables, if there has to be three lines in total? Meanwhile, to finish that unaze: Three

        • 5 more comments

        • Lorna

          Call in DCI Vera Stanhope for the first one. As for the second, pigeons are everywhere! Intriguing little bits Michael!

          • Michael Edwards

            I'm sure she would crack it - and pigeons are best in a lie. Thanks Lorna.

            • Lorna

              Did you mean pie? Or are they Washington DC pigeons that lie?

            • BRIANSODES

              BREXIT has come and has stayed !
              Who will it affect ?
              When and where ?


              Thanks MICHAEL ~ Love DAFFS and there are hundreds of varieties always look best in HOSTS !

              Quinzaines are a way of making a meaningful three line statement they are intellectual Haiku ! I like No. 2 and the answer is YES !

              Please check my MUSICAL FUSION thanks BRIAN

            • Daveyboyz

              I like it... and not as easy as it looks. I penned one but you need a compelling statement and these aren't throwing themselves onto the page for me.

              • Michael Edwards

                Yes you do need something that is strong like say: The funeral was over or There was hole in my sock.

              • Laura

                Michael,
                Another great one!
                I will eventually give this interesting form a try!

                What a beautiful daffodil!

                ~Laura~

                • Michael Edwards

                  Like a ballet dancer doing the splits - trouble with this one is that the flowers tend to look down and they don't last that long.



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