AS ONE
Fresh pink complexion
long curving neck
dressed to perfection.
At last realised
through probing eyes
love once disguised.
Her future planned
the bells proclaim
throughout the land.
A tricube – one of the simplest of forms to write and
to describe: 3 syllables to each line, 3 lines to
each stanza, and 3 stanzas long. No other rules,
it doesn’t have to rhyme or observe any form
of metre.
However I decided to write this in rhyme
(aba, cdc, efe) – not so easy.
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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PHEONOMENAL..all caps..haha
Thanks RJ
Good write Michael. Another form that I had not seen.
I keep digging Andy - cheers.
Good write and pic Michael. I thought you was going to do a 'unaze' thingy, with that title! Here's one, compiled from yesterday between us both. Well it's got three syllables in all - a troisane? heehee.
One
Two
Three
Oh poetic heaven - such a fine piece Orchi - it invites the mind to transcend the upper limits as momentary forms become distorted through emergent and academic practice, and the reader is left with a hymn to the inaccuracies of our era.
Oh yes, I staggered at how perfect that troisane is. Took me hours to write it. A huge tour de force, almost unachievable by any other human being, etc, etc. Now where\'s that humble pie - cut me a large slice!
BAGPIPES I' HAND
PROUDLY AH STAND
RESONATE THRU LAND
Thanks MIKE ~ I'm in Scotia this mornin'
Please check my Poem for picture !
The TRICUBE should be 3 WORDS per line !
Loved the TRICUBE ~ it could be a tribute
to the lovely MEGHAN MARKLE
Yours BRIAN ~ please add to my MUSIC FUSION ~ Ta
Thanks Brian - thankfully rules can always be broken.
One of these days I'm going to conjure up a new type of free verse ballad. When I stop being lazy! Enough about me. This is simply wonderful sir. It gets better every time.
Thanks for the accolade - I'd like to think up another form but the brain is on holiday at the moment.
Love the simplicity - the whole cycle of beauty, love and marriage wrapped up in a few lines....... are your flowers a form of aster?
Bless you Lorna - the flower is anemone Wanda poking up above the blue and pink flowers of pulmonaria.
I got another gem. Another troisane:
Four
Five
Six
Qwww Epic - where do you get your inspiration from?
Oohhh I have to contemplate and meditate for hours on stuff like that - troisanes. Got to get the structure, meaning, layout, syllables, etc all correct. It's not at all easy! heehee.
I've started to write the next verse and I've got as far as:
Seven
Eight
but I'm stumped for the third line - can you help?
Ten?? lol.
We must be bloody mad - it's twelve of course !!
Oh silly me, or course it is. Well, someone asked me which bus goes to the moon. I said 'No.7'. They said' Come on, you can't fool me, I know it's the No. 11 to the moon, not the No.7!'
I'm not familiar with the route.
Can you catch it Kings Cross?
Oohh yes, can go just about anywhere from Kings Cross!
Got to go - there's a man in a white coat at the door. Could he be the driver?
Great job on this especially with the rhyme! And as always, love the picture of the flowers!
Thanks for the compliments Christina - In 5minutes time I'll be posting another flower from the garden.
Michael,
A tricube...interesting form!
A super write accentuated by a beautiful pic! I like the colors of the anemone Wanda.
Reading your poems accompanied by your garden flowers, brought to mind Robert Louis Stevenson...āA Garden of Versesā! You should publish a āGarden of flowersā...
a best seller for certain!
Iām enjoying the whole package! Thank you for sharing!
~Laura~
My pleasure and with different flowers coming into bloom almost daily at this time of year there's more to come. Would love to publish but finding a publisher who is willing to finance the deal is quite a difficult ask these days.
Iāll have to start buying lottery tickets!
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