TRANSIENT DREAMS

Michael Edwards

 

 

 

TRANSIENT DREAMS

 

 

Unexpressed in words

Entering perceptions door

In transient dreams.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Senryu (also called human haiku) is an unrhymed Japanese verse consisting of three unrhymed lines

of five, seven, and five syllables (5, 7, 5) 17 syllables in all. Senryu is usually written in the present tense

with references to some aspect of human nature or emotions. They possess no references to the natural

world and thus stand out from nature/seasonal haiku.

  • Author: Michael Edwards (Offline Offline)
  • Published: May 7th, 2018 00:02
  • Comment from author about the poem: Another of my sculptures made from found wood. I scour the building sites (among other places) for pieces which have been run over and smashed by the trucks and see what I can make of them. This piece worked out rather well.
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  • Goldfinch60

    Very good senryu (I write them as well) and I love the sculpture Michael.

    • Michael Edwards

      Thanks Andy - the sculpture just needs finishing off with felt on the underside - off to do it soon.

    • orchidee

      I'm perceiving this is a fine write and pic Michael, though 'perceiving' is rather a long word for this time of the morning!

      • Michael Edwards

        And that 'i' before 'e' business -
        at least it's not as long as pneumonoultramicroscopicsilicovolcanoconiosis,

      • orchidee

        You being the 'first poet of the day' again?! Was you two minutes late?! Published 00:02. Well, it would take 2 minutes to type it up! (Do shut up now Orchi, you're waffling!). heehee.

        • Michael Edwards

          No I had it in 'copy' all ready to paste it in but tripped over a matchstick on the way from the kitchen. Oh the trials of being a poet !!

        • orchidee

          Ohh, perceive, receive,.... 'i' before 'e' except after 'c. But why is it in 'seize' but not in 'siege'? Gotta lie down to recover after pneumo-wotsit. Used too many brain cells to say it! See ya in about 3 hours!

          • Michael Edwards

            Same with me - I've used two already this morning - if I use two more there won't be any left !!!

          • BRIAN & ANGELA

            HI MIKE ~ You are a POETRY MASTER and I endorse your detailed memo differentiating between a HAIKU (Nature & Seasons) and a SENRYU (everything else !) many people call all 5 7 5 poems HAIKU which devalues the difference ! TANKAS (which have 31 syllables in a 57577 format) are H & S with attitude and can be on any subject ! H & S are often (deliberately) open ended the final two lines 7 7 are for explanation ! It is a poetic minefield ! I love the "transience" in your SENRYU ! When i visited the FLINTSTONES I saw a sculpting very similar to yours on the mantle-piece ! FRED told me it was called WHEEL 'N WEDGE and is a classic ! Thanks for caring about the Structure and Form of Written Poetry. For me as a Teacher of Poetry to Adult ~ Structure and Shape of a Written Poem (I can't understand why some on MPS present good poems as continuous PROSE ?) is important as is the Syllabus Pattern. Rhyme Pattern and Verse (Stanza) Length is also important for PRESENTATION & PERFORMANCE (Recitation) Poetry is ORAL and AURAL and (for me) Poetry Readings are always very fulfilling and exciting ~ Here endeth the Last Lesson ~ Yours BRIAN

            • Michael Edwards

              Brian I agree with all that you have said. I still fail to understand why some poets are so reluctant to move outside their comfort zone and try a few of the classic forms. There are some great poets around not only here on MPS who can write super work on any subject but because their format and style never changes they can become - well - a bit samey !!!

              • Michael Edwards

                I can't disagree with you there Diamond.

              • Lorna

                Phenomenal piece of sculpture!

                • Michael Edwards

                  So pleased you like it - it's not a large work - about 12ins long but I do like the smaller pieces which are more adaptable and fit in well with modern living.

                • dusk arising

                  I'm mad crazy about your sculpture here. In my deranged inner sight it represents existence, the circular representing an ageing 'being' trapped between a 'chock' and a hard place, all performed on an ever decaying plinth.

                  • Michael Edwards

                    Never your deranged inner sight dusk - not everyone has the mental dexterity and open mind to appreciate and interpret beyond the recognisable form. As an artist I feel chuffed that you have been able to do so and appreciate my work - thank you thank you.

                  • FineB

                    Thanks Michael.

                    A super write. I love this haiku.

                    Keep writing
                    FineB

                    • Michael Edwards

                      Thanks so much FB - your comment is so much appreciated.



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