On a leaf ~ on a leaf ~ a leaf
casts swaying paler green shadows
and suddenly ~ the Tree Frog sings !
The Sun shines on the garden moss
and in the trees a Deer appears
we shout with JOY ~ it disappears !
Hushed are the Pines on the lake shore
and above them the the Mountain rises
to join Sky ~ seamless tapestry !
Beautiful Lady ~ rolls her blind
She sits in the stillness ~ crying
weeps for the sadness ~ in her Heart !
Thanks for visiting ~ comments welcome ~ love BRIAN XOX
In the ORIENT ~ EIGHT is a lucky number
A triplet in which each line has EIGHT
syllables is very lucky ~ Yours BRIAN !
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BRIANSODES (Pseudonym) (
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A fine write Brian.
THANKS STEVE ~ Pleased you enjoyed it ! A new structural form always ameliorates (makes it better !) the MPS SITE ~ Yours BRIAN
I would do some ameli-wotsit, if I could say it!
Good work Brian
THANKS MIKE ~ Pleased you liked them ~ I love the structure and subjects in Oriental Poetry ~ for me (being a Scientist) the symmetry and symbolism of the 8 8 8 triplet OCTAKU is very satisfying & symmetrical ~ Yours BRIAN
Brian this was absolutely beautiful!
Thanks HEART ~ I am pleased you saw BEAUTY in it ~ thanks for saving it as a FAVOURITE. In Japanese & Chinese poetry there are three levels of BEAUTY. Because the script is written with BRUSHES and often embellished with pictures of flowers ~ blossom ~ birds etc (just as I have added Mount Fuji (Japan) to illustrate OCTAKU No. 3 and written it in Sky Blue italic) there is a VISUAL beauty in Oriental poetry even before you read it. Because it is an ORAL tradition there is also a beauty in the SOUND of the Poem when it is recited. Because I am a Performance Poet ~ "sound" in a Poetry Circle is very important ! There is also a MENTAL BEAUTY in the MEANING of the poem etc. There is always more to Poetry than meets the EYE or EAR. Thanks for your appreciation ~ Yours BRIAN (UK)
Good ones there Brian.
THANKS ANDY ~ Check my reply to HEART ! In Oriental Poetry forms the structure always enhances the words ~ they are Elegant & Classic ! Thanks BRIAN I think ~ like my Great Granddad I am a little EDWARDIAN ~ very structured ! Being at HEART a Natural Product ~ Organic Chemist I find beauty ~ purpose ~ order & design in the Form & Function of all Biomonomers & Polymers. An incredible World of Beauty & Design ~ like BIOSYNTHETIC PATHWAYS ~ hidden alas from the Majority and (to my mind) one of the Greatest Evidences of the Majesty of our Creator God. "If a Man says ~ There is NO GOD ~ or even ~ "There probably is NO GOD" ~ That man is a FOOL. I am mourning demise of "THE YOUNG LIONS" in RUSSIA ~ AMEN Yours BRIAN (MAN in BLACK today) Please check my TURTLE POEM # Later !
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