Awesome.
Portentous is storm.
Thick and heavy this afternoon air
projects an impending doom everywhere.
Frightening is lightning.
Leaving a film on withering green
it alters the sheen of dew pooled in each leaf.
Numbing is thunder
Wide but blueless the sky-scape here
warily waits as pregnant with wet gale threatens.
Awful is louring mauve.
Suddenly rumbling sounds decibel-loud
and clashing drowns voices in scurrying crowd.
I see a large tree shaking prior to
the strike,
speedy
zig-zag
hot lines
decapitate,
slashing at
old spalted
oaken core,
strips it bare,
groaning the
trunk heaves,
smoking side,
sighs as skin
splits and
bark rips while
trembling leaves
slide into heated
inferno to stay alive
no more then roots weep
as tree shudders, tumbling to die.
Awesome is forked white-lightning.
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
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Wow Fay! That is awesome in word and display!
Wonderful write and layout Fay.
Ahh, it would be awesome. We had black clouds at times - they blew over. Still parched!
Struck once again by your poetic pyrotechnics here.
Thunder storms are wonderful but why do they seem rare in the daytime ... or is it my memory?
Love the way you create urgency with short lines.
AWESOME FAY ~ Us lesser Poets had a spate of SHAPE-POEMS a few Months ago. All simple ~ all geometric ~ squares ~ diamonds ~ diabloes ~ triangles etc. We were very PROUD ~ BUT THIS IS A BL* * DY TREE ~ HOW ? I promise we won't even try to emulate !
It complements the Ode which is all about the vulnerability of trees against:
STORMS ~ portentous
LIGHTNING ~ frightening
THUNDER ~ numbing
LOURING MAUVE ~ awesome
The roots weep
the Tree shudders
The Tree tumbles & dies
TREES are not like ANIMALS ~ who can run & hide from the Storm (so can we !). TREES are rooted to the spot and have to face the Storm and other vicissitudes of life and some alas do not survive. When we have big storms and trees are uprooted ~ I take the students to photograph the exposed the root system to understand why some Trees (PEOPLE) survive and other Trees (PEOPLE) do not ~ it's all about ROOTS ! There is a moral in your Tall Tree Story ! Thanks for sharing ~ love the visual and the poem ~ Yours BRIAN & ANGELA
Super form and great descriptive piece of work - top marks Fay
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