Comments received on poems by Noah
Head Trip: I Found a Dog Today
Lorna said:
Very good! I did that once - I \"rescued\" a dog that actually belonged to someone but it all worked out thank goodness! I especially like: Paws covered in dry mud.
Possibly cattle business.
All over me and my driving practice. Right away I could see the contrast of a nice clean office/home and a very muddy dog........
February 2nd, 2018 06:36
Lorna said:
Very good! I did that once - I \"rescued\" a dog that actually belonged to someone but it all worked out thank goodness! I especially like: Paws covered in dry mud.
Possibly cattle business.
All over me and my driving practice. Right away I could see the contrast of a nice clean office/home and a very muddy dog........
February 2nd, 2018 06:36
Mathematics
dusk arising said:
Ok, off that backburner and into the raging storm of the flames which rip into obscure corners lighting your vision so that the crazed angles of your prose tear the night apart as the queen boldly steps fore sinking her lustful talons into your flesh.
Just a thought! The sort of thing Benny Hill might have done.
January 31st, 2018 19:10
dusk arising said:
Ok, off that backburner and into the raging storm of the flames which rip into obscure corners lighting your vision so that the crazed angles of your prose tear the night apart as the queen boldly steps fore sinking her lustful talons into your flesh.
Just a thought! The sort of thing Benny Hill might have done.
January 31st, 2018 19:10
The Concert Once Foretold
dusk arising said:
Were there ice creams in the interval?
January 30th, 2018 18:41
dusk arising said:
Were there ice creams in the interval?
January 30th, 2018 18:41
Mother.
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
\'\' poison my river, let me down \'\' so expressive yet so sad,
January 20th, 2018 05:18
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
\'\' poison my river, let me down \'\' so expressive yet so sad,
January 20th, 2018 05:18
Fire and Ice
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
this seems very deep and well expressed :-)
January 20th, 2018 05:15
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
this seems very deep and well expressed :-)
January 20th, 2018 05:15
A.RT
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
the wording is great in this poem ! loving this ! :-)
January 20th, 2018 05:12
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
the wording is great in this poem ! loving this ! :-)
January 20th, 2018 05:12
Splice.
Aislinn Wilson said:
\"harrowing reality\" is a bold phrase, I\'m a fan
January 17th, 2018 13:39
Aislinn Wilson said:
\"harrowing reality\" is a bold phrase, I\'m a fan
January 17th, 2018 13:39
Snake in the Breeze
emily7th said:
Wow, love this one! Felt drawn in from the first line.
December 21st, 2017 17:33
emily7th said:
Wow, love this one! Felt drawn in from the first line.
December 21st, 2017 17:33
The Deep End
Nicholas M. Langford said:
I love the imagery of the lighting of the cigarette and its interpretation as a transaction. This search for color is extremely familiar. Is it found in the temporary buzz of a nicotine high, various forms of numbing entertainment, the art of poetry? Its funny with so many things going on in the city, so many people, that color is still so hard to find.
December 4th, 2017 03:12
Nicholas M. Langford said:
I love the imagery of the lighting of the cigarette and its interpretation as a transaction. This search for color is extremely familiar. Is it found in the temporary buzz of a nicotine high, various forms of numbing entertainment, the art of poetry? Its funny with so many things going on in the city, so many people, that color is still so hard to find.
December 4th, 2017 03:12
The Angel
Pintu Mahakul said:
Hair like autumn with golden brown colour angel appears with nice imagery in this interesting poem.
September 26th, 2017 08:14
Pintu Mahakul said:
Hair like autumn with golden brown colour angel appears with nice imagery in this interesting poem.
September 26th, 2017 08:14
Pondering the Question
dusk arising said:
Do we con ourselves into believing we know the answers? The more you think about it the deeper it gets and the bigger the questions get...... if only my mind didn\'t raise the questions or the need to know..... yep ignorance is bliss.
September 21st, 2017 17:13
dusk arising said:
Do we con ourselves into believing we know the answers? The more you think about it the deeper it gets and the bigger the questions get...... if only my mind didn\'t raise the questions or the need to know..... yep ignorance is bliss.
September 21st, 2017 17:13
Mortal Hellfire
dusk arising said:
In my mind i had you writing this as if you were a tomato on a plate of salad....about to be lacerated by a diners knife..... i pictured you savouring the moment your flesh would give way to the pressure of the knife point and it sliced into you spewing your juice and pips all over adjacent lettuce.
MMMM pie for desert too.
September 18th, 2017 13:12
dusk arising said:
In my mind i had you writing this as if you were a tomato on a plate of salad....about to be lacerated by a diners knife..... i pictured you savouring the moment your flesh would give way to the pressure of the knife point and it sliced into you spewing your juice and pips all over adjacent lettuce.
MMMM pie for desert too.
September 18th, 2017 13:12
Mortal Hellfire
arazimus said:
Screams that would make the earth quake, lots of pain in this read, pain is an illusion meant to control the hearts of man, very raw,love it
September 18th, 2017 03:10
arazimus said:
Screams that would make the earth quake, lots of pain in this read, pain is an illusion meant to control the hearts of man, very raw,love it
September 18th, 2017 03:10
Buzzard
dusk arising said:
\"Stuck like blood on the sheet\" and \"Keep them all from loving me\".
Man you must live in a cruel world or is it just bizarre? Sounds good to me actually. I enjoyed this.
September 16th, 2017 06:11
dusk arising said:
\"Stuck like blood on the sheet\" and \"Keep them all from loving me\".
Man you must live in a cruel world or is it just bizarre? Sounds good to me actually. I enjoyed this.
September 16th, 2017 06:11
Mother.
dusk arising said:
There is imperfection in us all. Your words are a stark reminder of consequences of our imperfection. The effect we have on the entire life of another\'s journey through this life. I wish you strength and positivity were i able to grant them. Sincerely good writing and very powerful.
September 10th, 2017 06:27
dusk arising said:
There is imperfection in us all. Your words are a stark reminder of consequences of our imperfection. The effect we have on the entire life of another\'s journey through this life. I wish you strength and positivity were i able to grant them. Sincerely good writing and very powerful.
September 10th, 2017 06:27
Dishonor Among Thieves
dusk arising said:
The stories this could tell. The questions it leaves hanging. Provokative sort of a thriller really.
September 8th, 2017 16:50
dusk arising said:
The stories this could tell. The questions it leaves hanging. Provokative sort of a thriller really.
September 8th, 2017 16:50
The Boneyard
J.M. Shine said:
I like this whole poem. The first quatrain to me sounds like a soul anticipating release or freedom, feeling nervous. The second quatrain shows me anguish. The third of disparity, and the best is the climax at the end. A great cliffhanger. Great piece, Noah.
September 4th, 2017 09:35
J.M. Shine said:
I like this whole poem. The first quatrain to me sounds like a soul anticipating release or freedom, feeling nervous. The second quatrain shows me anguish. The third of disparity, and the best is the climax at the end. A great cliffhanger. Great piece, Noah.
September 4th, 2017 09:35
The Boneyard
dusk arising said:
Horror mystery..... sets the scene for a damn good film.... i see swamps and gators....... and ....
September 4th, 2017 08:42
dusk arising said:
Horror mystery..... sets the scene for a damn good film.... i see swamps and gators....... and ....
September 4th, 2017 08:42
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