Comments received on poems by NaomiRayne
Your Definition
Pintu Mahakul said:
In a sea of love, we see, life love and beauty. Interesting sharing is done here is really very brilliant. 10
September 26th, 2017 08:12
Pintu Mahakul said:
In a sea of love, we see, life love and beauty. Interesting sharing is done here is really very brilliant. 10
September 26th, 2017 08:12
Not a Disorder
NaomiRayne said:
Me saying that it shouldn\'t be my choice was showing how much control I lost in making decisions when it comes to my health. Also showing the little piece of me that can\'t handle the responsibility of taking care of myself in this way. I say \'should\' because I\'m not dismissing that fact that it is my choice...it\'s just a way of highlighting that this is my weakness without asking for pity.
September 24th, 2017 15:10
NaomiRayne said:
Me saying that it shouldn\'t be my choice was showing how much control I lost in making decisions when it comes to my health. Also showing the little piece of me that can\'t handle the responsibility of taking care of myself in this way. I say \'should\' because I\'m not dismissing that fact that it is my choice...it\'s just a way of highlighting that this is my weakness without asking for pity.
September 24th, 2017 15:10
Not a Disorder
WL Schuett said:
you\'re writing with a lot of emotions but I don\'t understand the choice line , shouldn\'t it be your choice and if not why ?
September 24th, 2017 11:37
WL Schuett said:
you\'re writing with a lot of emotions but I don\'t understand the choice line , shouldn\'t it be your choice and if not why ?
September 24th, 2017 11:37
A Prayer
Seek said:
What a way to show appreciation and forgiveness Naomi!
September 15th, 2017 01:32
Seek said:
What a way to show appreciation and forgiveness Naomi!
September 15th, 2017 01:32
A Prayer
Poetic Dan said:
Outstanding message, really don\'t to me. Thank you
August 26th, 2017 18:31
Poetic Dan said:
Outstanding message, really don\'t to me. Thank you
August 26th, 2017 18:31
Revenge
orchidee said:
Erm, I\'m reminded of a fairly traditional church that tried to go more modern. A guy would appear with guitar each Sunday, to responses of groans and \'Oh no, not him again\'. Or \'I just knew he was gonna turn up again\'. I dunno about linger, but they wanted to chuck his guitar out. Probably un-Christian mutterings too, of \'That ******* guitar again, I\'ll wrap it around his neck\'! oohh.
August 8th, 2017 08:43
orchidee said:
Erm, I\'m reminded of a fairly traditional church that tried to go more modern. A guy would appear with guitar each Sunday, to responses of groans and \'Oh no, not him again\'. Or \'I just knew he was gonna turn up again\'. I dunno about linger, but they wanted to chuck his guitar out. Probably un-Christian mutterings too, of \'That ******* guitar again, I\'ll wrap it around his neck\'! oohh.
August 8th, 2017 08:43
Matthew 5:20
orchidee said:
Good write Naomi. The way I see that verse, it\'s not meaning we\'re hypocrites. But our righteousness has to exceed (be better than, be more than) the Pharisees. Yet Jesus could mean the TYPE of righteousness, and be saying \'Don\'t be SELF-righteous like the Pharisees. No-one will get into heaven by that means\'!
That\'s how I see it. I don\'t wish to paraphrase the Bible into \'what I think it means\' though.
But that\'s it - they were mucking about with tithing their herbs, being so concerned about that alone, that Jesus calls them hypocrites for it!
August 6th, 2017 09:30
orchidee said:
Good write Naomi. The way I see that verse, it\'s not meaning we\'re hypocrites. But our righteousness has to exceed (be better than, be more than) the Pharisees. Yet Jesus could mean the TYPE of righteousness, and be saying \'Don\'t be SELF-righteous like the Pharisees. No-one will get into heaven by that means\'!
That\'s how I see it. I don\'t wish to paraphrase the Bible into \'what I think it means\' though.
But that\'s it - they were mucking about with tithing their herbs, being so concerned about that alone, that Jesus calls them hypocrites for it!
August 6th, 2017 09:30
Not forgiven
FredPeyer said:
Rayne, I like the writing and the structure. The way you go from the other person to yourself, back to the other and finally back to yourself. Great ending.
I like this one a lot.
August 5th, 2017 22:33
FredPeyer said:
Rayne, I like the writing and the structure. The way you go from the other person to yourself, back to the other and finally back to yourself. Great ending.
I like this one a lot.
August 5th, 2017 22:33
Not forgiven
Accidental Poet said:
THEY are the discusting one, not you. Great write.
August 5th, 2017 21:06
Accidental Poet said:
THEY are the discusting one, not you. Great write.
August 5th, 2017 21:06
Wait
FredPeyer said:
Well I guess Rayne, we just have to wait and see what will happen. Will there be a sequel to this one?
August 1st, 2017 20:38
FredPeyer said:
Well I guess Rayne, we just have to wait and see what will happen. Will there be a sequel to this one?
August 1st, 2017 20:38
The Knots in my stomach
WL Schuett said:
Spewing it out always helps this is a dark but lovely piece
July 31st, 2017 22:05
WL Schuett said:
Spewing it out always helps this is a dark but lovely piece
July 31st, 2017 22:05
The Knots in my stomach
ajithraj said:
uncertainty, impatience, doubt constitute mental agony. it is a nice portrayal of the agony. hopefully the pain will go away.
July 31st, 2017 15:06
ajithraj said:
uncertainty, impatience, doubt constitute mental agony. it is a nice portrayal of the agony. hopefully the pain will go away.
July 31st, 2017 15:06
The Knots in my stomach
Mellowman said:
Naomi, what a gritty, stark and visceral portrayal of the depths of pain our soul can reach. Pure dark beauty! Feel like I have been in that place-Thank you for sharing-Greg (Mellowman)
July 31st, 2017 11:21
Mellowman said:
Naomi, what a gritty, stark and visceral portrayal of the depths of pain our soul can reach. Pure dark beauty! Feel like I have been in that place-Thank you for sharing-Greg (Mellowman)
July 31st, 2017 11:21
To Be a Father
charlesbarrett said:
Beautiful. You must have a good father. I’m sure you’ll find a man with all of those qualities. Don’t settle for less. Great write. Thanks for sharing.
July 26th, 2017 14:20
charlesbarrett said:
Beautiful. You must have a good father. I’m sure you’ll find a man with all of those qualities. Don’t settle for less. Great write. Thanks for sharing.
July 26th, 2017 14:20
My Body
FredPeyer said:
Another very strong poem, Rayne. Honest and from the heart.
July 25th, 2017 18:47
FredPeyer said:
Another very strong poem, Rayne. Honest and from the heart.
July 25th, 2017 18:47
Liberals (free from restraint)
FredPeyer said:
Rayne, I do like your writing, even though I may not understand everything. Love how you wrote \'this unclear state of mental unease\'. Happens to me all the time!
July 25th, 2017 18:43
FredPeyer said:
Rayne, I do like your writing, even though I may not understand everything. Love how you wrote \'this unclear state of mental unease\'. Happens to me all the time!
July 25th, 2017 18:43
Starvation
FredPeyer said:
Rayne, you are not alone. All of us are selfish and cowards, maybe not all the time, but at least sometimes.
Your writing is very powerful and honest. I do like it.
July 25th, 2017 18:38
FredPeyer said:
Rayne, you are not alone. All of us are selfish and cowards, maybe not all the time, but at least sometimes.
Your writing is very powerful and honest. I do like it.
July 25th, 2017 18:38
My Body
charlesbarrett said:
Wow. I really enjoyed this one. I can relate. Straight to my favorites, it goes. Thanks for sharing.
July 25th, 2017 14:44
charlesbarrett said:
Wow. I really enjoyed this one. I can relate. Straight to my favorites, it goes. Thanks for sharing.
July 25th, 2017 14:44
Liberals (free from restraint)
WL Schuett said:
Heartfelt I feel the longing , frustration and then acceptance ...very nice
July 24th, 2017 13:09
WL Schuett said:
Heartfelt I feel the longing , frustration and then acceptance ...very nice
July 24th, 2017 13:09
Liberals (free from restraint)
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME RAYNE ~ Thanks for sharing your poetry. This poem is elegantly penned but also very challenging ! It is something we can empathise with and I love the final denouement ! Yours BRIAN (UK)
July 24th, 2017 09:30
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME RAYNE ~ Thanks for sharing your poetry. This poem is elegantly penned but also very challenging ! It is something we can empathise with and I love the final denouement ! Yours BRIAN (UK)
July 24th, 2017 09:30
Starvation
charlesbarrett said:
Beautiful piece. So vulnerable and raw. An honest plea for help from God. I thouroughly enjoyed this piece. Thank you for sharing with us.
July 23rd, 2017 21:49
charlesbarrett said:
Beautiful piece. So vulnerable and raw. An honest plea for help from God. I thouroughly enjoyed this piece. Thank you for sharing with us.
July 23rd, 2017 21:49
Starvation
Seek said:
Sanita echoed my sentiments. No coward would have the courage to open up with such candor as you did, Touching.
July 23rd, 2017 20:13
Seek said:
Sanita echoed my sentiments. No coward would have the courage to open up with such candor as you did, Touching.
July 23rd, 2017 20:13
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