Comments received on poems by H
Breathe
Goldfinch60 said:
Hi H, further to what Brian has said, yes Haiku is a strict form of poetry of 17 syllables in a 5-7-5 format and Haiku strictly speaking should refer to nature or to the seasons, this one I think deals more with emotion and these are called Senryu with the same layout of 5-7-5.
Good write though and the feeling of freedom comes through the words.
January 9th, 2018 01:58
Goldfinch60 said:
Hi H, further to what Brian has said, yes Haiku is a strict form of poetry of 17 syllables in a 5-7-5 format and Haiku strictly speaking should refer to nature or to the seasons, this one I think deals more with emotion and these are called Senryu with the same layout of 5-7-5.
Good write though and the feeling of freedom comes through the words.
January 9th, 2018 01:58
Breathe
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
HI \"H\" ~ Thanks for your HAIKU and your love of the BICYCLE ~ They are a very important means of transport ~ all over the World ! They are relatively cheap and don\'t need fuel ~ except food ! Did you know they are 200 years old this year ! They were invented in 1818 and called HOBBY HORSES ~ They has solid wheels and no pedals ! You propelled them with your feet ~ OK down hill but you had to push them up ! Strictly a HAIKU in English (or American) should have 17 syllables in three lines 5~7~5 So yours could be revised to:
Air dancing through hair
Faster ~ Faster I peddle
Try to find a way !
Yours is OK as written but some members are very keen that HAIKU should always be 5~7~5 ! Thanks for sharing ~ more please ~ Yours BRIAN XX
January 8th, 2018 20:23
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
HI \"H\" ~ Thanks for your HAIKU and your love of the BICYCLE ~ They are a very important means of transport ~ all over the World ! They are relatively cheap and don\'t need fuel ~ except food ! Did you know they are 200 years old this year ! They were invented in 1818 and called HOBBY HORSES ~ They has solid wheels and no pedals ! You propelled them with your feet ~ OK down hill but you had to push them up ! Strictly a HAIKU in English (or American) should have 17 syllables in three lines 5~7~5 So yours could be revised to:
Air dancing through hair
Faster ~ Faster I peddle
Try to find a way !
Yours is OK as written but some members are very keen that HAIKU should always be 5~7~5 ! Thanks for sharing ~ more please ~ Yours BRIAN XX
January 8th, 2018 20:23
If...
Goldfinch60 said:
If... one of the most misunderstood words in the English Language.
Good write H, welcome to MPS.
January 8th, 2018 01:21
Goldfinch60 said:
If... one of the most misunderstood words in the English Language.
Good write H, welcome to MPS.
January 8th, 2018 01:21
If...
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME \"H\" ~ Thanks for your first Poem ~ it is very BEAUTIFUL ! We all seek to define (In our Poetry and in our Experience !) just WHAT love is. Your Poem alleges it is EXPERIENTIAL ~ and in all we encounter day by day ~ Flowers ~ Sound ~ Art ~ Pain ~ A Trap ~ A Mystery ~ A JOKE ! ~ REAL etc etc ! I\'m an expert and it is all those things and more ! I\'ve spent half my LIFE (17 ~ 34) falling in and out of love ~ and i have relished every minute ! \"Better to have LOVED & LOST than never to have loved at all ! Currently I\'m in LOVE with ANGELA ~ it is REAL and I hope (and pray) it will last for ever ! Tour visual says it perfectly. When your are in love ~ You are riding a Mountain Stream ~ TOGETHER ~ enjoy the calm TOGETHER ~ braving the rapids TOGETHER and even going over the FALLS together (I have done Waterfall Climbs and if you hold hands tight (and pray !) you don\'t die but come up CLOSER TOGETHER ! I\'ve never tried NIAGARA ~ our Falls in the UK are small enough to safely slide down TOGETHER !) I love all your analogies ~ Yours BRIAN UK ~ More poems please ~ please check my Poems ~ You must first Love & Respect yourself in order to Love & Be Loved by others ~ Thanks B XX.
January 7th, 2018 05:13
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME \"H\" ~ Thanks for your first Poem ~ it is very BEAUTIFUL ! We all seek to define (In our Poetry and in our Experience !) just WHAT love is. Your Poem alleges it is EXPERIENTIAL ~ and in all we encounter day by day ~ Flowers ~ Sound ~ Art ~ Pain ~ A Trap ~ A Mystery ~ A JOKE ! ~ REAL etc etc ! I\'m an expert and it is all those things and more ! I\'ve spent half my LIFE (17 ~ 34) falling in and out of love ~ and i have relished every minute ! \"Better to have LOVED & LOST than never to have loved at all ! Currently I\'m in LOVE with ANGELA ~ it is REAL and I hope (and pray) it will last for ever ! Tour visual says it perfectly. When your are in love ~ You are riding a Mountain Stream ~ TOGETHER ~ enjoy the calm TOGETHER ~ braving the rapids TOGETHER and even going over the FALLS together (I have done Waterfall Climbs and if you hold hands tight (and pray !) you don\'t die but come up CLOSER TOGETHER ! I\'ve never tried NIAGARA ~ our Falls in the UK are small enough to safely slide down TOGETHER !) I love all your analogies ~ Yours BRIAN UK ~ More poems please ~ please check my Poems ~ You must first Love & Respect yourself in order to Love & Be Loved by others ~ Thanks B XX.
January 7th, 2018 05:13
If...
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME \"H\" ~ Thanks for your first Poem ~ it is very BEAUTIFUL ! We all seek to define (In our Poetry and in our Experience !) just WHAT love is. Your Poem alleges it is EXPERIENTIAL ~ and in all we encounter day by day ~ Flowers ~ Sound ~ Art ~ Pain ~ A Trap ~ A Mystery ~ A JOKE ! ~ REAL etc etc ! I\'m an expert and it is all those things and more ! I\'ve spent half my LIFE (17 ~ 34) falling in and out of love ~ and i have relished every minute ! \"Better to have LOVED & LOST than never to have loved at all ! Currently I\'m in LOVE with ANGELA ~ it is REAL and I hope (and pray) it will last for ever ! Tour visual says it perfectly. When your are in love ~ You are riding a Mountain Stream ~ TOGETHER ~ enjoy the calm TOGETHER ~ braving the rapids TOGETHER and even going over the FALLS together (I have done Waterfall Climbs and if you hold hands tight (and pray !) you don\'t die but come up CLOSER TOGETHER ! I\'ve never tried NIAGARA ~ our Falls in the UK are small enough to safely slide down TOGETHER !) I love all your analogies ~ Yours BRIAN UK ~ More poems please ~ please check my Poems ~ Thanks B.
January 7th, 2018 05:13
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME \"H\" ~ Thanks for your first Poem ~ it is very BEAUTIFUL ! We all seek to define (In our Poetry and in our Experience !) just WHAT love is. Your Poem alleges it is EXPERIENTIAL ~ and in all we encounter day by day ~ Flowers ~ Sound ~ Art ~ Pain ~ A Trap ~ A Mystery ~ A JOKE ! ~ REAL etc etc ! I\'m an expert and it is all those things and more ! I\'ve spent half my LIFE (17 ~ 34) falling in and out of love ~ and i have relished every minute ! \"Better to have LOVED & LOST than never to have loved at all ! Currently I\'m in LOVE with ANGELA ~ it is REAL and I hope (and pray) it will last for ever ! Tour visual says it perfectly. When your are in love ~ You are riding a Mountain Stream ~ TOGETHER ~ enjoy the calm TOGETHER ~ braving the rapids TOGETHER and even going over the FALLS together (I have done Waterfall Climbs and if you hold hands tight (and pray !) you don\'t die but come up CLOSER TOGETHER ! I\'ve never tried NIAGARA ~ our Falls in the UK are small enough to safely slide down TOGETHER !) I love all your analogies ~ Yours BRIAN UK ~ More poems please ~ please check my Poems ~ Thanks B.
January 7th, 2018 05:13
