Comments received on poems by SOLO
BACK IN THE CORNER
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. Poignant. Excellent! I loved it, but it made me almost want to cry. Wow. I am really impressed with all the images your metaphors created...very fascinating depiction. You drew it all so very well. Excellent!
January 20th, 2011 23:14
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. Poignant. Excellent! I loved it, but it made me almost want to cry. Wow. I am really impressed with all the images your metaphors created...very fascinating depiction. You drew it all so very well. Excellent!
January 20th, 2011 23:14
Touch a little
Nexuscjt said:
Good poem, its similar to a poem I wrote a while back which i'll upload soon. I'm not an expert but I'd say work on the syllabels and try and make it rhyme more...like every paragraph of so.
Love the ending, it reminds me of my lustful days and how much I've grown.
January 3rd, 2011 01:26
Nexuscjt said:
Good poem, its similar to a poem I wrote a while back which i'll upload soon. I'm not an expert but I'd say work on the syllabels and try and make it rhyme more...like every paragraph of so.
Love the ending, it reminds me of my lustful days and how much I've grown.
January 3rd, 2011 01:26
BROKEN LOVE
Cheeky Missy said:
Oh,...but you make me want to cry. This one hurts....if it is only a poem, you did an excellent job of communicating the pain of the broken heart...broken love; and if it is at all for real, which surely seems folk could identify with, then it is all the more touching. Wow. This is excellent.
December 13th, 2010 21:23
Cheeky Missy said:
Oh,...but you make me want to cry. This one hurts....if it is only a poem, you did an excellent job of communicating the pain of the broken heart...broken love; and if it is at all for real, which surely seems folk could identify with, then it is all the more touching. Wow. This is excellent.
December 13th, 2010 21:23
THOUGHTS
Cheeky Missy said:
Very interesting reflections.....akin to the "Live life to the fullest" admonition. And ya, you/we all hope to improve....the new year is fast approaching when some of us make resolutions in that very regard, and mine, frustratingly I usually break. La.
The Lord Who created all does preserve us...would that He save us and preserve us to HIS heavenly kingdom.
It was interesting and I enjoyed reading it.
November 25th, 2010 12:33
Cheeky Missy said:
Very interesting reflections.....akin to the "Live life to the fullest" admonition. And ya, you/we all hope to improve....the new year is fast approaching when some of us make resolutions in that very regard, and mine, frustratingly I usually break. La.
The Lord Who created all does preserve us...would that He save us and preserve us to HIS heavenly kingdom.
It was interesting and I enjoyed reading it.
November 25th, 2010 12:33
Touch a little
Cheeky Missy said:
It is interesting and amusing too......
I like your touches of end-rhyming.
My personal preference is rhymed, rythmic poetry and presently I am studying sonnet-writing....I mention this so that my comment does NOT come off as critical of your work, okay?
Therefore I would suggest more consistent syllables, like 8,6,8,6 or 10,10,10,10 or etc. and a definite metre....iambic, trochaic, etc. and of course more end-rhyming....now, that is only my personal preference in poetry.....
I liked this piece!
Keep writing!
November 18th, 2010 21:38
Cheeky Missy said:
It is interesting and amusing too......
I like your touches of end-rhyming.
My personal preference is rhymed, rythmic poetry and presently I am studying sonnet-writing....I mention this so that my comment does NOT come off as critical of your work, okay?
Therefore I would suggest more consistent syllables, like 8,6,8,6 or 10,10,10,10 or etc. and a definite metre....iambic, trochaic, etc. and of course more end-rhyming....now, that is only my personal preference in poetry.....
I liked this piece!
Keep writing!
November 18th, 2010 21:38
Touch a little
SOLO said:
please leave comments im trying to know what i need to work on....
i need feed back and all that good stuff...
September 8th, 2010 03:20
SOLO said:
please leave comments im trying to know what i need to work on....
i need feed back and all that good stuff...
September 8th, 2010 03:20
