Comments received on poems by Hollow Enigma
The Only Gift I Know
Parisab said:
‘The Only Gift I Know’ is love: taking ideas everywhere and bringing it all back to a singular concept. Nice flow and good to see you again, Hollow…
October 17th, 2023 00:32
Parisab said:
‘The Only Gift I Know’ is love: taking ideas everywhere and bringing it all back to a singular concept. Nice flow and good to see you again, Hollow…
October 17th, 2023 00:32
The Only Gift I Know
Thomas W Case said:
Great use of language and rhyme to compliment the fantastic flow of the poem.
October 15th, 2023 00:28
Thomas W Case said:
Great use of language and rhyme to compliment the fantastic flow of the poem.
October 15th, 2023 00:28
A powerful Stranger
Parisab said:
The mirror reflects us, doubled by cracks
Me and the witch wink, as the angles smile back
Looks like you are starting a good fusion poem…
July 4th, 2023 00:43
Parisab said:
The mirror reflects us, doubled by cracks
Me and the witch wink, as the angles smile back
Looks like you are starting a good fusion poem…
July 4th, 2023 00:43
The brother You Know
Bobby O said:
It really ended cool. In the middle o had to regroup and work a little cuz of the directional shift. Maybe a different transition or maybe not. It’s the cop car line I speak of but after a reread I see the reason you just dropped it that way. Either way it’s a good piece.
April 28th, 2023 20:55
Bobby O said:
It really ended cool. In the middle o had to regroup and work a little cuz of the directional shift. Maybe a different transition or maybe not. It’s the cop car line I speak of but after a reread I see the reason you just dropped it that way. Either way it’s a good piece.
April 28th, 2023 20:55
The brother You Know
David Wakeling said:
This is okay.A tribute to brotherhood.I liked the rhyme
April 25th, 2023 00:54
David Wakeling said:
This is okay.A tribute to brotherhood.I liked the rhyme
April 25th, 2023 00:54
Not Another Self Help on Success
L. B. Mek said:
so well crafted and distilled
showcasing practised wordsmith skills
a literary joy to read, thank you!
\'The learned wrath,
of an adaptive sociopath.\'
April 17th, 2023 03:36
L. B. Mek said:
so well crafted and distilled
showcasing practised wordsmith skills
a literary joy to read, thank you!
\'The learned wrath,
of an adaptive sociopath.\'
April 17th, 2023 03:36
The Fall is Okay
Bobby O said:
Pet you request for suggestions :
After you write a piece , always plan to rewrite it using the content that you put ion paper as a guide. ie:don’t make statements ,, like “!I feel the sand beneath my feet “‘ nobody cares and it’s a nit an interesting statement as it doesn’t draw the reader in.
Instead , using similar content and change sentence structures avoiding standard subject:/!verb format So, that sentence may change to
Beneath me , coarse sand seems to alert , pronouncing, heightening my sense to account for the reduced visual , creeping shade darkening a path , gaining the sense to never Again talk about silly crows best nest for rest going nowhere waste of space lines .,,,
April 16th, 2023 18:09
Bobby O said:
Pet you request for suggestions :
After you write a piece , always plan to rewrite it using the content that you put ion paper as a guide. ie:don’t make statements ,, like “!I feel the sand beneath my feet “‘ nobody cares and it’s a nit an interesting statement as it doesn’t draw the reader in.
Instead , using similar content and change sentence structures avoiding standard subject:/!verb format So, that sentence may change to
Beneath me , coarse sand seems to alert , pronouncing, heightening my sense to account for the reduced visual , creeping shade darkening a path , gaining the sense to never Again talk about silly crows best nest for rest going nowhere waste of space lines .,,,
April 16th, 2023 18:09
The Fall is Okay
Bobby O said:
Nice piece it moves. Points to a moment, and then declares capability.
April 16th, 2023 02:04
Bobby O said:
Nice piece it moves. Points to a moment, and then declares capability.
April 16th, 2023 02:04
To Give Meaning to the Songs that Birds Sing
unbeknownst.to said:
Beautiful. painful. Jesus
January 23rd, 2023 06:36
unbeknownst.to said:
Beautiful. painful. Jesus
January 23rd, 2023 06:36
Keys in Pocket
unbeknownst.to said:
This one is my favorite of all the new ones you have written
January 23rd, 2023 06:33
unbeknownst.to said:
This one is my favorite of all the new ones you have written
January 23rd, 2023 06:33
As Much Choice as Flying While Falling
unbeknownst.to said:
The grass is greener on this side of the fence
January 23rd, 2023 06:29
unbeknownst.to said:
The grass is greener on this side of the fence
January 23rd, 2023 06:29
A Word a Past and an Ultimate Fear
arqios said:
Sends chills reading that.
And couplets a fine hat.
For rhyme or rap it’s good
It’s rhythm’s well understood!
November 24th, 2022 06:01
arqios said:
Sends chills reading that.
And couplets a fine hat.
For rhyme or rap it’s good
It’s rhythm’s well understood!
November 24th, 2022 06:01
A Good Day to the Unpleasant Night
Goldfinch60 said:
Positive ending Jake. I have the way of thinking that every day I get up it is a good day.
Andy
October 16th, 2022 02:52
Goldfinch60 said:
Positive ending Jake. I have the way of thinking that every day I get up it is a good day.
Andy
October 16th, 2022 02:52
To sit and wait or repeat the Mistake
madalynsamantha said:
Beautifully said.❤️
July 15th, 2022 23:06
madalynsamantha said:
Beautifully said.❤️
July 15th, 2022 23:06
Gravity and my fault of self destruction
arqios said:
Decay and the elements are the strangest bedfellows of the human body and soul. Thanks for sharing Jake.
July 10th, 2022 19:41
arqios said:
Decay and the elements are the strangest bedfellows of the human body and soul. Thanks for sharing Jake.
July 10th, 2022 19:41
No Peace Found
L. B. Mek said:
\'I will leave you *now for its time to get dressed
fully clothed but my face is the only thing left\'..
(seek ye, Peace
first learn, defeat
immerse yourself, wholly
within its callous, waters
drink, heartily
vomit and repeat, but
eventually
when you realise, this
but one more
experience of life, so
exaggerated
begin, again
to contemplate, to question
and in those swirling
chaotic, thought clouds
if fate be kind, silence
will come to greet
befriend you and whisper
wisdom, replete
of simplicity\'s
capacity for release
and somewhere, thereafter
a path to peace
you\'ll uncover, your
very own and tailor made
thread carefully, quest bravely
cherish, your journey...)
a wonderful read, thanks for sharing
I wish you peace!
April 21st, 2022 04:40
L. B. Mek said:
\'I will leave you *now for its time to get dressed
fully clothed but my face is the only thing left\'..
(seek ye, Peace
first learn, defeat
immerse yourself, wholly
within its callous, waters
drink, heartily
vomit and repeat, but
eventually
when you realise, this
but one more
experience of life, so
exaggerated
begin, again
to contemplate, to question
and in those swirling
chaotic, thought clouds
if fate be kind, silence
will come to greet
befriend you and whisper
wisdom, replete
of simplicity\'s
capacity for release
and somewhere, thereafter
a path to peace
you\'ll uncover, your
very own and tailor made
thread carefully, quest bravely
cherish, your journey...)
a wonderful read, thanks for sharing
I wish you peace!
April 21st, 2022 04:40
No turning when you can\'t see anyone
L. B. Mek said:
\'10 dollar words complete my selfish mind
what a line..
a great shorty, thanks for sharing
April 15th, 2022 04:42
L. B. Mek said:
\'10 dollar words complete my selfish mind
what a line..
a great shorty, thanks for sharing
April 15th, 2022 04:42
