Comments received on poems by FallingAwake2
Status Quo
jarcher54 said:
The word \"sad\" is a poem all by itself, but your three stanzas are beautiful because they are so real, so relatable, so honest... and pretty damn brave.
June 23rd, 2023 00:06
jarcher54 said:
The word \"sad\" is a poem all by itself, but your three stanzas are beautiful because they are so real, so relatable, so honest... and pretty damn brave.
June 23rd, 2023 00:06
Waiting
jarcher54 said:
This is truly haunting! A lovely thing to read as I turn off the lamp and drift to sleep in the wee wee hours...
June 22nd, 2023 02:52
jarcher54 said:
This is truly haunting! A lovely thing to read as I turn off the lamp and drift to sleep in the wee wee hours...
June 22nd, 2023 02:52
\"Placeholder\" Raw Freestyle
Bobby O said:
I really like this piece on multiple levels. Succinct phrasing w clever metaphor and motion and logical development that delivers w an end that satisfies and proffers artistic inspiration.
Nice write Good Read
June 1st, 2023 00:58
Bobby O said:
I really like this piece on multiple levels. Succinct phrasing w clever metaphor and motion and logical development that delivers w an end that satisfies and proffers artistic inspiration.
Nice write Good Read
June 1st, 2023 00:58
Buried in Blue
Parisab said:
Sorry for your loss-I’m so touched by your poem honoring his memory
April 29th, 2023 02:21
Parisab said:
Sorry for your loss-I’m so touched by your poem honoring his memory
April 29th, 2023 02:21
Buried in Blue
Parisab said:
Very special-the 2nd thru 4th stanza could even stand on its own
April 29th, 2023 00:46
Parisab said:
Very special-the 2nd thru 4th stanza could even stand on its own
April 29th, 2023 00:46
Mopping the River
L. B. Mek said:
so relatable, thanks for sharing
(that cursed cadence of paradox
we seek warmth when we\'re lonely
yet
our pulsing beat is most attractive
when we\'re soaring upon smiles)
April 10th, 2023 05:13
L. B. Mek said:
so relatable, thanks for sharing
(that cursed cadence of paradox
we seek warmth when we\'re lonely
yet
our pulsing beat is most attractive
when we\'re soaring upon smiles)
April 10th, 2023 05:13
Taking My Shot
Doggerel Dave said:
The only redeeming feature of this piece (apart from the fact that it is well constructed) is the rose stuck out of the barrel of the gun.
Noted you live in the United States, so I guess the gun imagery is par for the course with you Guys there.....🙂
February 17th, 2023 19:03
Doggerel Dave said:
The only redeeming feature of this piece (apart from the fact that it is well constructed) is the rose stuck out of the barrel of the gun.
Noted you live in the United States, so I guess the gun imagery is par for the course with you Guys there.....🙂
February 17th, 2023 19:03
Existential Angst
Doggerel Dave said:
I\'ll pay that one; extend it to \"I never asked to be born who I am\" and you have a guiding principle which should not only relate to me but underlie my judgement of others - did they ask to be born the way they are?
February 17th, 2023 18:54
Doggerel Dave said:
I\'ll pay that one; extend it to \"I never asked to be born who I am\" and you have a guiding principle which should not only relate to me but underlie my judgement of others - did they ask to be born the way they are?
February 17th, 2023 18:54
Existential Angst
2781 said:
Lo, they shall all wax old as a garment, the moth shall eat them up.
February 17th, 2023 09:18
2781 said:
Lo, they shall all wax old as a garment, the moth shall eat them up.
February 17th, 2023 09:18
Horny Girl at the Nude Beach
Justa_Geezer said:
How did your imagination find a beach like that, I don\'t know of one like it in UK. Great imagination and well put together fantasy poem. Well written !
September 10th, 2022 07:35
Justa_Geezer said:
How did your imagination find a beach like that, I don\'t know of one like it in UK. Great imagination and well put together fantasy poem. Well written !
September 10th, 2022 07:35
Taking My Shot
Raven333 said:
Love this poem and the rhyme was on point it made it flow beautifully. I think everybody should be locked and loaded in this time and age..
August 9th, 2022 16:45
Raven333 said:
Love this poem and the rhyme was on point it made it flow beautifully. I think everybody should be locked and loaded in this time and age..
August 9th, 2022 16:45
Taking My Shot
tallisman said:
Interpretive poetry, like the play here, great stuff!
August 9th, 2022 03:30
tallisman said:
Interpretive poetry, like the play here, great stuff!
August 9th, 2022 03:30
Ghost Girl
L. B. Mek said:
so, so clever!
from your title, to your structure\'s form and choice wording:
\'Cut short by a sudden change in wind,
Gusts trade vision with my projection.
Reversing in confusion- now I rescind.
For it’s you who holds my attention,\'
just a great write! thanks for sharing
August 2nd, 2022 04:00
L. B. Mek said:
so, so clever!
from your title, to your structure\'s form and choice wording:
\'Cut short by a sudden change in wind,
Gusts trade vision with my projection.
Reversing in confusion- now I rescind.
For it’s you who holds my attention,\'
just a great write! thanks for sharing
August 2nd, 2022 04:00
Ghost Girl
tallisman said:
There is something about this I really like, even though I am confused by it! I am going to have to keep going back to read it again! Well done!
August 2nd, 2022 00:45
tallisman said:
There is something about this I really like, even though I am confused by it! I am going to have to keep going back to read it again! Well done!
August 2nd, 2022 00:45
Love Lost [OC]
Raven333 said:
Liked your poem, even though short it conveyed a lot. loved the rhyme made it flow great.
July 27th, 2022 20:06
Raven333 said:
Liked your poem, even though short it conveyed a lot. loved the rhyme made it flow great.
July 27th, 2022 20:06
Euthanasia After a Suicide Attempt: A True Story
Crowns4Christ said:
So heartbreaking,,I\'m sorry
March 22nd, 2022 17:29
Crowns4Christ said:
So heartbreaking,,I\'m sorry
March 22nd, 2022 17:29
Flowers on Fire
L. B. Mek said:
wonderful imagery, and such a well measured poem
I wish, a painter like Caravaggio
had made an immersive oil painting
of a similar image, you used
as accompaniment to your words..
and I wish, I had the talent
to write
such brilliantly expressive, relatable
and yet, simultaneously
compendious, stanzas:
\'Magnified by your light,
the sun that once pulled me up,
is setting my garden on fire.
Fueled by my extended drought,
and my failure to keep up with the weeds,
I’m burning fast; I’m burning bright.
My roots once around each other’s necks,
shrivel from the blackening smoke-
I’m letting go of my hold on myself.\'
March 17th, 2022 04:23
L. B. Mek said:
wonderful imagery, and such a well measured poem
I wish, a painter like Caravaggio
had made an immersive oil painting
of a similar image, you used
as accompaniment to your words..
and I wish, I had the talent
to write
such brilliantly expressive, relatable
and yet, simultaneously
compendious, stanzas:
\'Magnified by your light,
the sun that once pulled me up,
is setting my garden on fire.
Fueled by my extended drought,
and my failure to keep up with the weeds,
I’m burning fast; I’m burning bright.
My roots once around each other’s necks,
shrivel from the blackening smoke-
I’m letting go of my hold on myself.\'
March 17th, 2022 04:23
Flowers on Fire
Buzz Bray said:
\"It’s too cold out to ignite you.\" Very interesting vocabulary. Good luck igniting them.
March 16th, 2022 22:06
Buzz Bray said:
\"It’s too cold out to ignite you.\" Very interesting vocabulary. Good luck igniting them.
March 16th, 2022 22:06
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