Comments received on poems by FallingAwake2
Taking My Shot
Raven333 said:
Love this poem and the rhyme was on point it made it flow beautifully. I think everybody should be locked and loaded in this time and age..
August 9th, 2022 16:45
Raven333 said:
Love this poem and the rhyme was on point it made it flow beautifully. I think everybody should be locked and loaded in this time and age..
August 9th, 2022 16:45
Taking My Shot
tallisman said:
Interpretive poetry, like the play here, great stuff!
August 9th, 2022 03:30
tallisman said:
Interpretive poetry, like the play here, great stuff!
August 9th, 2022 03:30
Ghost Girl
L. B. Mek said:
so, so clever!
from your title, to your structure\'s form and choice wording:
\'Cut short by a sudden change in wind,
Gusts trade vision with my projection.
Reversing in confusion- now I rescind.
For it’s you who holds my attention,\'
just a great write! thanks for sharing
August 2nd, 2022 04:00
L. B. Mek said:
so, so clever!
from your title, to your structure\'s form and choice wording:
\'Cut short by a sudden change in wind,
Gusts trade vision with my projection.
Reversing in confusion- now I rescind.
For it’s you who holds my attention,\'
just a great write! thanks for sharing
August 2nd, 2022 04:00
Ghost Girl
tallisman said:
There is something about this I really like, even though I am confused by it! I am going to have to keep going back to read it again! Well done!
August 2nd, 2022 00:45
tallisman said:
There is something about this I really like, even though I am confused by it! I am going to have to keep going back to read it again! Well done!
August 2nd, 2022 00:45
Love Lost [OC]
Raven333 said:
Liked your poem, even though short it conveyed a lot. loved the rhyme made it flow great.
July 27th, 2022 20:06
Raven333 said:
Liked your poem, even though short it conveyed a lot. loved the rhyme made it flow great.
July 27th, 2022 20:06
Euthanasia After a Suicide Attempt: A True Story
Crowns4Christ said:
So heartbreaking,,I\'m sorry
March 22nd, 2022 17:29
Crowns4Christ said:
So heartbreaking,,I\'m sorry
March 22nd, 2022 17:29
Flowers on Fire
L. B. Mek said:
wonderful imagery, and such a well measured poem
I wish, a painter like Caravaggio
had made an immersive oil painting
of a similar image, you used
as accompaniment to your words..
and I wish, I had the talent
to write
such brilliantly expressive, relatable
and yet, simultaneously
compendious, stanzas:
\'Magnified by your light,
the sun that once pulled me up,
is setting my garden on fire.
Fueled by my extended drought,
and my failure to keep up with the weeds,
I’m burning fast; I’m burning bright.
My roots once around each other’s necks,
shrivel from the blackening smoke-
I’m letting go of my hold on myself.\'
March 17th, 2022 04:23
L. B. Mek said:
wonderful imagery, and such a well measured poem
I wish, a painter like Caravaggio
had made an immersive oil painting
of a similar image, you used
as accompaniment to your words..
and I wish, I had the talent
to write
such brilliantly expressive, relatable
and yet, simultaneously
compendious, stanzas:
\'Magnified by your light,
the sun that once pulled me up,
is setting my garden on fire.
Fueled by my extended drought,
and my failure to keep up with the weeds,
I’m burning fast; I’m burning bright.
My roots once around each other’s necks,
shrivel from the blackening smoke-
I’m letting go of my hold on myself.\'
March 17th, 2022 04:23
Flowers on Fire
Buzz Bray said:
\"It’s too cold out to ignite you.\" Very interesting vocabulary. Good luck igniting them.
March 16th, 2022 22:06
Buzz Bray said:
\"It’s too cold out to ignite you.\" Very interesting vocabulary. Good luck igniting them.
March 16th, 2022 22:06
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