Comments received on poems by abpoet18
Mister Mr
burning-embers said:
Nice one mister. Conundrum is if you hates to be learning you aint gonna have much to teach people. You needs to keep learning or do you disagree?
Nice piece of work mister.
July 16th, 2017 17:02
burning-embers said:
Nice one mister. Conundrum is if you hates to be learning you aint gonna have much to teach people. You needs to keep learning or do you disagree?
Nice piece of work mister.
July 16th, 2017 17:02
Room Smile
Nicholas Browning said:
The guilt we try to hold will only bury you. Indeed. As humans, we sin. I find it funny how any of us have made it this far.
July 6th, 2017 09:52
Nicholas Browning said:
The guilt we try to hold will only bury you. Indeed. As humans, we sin. I find it funny how any of us have made it this far.
July 6th, 2017 09:52
Guide You Home
Goldfinch60 said:
Good write, there are many who try to reach out to each other but so many others who try to stop it happening.
July 6th, 2017 01:14
Goldfinch60 said:
Good write, there are many who try to reach out to each other but so many others who try to stop it happening.
July 6th, 2017 01:14
Guide You Home
FredPeyer said:
Thanks for a great poem. Loved the line \"Greatness grows from dirt\" a lot.
There is more to us, it\'s just that a lot of us haven\'t realized it yet.
July 5th, 2017 10:38
FredPeyer said:
Thanks for a great poem. Loved the line \"Greatness grows from dirt\" a lot.
There is more to us, it\'s just that a lot of us haven\'t realized it yet.
July 5th, 2017 10:38
Guide You Home
burning-embers said:
You\'re right, there HAS TO BE more to us. Sadly, though you and i would reach out, there are so many barriers erected by the blind.
July 5th, 2017 09:47
burning-embers said:
You\'re right, there HAS TO BE more to us. Sadly, though you and i would reach out, there are so many barriers erected by the blind.
July 5th, 2017 09:47
Guide You Home
Stephen.Sapaugh said:
I\'m glad that you are putting pen to paper. However, I think the use of home in this poem is over used, multiple lines fail in the regards of meter and rhyme.
Lets take for instance the line \"Simple minded in a world corrupt we can\'t do\". This line has no inherent meaning. Wouldn\'t it better be put better like this Ignorant in a world diseased and we can\'t think
Anything about it except accept death ?
Then you have a flow between your last two lines, and it completes a thought.
The alliteration is really good in certain lines like ...except accept death, Greatness grows.., populations so polluted. However, the poem fails to actually convey full thoughts, and the vocab could use some work.
If I were to grade this poem I would give it a 5/10. I hope you keep writing, and improve on your flaws. Because, ultimately that is how we all get better. Also, I invite you to critique my poems. I\'m glad you are writing poetry, and I think you will do well to keep writing. That is the only way that we improve.
July 5th, 2017 09:44
Stephen.Sapaugh said:
I\'m glad that you are putting pen to paper. However, I think the use of home in this poem is over used, multiple lines fail in the regards of meter and rhyme.
Lets take for instance the line \"Simple minded in a world corrupt we can\'t do\". This line has no inherent meaning. Wouldn\'t it better be put better like this Ignorant in a world diseased and we can\'t think
Anything about it except accept death ?
Then you have a flow between your last two lines, and it completes a thought.
The alliteration is really good in certain lines like ...except accept death, Greatness grows.., populations so polluted. However, the poem fails to actually convey full thoughts, and the vocab could use some work.
If I were to grade this poem I would give it a 5/10. I hope you keep writing, and improve on your flaws. Because, ultimately that is how we all get better. Also, I invite you to critique my poems. I\'m glad you are writing poetry, and I think you will do well to keep writing. That is the only way that we improve.
July 5th, 2017 09:44
Guide You Home
Renzi said:
I myself read this twice. A good write. Very thought provoking.
July 5th, 2017 09:44
Renzi said:
I myself read this twice. A good write. Very thought provoking.
July 5th, 2017 09:44
Fleetwood Mac - \"The Chain\" (ABPoetry Remix)
onepauly said:
Fleetwood mac.
I have a cd. I used to have it on vyenal
or an album anyway.
bare trees is another good album by them. I had it in the early 70\"s
July 2nd, 2017 19:57
onepauly said:
Fleetwood mac.
I have a cd. I used to have it on vyenal
or an album anyway.
bare trees is another good album by them. I had it in the early 70\"s
July 2nd, 2017 19:57
Wicked Witches
FredPeyer said:
You write well, and you definitely have some valid points, but I am more of an optimist and believe that good will eventually prevail.
June 25th, 2017 12:02
FredPeyer said:
You write well, and you definitely have some valid points, but I am more of an optimist and believe that good will eventually prevail.
June 25th, 2017 12:02
Beauty Described Pt.1
Fay Slimm. said:
Loud applause for this shout of poetic reasons why love must be patient - - like the flow and form of this read AB. Thanks for sharing its passionate honesty.
May 30th, 2017 11:06
Fay Slimm. said:
Loud applause for this shout of poetic reasons why love must be patient - - like the flow and form of this read AB. Thanks for sharing its passionate honesty.
May 30th, 2017 11:06
Lost One
swingline said:
It\'s amazing how society has isolated each individual out . Singled them out so they can easily be controlled . There is strength in number but weakness alone . Great words , enjoyed reading .
May 24th, 2017 12:01
swingline said:
It\'s amazing how society has isolated each individual out . Singled them out so they can easily be controlled . There is strength in number but weakness alone . Great words , enjoyed reading .
May 24th, 2017 12:01
Make It Clear
Aamina said:
Really good write and very relevant to today\' s world
May 22nd, 2017 14:58
Aamina said:
Really good write and very relevant to today\' s world
May 22nd, 2017 14:58
Maybe This Will Be My Cure
swingline said:
An occupied body (doing things) leaves no time to be occupied (in thought) by them . You are what you make out of yourself . Don\'t let others make you .
May 8th, 2017 12:26
swingline said:
An occupied body (doing things) leaves no time to be occupied (in thought) by them . You are what you make out of yourself . Don\'t let others make you .
May 8th, 2017 12:26
5:26
Goldfinch60 said:
Good positive write.
\"the next 90 minutes I want you to dance and let your troubles go\"
I have been dancing the same dance for the last fifty odd years!
April 24th, 2017 01:14
Goldfinch60 said:
Good positive write.
\"the next 90 minutes I want you to dance and let your troubles go\"
I have been dancing the same dance for the last fifty odd years!
April 24th, 2017 01:14
5:26
Emil Cerda said:
Excellent poem. \"let me build a dam for you when there\'s no drought...\" i like this part.
April 23rd, 2017 09:47
Emil Cerda said:
Excellent poem. \"let me build a dam for you when there\'s no drought...\" i like this part.
April 23rd, 2017 09:47
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