Comments received on poems by Poetic Licence
Heart of Relief.
arqios said:
This is dark, visceral, and unflinching, Natiella. It plunges into the depths of despair and the surrender of self to end unbearable suffering. Its imagery is raw; bone, blood, and the physical tearing out of grief and yet the final moment delivers a chilling kind of peace: harm is no longer possible. A haunting meditation on the cost of release.
August 15th, 2025 20:45
arqios said:
This is dark, visceral, and unflinching, Natiella. It plunges into the depths of despair and the surrender of self to end unbearable suffering. Its imagery is raw; bone, blood, and the physical tearing out of grief and yet the final moment delivers a chilling kind of peace: harm is no longer possible. A haunting meditation on the cost of release.
August 15th, 2025 20:45
Heart of Relief.
Cheeky Missy said:
Dang! Yet another version of the infamous Dr. Faustus, perhaps one more readily digestible by this modern intellect. Macabre and ghastly with excellent imagery and a haunting poignancy, rendered so vividly I well- nigh shiver instinctively. Alas! Thank you for sharing.
August 15th, 2025 12:40
Cheeky Missy said:
Dang! Yet another version of the infamous Dr. Faustus, perhaps one more readily digestible by this modern intellect. Macabre and ghastly with excellent imagery and a haunting poignancy, rendered so vividly I well- nigh shiver instinctively. Alas! Thank you for sharing.
August 15th, 2025 12:40
Aspersions.
Tony Grannell said:
Hello, Tobani,
A little bit of everything and not too much of anything, the perfect balance but how to maintain this balance perfectly expressed in this very fine poem of yours. A conundrum indeed.
Fond regards,
Tony.
August 15th, 2025 11:17
Tony Grannell said:
Hello, Tobani,
A little bit of everything and not too much of anything, the perfect balance but how to maintain this balance perfectly expressed in this very fine poem of yours. A conundrum indeed.
Fond regards,
Tony.
August 15th, 2025 11:17
Heart of Relief.
Poetic Dan said:
Wow.. hang on!
Just went in for a 2nd dive
Rocked me to the core
Yet my tears ran dry
The next breath taken
Now I feel so alive
I need to free myself as you have described, with a flow that connects me back to my hive.
Endless appreciated with peace and respect
August 15th, 2025 10:30
Poetic Dan said:
Wow.. hang on!
Just went in for a 2nd dive
Rocked me to the core
Yet my tears ran dry
The next breath taken
Now I feel so alive
I need to free myself as you have described, with a flow that connects me back to my hive.
Endless appreciated with peace and respect
August 15th, 2025 10:30
Heart of Relief.
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Tobani, this is raw and visceral…you don’t hold back on the imagery or the weight of that deal with the devil. The closing line hits like a cold, final release. Very strong work, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛ A fave!
August 15th, 2025 10:01
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Tobani, this is raw and visceral…you don’t hold back on the imagery or the weight of that deal with the devil. The closing line hits like a cold, final release. Very strong work, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛ A fave!
August 15th, 2025 10:01
Loving Hate
rebellion_in_sanity said:
Can\'t agree more. Beautiful and uplifting
August 15th, 2025 06:26
rebellion_in_sanity said:
Can\'t agree more. Beautiful and uplifting
August 15th, 2025 06:26
Heart of Relief.
sorenbarrett said:
A poem of torment where suicide is seen as a protection against future harm. Graphic it the form of Mayan or Aztec sacrifice it yells out to the reader of pain. Nicely done Tobani
August 15th, 2025 05:02
sorenbarrett said:
A poem of torment where suicide is seen as a protection against future harm. Graphic it the form of Mayan or Aztec sacrifice it yells out to the reader of pain. Nicely done Tobani
August 15th, 2025 05:02
Heart of Relief.
orchidee said:
Please excuse me while I go and be sick! Bit queasy after this- Bleeuurgghh! lol.
August 15th, 2025 02:52
orchidee said:
Please excuse me while I go and be sick! Bit queasy after this- Bleeuurgghh! lol.
August 15th, 2025 02:52
Aspersions.
Goldfinch60 said:
Normality is the way to lead our lives Tobani.
Andy
August 15th, 2025 01:07
Goldfinch60 said:
Normality is the way to lead our lives Tobani.
Andy
August 15th, 2025 01:07
Aspersions.
Cheeky Missy said:
Not exactly symantics, yet bordering on the same, this is a fun philosophical discussion indeed. Aspersions, eh? \"Judge not and ye shall not be judged--\" seems apropos. Since I cannot justify myself, guess I prefer to avoid the discussion altogether. Charming and beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a haunting poignancy indeed. Thank you very much for sharing.
August 14th, 2025 12:26
Cheeky Missy said:
Not exactly symantics, yet bordering on the same, this is a fun philosophical discussion indeed. Aspersions, eh? \"Judge not and ye shall not be judged--\" seems apropos. Since I cannot justify myself, guess I prefer to avoid the discussion altogether. Charming and beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a haunting poignancy indeed. Thank you very much for sharing.
August 14th, 2025 12:26
Aspersions.
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Tobani, this is a measured weighing of scales, my dear firend…turning over every angle until you land on the simple truth of just being. The steady rhyme makes the reasoning all the more grounded. Nicely done. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛ A fave!
August 14th, 2025 11:45
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Tobani, this is a measured weighing of scales, my dear firend…turning over every angle until you land on the simple truth of just being. The steady rhyme makes the reasoning all the more grounded. Nicely done. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛ A fave!
August 14th, 2025 11:45
Aspersions.
Damaso said:
I\'d like to live peacefully with little, although there are people who want more and more, and that\'s fine with them. Dignity is the driving force. Thanks for sharing. Best regards.
August 14th, 2025 11:06
Damaso said:
I\'d like to live peacefully with little, although there are people who want more and more, and that\'s fine with them. Dignity is the driving force. Thanks for sharing. Best regards.
August 14th, 2025 11:06
Aspersions.
Neville said:
I like the fact you admit to just playing around .. however you have played an absolute blinder here my friend .. I\'m so glad I felt inclined to check in .. Neville
August 14th, 2025 11:03
Neville said:
I like the fact you admit to just playing around .. however you have played an absolute blinder here my friend .. I\'m so glad I felt inclined to check in .. Neville
August 14th, 2025 11:03
Wise Man Say (20).
rebellion_in_sanity said:
I wish we had those wise men….and I rest my case. Fantastic work.
August 14th, 2025 10:16
rebellion_in_sanity said:
I wish we had those wise men….and I rest my case. Fantastic work.
August 14th, 2025 10:16
Glad She Survived!!!.
rebellion_in_sanity said:
My friend, something profound descended on your pen. Few lines which carry an almost unbearable burden. Loved it
August 14th, 2025 10:08
rebellion_in_sanity said:
My friend, something profound descended on your pen. Few lines which carry an almost unbearable burden. Loved it
August 14th, 2025 10:08
STARVATION.
rebellion_in_sanity said:
The modern times need strong medicine. I found that spark in the poem. Well done my friend. 🙏
August 14th, 2025 10:03
rebellion_in_sanity said:
The modern times need strong medicine. I found that spark in the poem. Well done my friend. 🙏
August 14th, 2025 10:03
Aspersions.
Teddy.15 said:
Anyone with or without a conscience would enjoy this. 🌹 🤣 Those who have one will be frowning those without will be proud. lol most enjoyed 🌹
August 14th, 2025 09:31
Teddy.15 said:
Anyone with or without a conscience would enjoy this. 🌹 🤣 Those who have one will be frowning those without will be proud. lol most enjoyed 🌹
August 14th, 2025 09:31
Aspersions.
arqios said:
That’s the way of things in human relations, quite a range of calibrations and it’s ever changing. 🙏🏻🕊️
August 14th, 2025 06:08
arqios said:
That’s the way of things in human relations, quite a range of calibrations and it’s ever changing. 🙏🏻🕊️
August 14th, 2025 06:08
Aspersions.
sorenbarrett said:
A Marxist idea that didn\'t quite work due to man\'s nature toward corruption and greed but a most interesting idea none the less. Too bad that most men\'s nature is not a giving one. A fun read my friend
August 14th, 2025 04:09
sorenbarrett said:
A Marxist idea that didn\'t quite work due to man\'s nature toward corruption and greed but a most interesting idea none the less. Too bad that most men\'s nature is not a giving one. A fun read my friend
August 14th, 2025 04:09
The Comedown.
Goldfinch60 said:
I hope you enjoyed the bottle Tobani. Cheers.
Andy
August 14th, 2025 01:19
Goldfinch60 said:
I hope you enjoyed the bottle Tobani. Cheers.
Andy
August 14th, 2025 01:19
Standing Alone.
Gershon Wolf said:
Wow. I can identify with this one, Nataiella.
August 13th, 2025 21:26
Gershon Wolf said:
Wow. I can identify with this one, Nataiella.
August 13th, 2025 21:26
Sound Investment. (Senryu)
Gershon Wolf said:
I love this \'prospectus.\' Short, sweet; straight to the point. ~ Gershon
August 13th, 2025 21:24
Gershon Wolf said:
I love this \'prospectus.\' Short, sweet; straight to the point. ~ Gershon
August 13th, 2025 21:24
Grace and Dignity.
Gershon Wolf said:
Oooh. This one hits me right in the solar plexus. As if it singled me out to point its finger right at me. Yikes, Gershon
August 13th, 2025 21:19
Gershon Wolf said:
Oooh. This one hits me right in the solar plexus. As if it singled me out to point its finger right at me. Yikes, Gershon
August 13th, 2025 21:19
The Comedown.
Cheeky Missy said:
Ahem. I see, you and he have had a teté-a-teté. God\'s rendition puts the devil to shame, which is why he advises you against God\'s and tells us what to think. So far as I can see his lies are the closest he can get to attaining what is forbidden him, \"...I shall be as God--\" as we see what happened to our first parents when they believed that lie and disobeyed. But enough. Twas the reason souls imbibe mind-altering substances. Beautifully rendered in delightful brevity with a curious poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
August 13th, 2025 13:23
Cheeky Missy said:
Ahem. I see, you and he have had a teté-a-teté. God\'s rendition puts the devil to shame, which is why he advises you against God\'s and tells us what to think. So far as I can see his lies are the closest he can get to attaining what is forbidden him, \"...I shall be as God--\" as we see what happened to our first parents when they believed that lie and disobeyed. But enough. Twas the reason souls imbibe mind-altering substances. Beautifully rendered in delightful brevity with a curious poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
August 13th, 2025 13:23
The Comedown.
MendedFences27 said:
Words of wisdom. However, God is now watching you. Or is it the Devil. Whatever, you are in deep trouble. Your muse may go missing and be held for ransom Sorry I couldn\'t resist. - Phil A..
August 13th, 2025 11:55
MendedFences27 said:
Words of wisdom. However, God is now watching you. Or is it the Devil. Whatever, you are in deep trouble. Your muse may go missing and be held for ransom Sorry I couldn\'t resist. - Phil A..
August 13th, 2025 11:55
The Comedown.
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Tobani, these hit like quick jolts…sharp and stripped to the bone. The brevity makes them linger…letting the weight of each moment settle in after the words are gone. Powerful snapshots, my friend. A total fave and I hope more see it my way! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 13th, 2025 11:04
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Tobani, these hit like quick jolts…sharp and stripped to the bone. The brevity makes them linger…letting the weight of each moment settle in after the words are gone. Powerful snapshots, my friend. A total fave and I hope more see it my way! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 13th, 2025 11:04
The Comedown.
Soman Ragavan said:
\"Devil Said Hello Brother....\" This turn of phrase is mind-blowing !... One wonders what reply he got... By the way, is the devil always a \"he\" ?!...
August 13th, 2025 10:59
Soman Ragavan said:
\"Devil Said Hello Brother....\" This turn of phrase is mind-blowing !... One wonders what reply he got... By the way, is the devil always a \"he\" ?!...
August 13th, 2025 10:59
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