Comments received on poems by Abdullah123
God gives us Wealth
Friendship said:
Nicely written. Your poem addresses the concept of wealth as a gift from God and the anxiety that accompanies it.
April 13th, 2026 07:21
Friendship said:
Nicely written. Your poem addresses the concept of wealth as a gift from God and the anxiety that accompanies it.
April 13th, 2026 07:21
God gives us Wealth
sorenbarrett said:
It is the last two lines that tie the rest of this poem together and give it greater meaning. Very nicely said a fave
April 13th, 2026 06:31
sorenbarrett said:
It is the last two lines that tie the rest of this poem together and give it greater meaning. Very nicely said a fave
April 13th, 2026 06:31
Needlework
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Abdullah, this hit me hard…that suffocating overlap between observer and sufferer feels inescapable. The detail of the tubes like snakes turns the moment into something invasive and alive, and it deepens that helpless waiting…like reality should shift, but won’t. It lingers in a heavy way. Strong work. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
April 12th, 2026 09:50
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Abdullah, this hit me hard…that suffocating overlap between observer and sufferer feels inescapable. The detail of the tubes like snakes turns the moment into something invasive and alive, and it deepens that helpless waiting…like reality should shift, but won’t. It lingers in a heavy way. Strong work. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
April 12th, 2026 09:50
5:10 AM
DeadRose said:
Beautifully written. It\'s the small things that stick with us. There\'s always something special about home food, especially made from your mother during Ramadan. Desi food is always lovingly made.
(from a first gen Pakistani in America)
April 11th, 2026 21:52
DeadRose said:
Beautifully written. It\'s the small things that stick with us. There\'s always something special about home food, especially made from your mother during Ramadan. Desi food is always lovingly made.
(from a first gen Pakistani in America)
April 11th, 2026 21:52
Needlework
sorenbarrett said:
This sounds so much like the delusions of the dying. Well written
April 11th, 2026 19:37
sorenbarrett said:
This sounds so much like the delusions of the dying. Well written
April 11th, 2026 19:37
Spectacle
sorenbarrett said:
I like the introduction of colors in this piece they seem symbolic of various things. Nicely written
April 7th, 2026 19:31
sorenbarrett said:
I like the introduction of colors in this piece they seem symbolic of various things. Nicely written
April 7th, 2026 19:31
5:10 AM
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Abdullah, there’s a quiet, grounded tenderness here…family, routine, small gestures that say more than words. That image of the paratha anchors it, and everything around it builds into something deeply human. It feels lived, not written. Well done. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
April 6th, 2026 09:39
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Abdullah, there’s a quiet, grounded tenderness here…family, routine, small gestures that say more than words. That image of the paratha anchors it, and everything around it builds into something deeply human. It feels lived, not written. Well done. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
April 6th, 2026 09:39
5:10 AM
Doggerel Dave said:
A window into another culture and lifestyle to mine with cross cultural elements (LA??). Stimulates my imagination for the relationships underlying it all. Thanks.
April 6th, 2026 06:05
Doggerel Dave said:
A window into another culture and lifestyle to mine with cross cultural elements (LA??). Stimulates my imagination for the relationships underlying it all. Thanks.
April 6th, 2026 06:05
5:10 AM
sorenbarrett said:
This rings true with so many things, a mothers care for her child, a child\'s independence growing and the conflict between the two. Very nicely written in poetic form
April 6th, 2026 04:31
sorenbarrett said:
This rings true with so many things, a mothers care for her child, a child\'s independence growing and the conflict between the two. Very nicely written in poetic form
April 6th, 2026 04:31
Jenga
Lorenz said:
It is right that the towers of the night should come crashing down !
April 5th, 2026 13:16
Lorenz said:
It is right that the towers of the night should come crashing down !
April 5th, 2026 13:16
Jenga
sorenbarrett said:
Entropy always has the last play and where will we get the energy to reconstruct. Nicely written in great metaphor
April 5th, 2026 11:56
sorenbarrett said:
Entropy always has the last play and where will we get the energy to reconstruct. Nicely written in great metaphor
April 5th, 2026 11:56
Jenga
MendedFences27 said:
Very good metaphor. It leaves a classic image of the world as a tower or building being destroyed by mankind. I don\'t think we\'ll all laugh at the end. - Phil A.
April 5th, 2026 11:39
MendedFences27 said:
Very good metaphor. It leaves a classic image of the world as a tower or building being destroyed by mankind. I don\'t think we\'ll all laugh at the end. - Phil A.
April 5th, 2026 11:39
Jenga
Demar Desu said:
Creation and destruction…. The more we create and the more we support creators I believe will give us better enjoyment of life…
The more we destroy… well we will have nothing left. This poem is so great
April 5th, 2026 09:53
Demar Desu said:
Creation and destruction…. The more we create and the more we support creators I believe will give us better enjoyment of life…
The more we destroy… well we will have nothing left. This poem is so great
April 5th, 2026 09:53
In Loving Memory of my Grandmother
Tristan Robert Lange said:
My friend, “he killed her in my mind”…that line locks everything in place. It reframes the whole interaction into something psychological and immediate. That stays. Beautifully done. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
April 4th, 2026 13:14
Tristan Robert Lange said:
My friend, “he killed her in my mind”…that line locks everything in place. It reframes the whole interaction into something psychological and immediate. That stays. Beautifully done. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
April 4th, 2026 13:14
In Loving Memory of my Grandmother
sorenbarrett said:
Sad and chilling it speaks to so many emotions. Relation to both it is evident where loyalty lies. Mind\'s interpretations and a judge with narrow vision, seeing the world with blinders on both eyes. One can not judge until one can see all sides yet we can not. The line in the poem \"in my mind\" sets it in perspective. There is lack of communication and in the silence a verdict is given, sentencing complete the accused and arising before the court accepts the sentence walking out the door. The question remains is the leaving in guilt or defiance and his vision no better than yours just from a different perspective. Well written
April 4th, 2026 06:41
sorenbarrett said:
Sad and chilling it speaks to so many emotions. Relation to both it is evident where loyalty lies. Mind\'s interpretations and a judge with narrow vision, seeing the world with blinders on both eyes. One can not judge until one can see all sides yet we can not. The line in the poem \"in my mind\" sets it in perspective. There is lack of communication and in the silence a verdict is given, sentencing complete the accused and arising before the court accepts the sentence walking out the door. The question remains is the leaving in guilt or defiance and his vision no better than yours just from a different perspective. Well written
April 4th, 2026 06:41
Debut Poetry Chapbook!!
Doggerel Dave said:
For someone age 14 - 15 you display wisdom and knowledge beyond your years.
January 24th, 2026 18:19
Doggerel Dave said:
For someone age 14 - 15 you display wisdom and knowledge beyond your years.
January 24th, 2026 18:19
Waiting for Green
sorenbarrett said:
Tense a feeling of being trapped and unable to move, attacked from front and back. There is a good deal of tension in this poem. Well written
January 18th, 2026 04:33
sorenbarrett said:
Tense a feeling of being trapped and unable to move, attacked from front and back. There is a good deal of tension in this poem. Well written
January 18th, 2026 04:33
Patchwork
sorenbarrett said:
Stated so matter of factly the lying seems a trait rather that an incident it comes out cold and naturally as if there was no other logical response. I love the metaphor of patches. Well done
January 11th, 2026 04:20
sorenbarrett said:
Stated so matter of factly the lying seems a trait rather that an incident it comes out cold and naturally as if there was no other logical response. I love the metaphor of patches. Well done
January 11th, 2026 04:20
Staring Contest
sorenbarrett said:
I love the subtle yet so intricate meaning in this poem. To one that does not see it, it can not be adequately explained but it like shadows in a hall of mirrors holds inverted and complex meanings of what one already knows so well but now sees differently. There are many levels here. A fave
December 30th, 2025 05:07
sorenbarrett said:
I love the subtle yet so intricate meaning in this poem. To one that does not see it, it can not be adequately explained but it like shadows in a hall of mirrors holds inverted and complex meanings of what one already knows so well but now sees differently. There are many levels here. A fave
December 30th, 2025 05:07
Judgement
sorenbarrett said:
So biblical in nature this poem walks out of the book of Revelations. It is in the same way Gothic in nature as is the biblical book. It is a piece from another time period. Very nicely rhymed and metered
November 4th, 2025 07:46
sorenbarrett said:
So biblical in nature this poem walks out of the book of Revelations. It is in the same way Gothic in nature as is the biblical book. It is a piece from another time period. Very nicely rhymed and metered
November 4th, 2025 07:46
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