Is It Too Soon To Love You?
Fred1794 said:

Beautifully impatient in its repetition. I can feel the sense of falling in love easily and quickly quite perfectly. I wish you luck.

September 14th, 2025 19:28

Is It Too Soon To Love You?
Jasper said:

Okay, a lot of brilliance in this poem. I absolutely adore these images and metaphors. This poem does a good job of conveying the sweet pain of the tantalization of love. It is great. These lines are especially poignant - \"Time bends when I\'m near, / Like the light through a prism\'s hue. / Feeling\'s bloom like flowers, / Is it too soon to love you?\"
Also I feel like some of this poem was written in meter but I cannot quite tell. It\'s like WANTING to be in meter, which if you did that on purpose is brilliant because it would correspond with how you want to be in love.

Only a couple suggestions, though.
The last line is moderately confusing and I think its preceding line would make for a stronger ending. I think you may have just left it in for the rhyme.
Omit \"Feels like\" in the second line. What affect does it really produce? It negates the power of the metaphor. \"My heart\'s got its own clock\" would do just fine.

I really like this. Delightful metaphors in here, seriously man, like damn. Keep it up, I look forward to reading future stuff. 👍👍


September 14th, 2025 18:08