Comments received on poems by samishere


Thanks for reminding us SAM ! 17 ah yes i remember it well '~ but i'm twice that age now and I can't afford to be so "Fun and fancy free !" 17 - 24 life and love's seven year apprenticeship foe all Young Men ~ when we fell in and out of bed as often as we fell in and out of LOVE ! Thanks for sharing ~ BRIAN

August 19th, 2016 18:41

Tropicana said:

'the moon gave use comfort' because when it's night you dream 'the sun washed out the life' because during day you have to get up and can't dream? am I right in these connations? loved it btw you couldn't tell you've been 'struggling creatively' by reading this more like this plz

June 29th, 2016 12:34

Dee said:

Emotional and heart felt poem Samishere, with clear images and a nice flow to your chosen words..Your loneliness runs through this work . and some lines I especially love -

I dreamt of her long long ago
watched by stars we danced
the moon gave us comfort
but the sun it washed out the life.

Also your surprise ending lines.

Bravo my friend.....Dee

June 29th, 2016 02:15

lysistrata said:

Do what you can,with what you have,where you are (in your lonely bed)...👴
I do not want to know details... Just dream...🌌
I might have an answer soon enough , 💁 wicked Sam!

June 28th, 2016 17:18

Chapters Of Our Love
lysistrata said:

Which Chapter is this Sam?
Anyway,I wrote the Introduction...
I hope you'd enjoy it and add new chapters.
Who knows? I might help again...

June 16th, 2016 09:10

She\'s Happy
lysistrata said:

Hi Sam,
I enjoyed her 'Happiness' and your 'unhappiness',especially the way it was expressed in your first poem "Carved into Trees". Actually you might have given me an idea.We'll see...
When it comes to matters of Love,sometimes you are ahead,sometimes you are behind.....Surely there must be a good reason for her to be an EX...Keep writing.. Hopefully not for HER,again??!!

June 14th, 2016 08:43

She\'s Happy

THANKS FOR SHARING SAMI ~ It happens so I can empathise ! Trouble is often an ex will live in our community and his / her new partner may even be a "friend" ! This amplifies the angst especially if we still love them. In my experience getting myself a new love (not always as easy as it seems !) eases the pain of "lost love" and enables one to move on ! A beautifully constructed and written poem. I like the ambivalence in you comment ~ You want your ex and his new partner to be happy but joy is overruled by "it should be me " JEALOUSY ! Thanks for caring - Yours BRIAN

June 14th, 2016 03:03

Carved Into Trees

WELCOME SAMI - For a very elegant first poem. Love the free verse flow and the fragmented stanzas. 5 3 4 5 2 lines which suit the topic fractured love. The structure of a poem should always reflect the subject. Satnzas 1 & 2 celebrate the Joy of unconditioanl love the S 3 "end of an era !" S 4 So so sad ~ stolen pride and empty heart. S 5 I have carved names on a tree and they remain to this day but the tree (like our love) has wilted. I CAN empathise - Thanks for caring BRIAN

June 13th, 2016 08:34