Comments received on poems by Desaru
What a Cheesy Moon
ridingonawave said:
The Eternal Moon where the Poet\'s mind is latched. Withdrawn, transfixed to That celestial beauty. Too bright, too blinding to take the eye of the mind off, moment by moment, from that unceasing pursuit.
A beautiful journey echoes in this poem.
September 26th, 2018 00:46
ridingonawave said:
The Eternal Moon where the Poet\'s mind is latched. Withdrawn, transfixed to That celestial beauty. Too bright, too blinding to take the eye of the mind off, moment by moment, from that unceasing pursuit.
A beautiful journey echoes in this poem.
September 26th, 2018 00:46
Strange forbidden fruit
MendedFences27 said:
The ill tasting fruit, to represent the ills of a lifetime. We tend to chew on this mysterious plum all too often. Love gone sour, a poorly chosen occupation, an illness, a lost friend or family member, all the things that make us wish we had chosen differently, or that they would not have happened. But, such is life, and we struggle along.
Your poem was a great comparison of life\'s fate to choosing a bad fruit. You wrote with creativity and imagination. Your images and word choices were great. Liked this a lot. - Phil A.
March 7th, 2017 18:01
MendedFences27 said:
The ill tasting fruit, to represent the ills of a lifetime. We tend to chew on this mysterious plum all too often. Love gone sour, a poorly chosen occupation, an illness, a lost friend or family member, all the things that make us wish we had chosen differently, or that they would not have happened. But, such is life, and we struggle along.
Your poem was a great comparison of life\'s fate to choosing a bad fruit. You wrote with creativity and imagination. Your images and word choices were great. Liked this a lot. - Phil A.
March 7th, 2017 18:01
See me as a lady
Desaru said:
Correct. But it can also be the guy she loves who loves her back of course, and she simply doesn't want him to ever forget her worth or not appreciate her as a woman as time passes .. back of the mind kind of fear
July 24th, 2016 23:36
Desaru said:
Correct. But it can also be the guy she loves who loves her back of course, and she simply doesn't want him to ever forget her worth or not appreciate her as a woman as time passes .. back of the mind kind of fear
July 24th, 2016 23:36
See me as a lady
thatsilentgirl said:
Doesn't every girl wish that the guy she likes will see her that way
July 24th, 2016 23:29
thatsilentgirl said:
Doesn't every girl wish that the guy she likes will see her that way
July 24th, 2016 23:29
Confluence or tie dye
Desaru said:
purple is my favorite color as well! Thank you for the feedback!
July 22nd, 2016 17:19
Desaru said:
purple is my favorite color as well! Thank you for the feedback!
July 22nd, 2016 17:19
Confluence or tie dye
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thank for sharing DEZ ~ A very philosophical poem ~ penned to make us think. Your poem partially answers itself especially in the last inquisitive couplet ! Would it be better to have a new purple hue ? YES YES YES of course it would Purple is my fave color ~ where would be with out it. My answer to your overall question is also YES. Aloneness is anathema ~ Nature always works in pairs ~ for every YING there is always a YANG. Male & Female ~ Day & Night ~ Earth & Moon ~ Hot and Cold ~ Black and White ~ Wet & Dry etc. These things are all OK on their own but together ~ Like Piano & Violin they create a harmonic duet ! Give me two in harmony any time ~ Yours BRIAN
July 22nd, 2016 17:13
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thank for sharing DEZ ~ A very philosophical poem ~ penned to make us think. Your poem partially answers itself especially in the last inquisitive couplet ! Would it be better to have a new purple hue ? YES YES YES of course it would Purple is my fave color ~ where would be with out it. My answer to your overall question is also YES. Aloneness is anathema ~ Nature always works in pairs ~ for every YING there is always a YANG. Male & Female ~ Day & Night ~ Earth & Moon ~ Hot and Cold ~ Black and White ~ Wet & Dry etc. These things are all OK on their own but together ~ Like Piano & Violin they create a harmonic duet ! Give me two in harmony any time ~ Yours BRIAN
July 22nd, 2016 17:13
Brown
rrodriguez said:
Brown eye.... interesting! This has cadence. I liked it.
July 21st, 2016 21:22
rrodriguez said:
Brown eye.... interesting! This has cadence. I liked it.
July 21st, 2016 21:22
