Comments received on poems by sudarshan
The Girl who Boasted
Cheeky Missy said:
Jolly good funny! I quite enjoyed it. Fascinating, the first half/three stanzas utilized end rhyming, and the second half/three stanzas did not, yet the rythm was fairly good. It flowed nicely, was imaginative, and silly enough to be good for a laugh...you should have classified it as "humorous"....your poems are not exactly "children" just because of your age...you write very well.
February 6th, 2011 20:09
Cheeky Missy said:
Jolly good funny! I quite enjoyed it. Fascinating, the first half/three stanzas utilized end rhyming, and the second half/three stanzas did not, yet the rythm was fairly good. It flowed nicely, was imaginative, and silly enough to be good for a laugh...you should have classified it as "humorous"....your poems are not exactly "children" just because of your age...you write very well.
February 6th, 2011 20:09
The Girl who Boasted
Alexandre Landsley said:
Silly girl LOL.............GOOD POEM MADE ME LAUGH!!
February 6th, 2011 11:52
Alexandre Landsley said:
Silly girl LOL.............GOOD POEM MADE ME LAUGH!!
February 6th, 2011 11:52
The Republic Day Comes
Cheeky Missy said:
It's a beautiful tribute to your Republic Day....I especially loved the mention of the"soldiers in the border who never sway" since it reminded me of Nikhilps's poem also about the diligent protecting soliders in the border called "A SEPOY AT BORDER SAYS..........." likewise honoring the wonderful folks protecting your country. This is a very nice look at the Republic Day, alluding slightly to what it honors, calling for unity and wisdom instead of vain strivings....again, a very fine tribute to your national holiday!
February 5th, 2011 22:36
Cheeky Missy said:
It's a beautiful tribute to your Republic Day....I especially loved the mention of the"soldiers in the border who never sway" since it reminded me of Nikhilps's poem also about the diligent protecting soliders in the border called "A SEPOY AT BORDER SAYS..........." likewise honoring the wonderful folks protecting your country. This is a very nice look at the Republic Day, alluding slightly to what it honors, calling for unity and wisdom instead of vain strivings....again, a very fine tribute to your national holiday!
February 5th, 2011 22:36
THE RETURN OF THE WORLD CUP: MY DREAM
Cheeky Missy said:
Loved it. Could almost see and hear it too. Thanks, this was enjoyable.
February 4th, 2011 14:28
Cheeky Missy said:
Loved it. Could almost see and hear it too. Thanks, this was enjoyable.
February 4th, 2011 14:28
SOCCER WORLDCUP
Cheeky Missy said:
Very fascinating assessment and tribute to the world cup! Your end-rhyming is always pleasant, thus where it deviates or seems to cease momentarily, it is disappointing. I quite enjoyed this depiction of the world cup, combined with the fitting image. Great job/Excellent!!!
February 3rd, 2011 11:31
Cheeky Missy said:
Very fascinating assessment and tribute to the world cup! Your end-rhyming is always pleasant, thus where it deviates or seems to cease momentarily, it is disappointing. I quite enjoyed this depiction of the world cup, combined with the fitting image. Great job/Excellent!!!
February 3rd, 2011 11:31
ONCE I ......................
Cheeky Missy said:
Beautiful almost simplistic description of the creation/nature in its simple, lively fascination. I enjoyed this.
February 2nd, 2011 18:22
Cheeky Missy said:
Beautiful almost simplistic description of the creation/nature in its simple, lively fascination. I enjoyed this.
February 2nd, 2011 18:22
BLIGHTY DOG
Cheeky Missy said:
Delightful....I enjoyed this humorous look at....not a real dog, surely? Not the winning lame creature that got his coveted fame? I don't want him, for all the way you've described him, he sounds undesirable. Sorry you have to be stuck with him. I enjoyed this!
February 1st, 2011 15:15
Cheeky Missy said:
Delightful....I enjoyed this humorous look at....not a real dog, surely? Not the winning lame creature that got his coveted fame? I don't want him, for all the way you've described him, he sounds undesirable. Sorry you have to be stuck with him. I enjoyed this!
February 1st, 2011 15:15
Here are the Aliens!
Cheeky Missy said:
Even so....you should not speak so disrespectfully of your teachers. I do not know that it is a requirement of a true teacher to encourage and motivate the student...they should endeavour to teach the the necessary information...some fault lies in the students for the learning, seems to me, some may be motivated, others the opposite; the teacher's job is to teach the material and for that, some cooperation is required from the students as well. The poem is well-written, communicating the vile disgust with your excellently detailed description....and I the reader was repulsed. Your explanation of it, made the piece rather amusing, well-communicating your frustration by your depiction. Excellent! But again, despite their dreadful shortcomings, you still should respect your instructors.
P.S. Is your third stanza a mix of the third and fourth? Judging from your pleasantly consistent use of second line end-rhyming, it appears to be two stanzas jammed together.
January 31st, 2011 23:12
Cheeky Missy said:
Even so....you should not speak so disrespectfully of your teachers. I do not know that it is a requirement of a true teacher to encourage and motivate the student...they should endeavour to teach the the necessary information...some fault lies in the students for the learning, seems to me, some may be motivated, others the opposite; the teacher's job is to teach the material and for that, some cooperation is required from the students as well. The poem is well-written, communicating the vile disgust with your excellently detailed description....and I the reader was repulsed. Your explanation of it, made the piece rather amusing, well-communicating your frustration by your depiction. Excellent! But again, despite their dreadful shortcomings, you still should respect your instructors.
P.S. Is your third stanza a mix of the third and fourth? Judging from your pleasantly consistent use of second line end-rhyming, it appears to be two stanzas jammed together.
January 31st, 2011 23:12
OUT OF TIME
Cheeky Missy said:
Oh! But I LOVED this one! You wrote it very nicely, with a delightful dash of humor...you should'be classified it as "humor" for it is delightfully amusing! And the picture...is it you? Fits very nicely with it. I love how you drew the scene....beginning with your opponent's threatening challenge, through the depiction of him in his actions, to the subtle coup d'etat of sorts, which was only too perfectly the surprise ending in both the scene and this poem...though the title gave it away. Your alternate end-rhyming is very nicely done...I'm very glad you do write poetry and could paint such a picture as this one in words to be enjoyed...for I quite enjoyed it! (I also like to play chess, but am not the greatest player.)
January 31st, 2011 00:05
Cheeky Missy said:
Oh! But I LOVED this one! You wrote it very nicely, with a delightful dash of humor...you should'be classified it as "humor" for it is delightfully amusing! And the picture...is it you? Fits very nicely with it. I love how you drew the scene....beginning with your opponent's threatening challenge, through the depiction of him in his actions, to the subtle coup d'etat of sorts, which was only too perfectly the surprise ending in both the scene and this poem...though the title gave it away. Your alternate end-rhyming is very nicely done...I'm very glad you do write poetry and could paint such a picture as this one in words to be enjoyed...for I quite enjoyed it! (I also like to play chess, but am not the greatest player.)
January 31st, 2011 00:05
My Dog's Road to Fame
Cheeky Missy said:
Amusing...made me chuckle. Delightful ,silly, imaginary (it's not true, right?) story about a dear, inhibited, vain friend who's actually....successful! I quite enjoyed this! Excellent! I enjoyed also the picture you put with it, which coloured the imagination as I read it.
January 29th, 2011 22:51
Cheeky Missy said:
Amusing...made me chuckle. Delightful ,silly, imaginary (it's not true, right?) story about a dear, inhibited, vain friend who's actually....successful! I quite enjoyed this! Excellent! I enjoyed also the picture you put with it, which coloured the imagination as I read it.
January 29th, 2011 22:51
My Dog's Road to Fame
gerrylegister said:
really good effort, just a long poem to keep the interest,
January 29th, 2011 18:51
gerrylegister said:
really good effort, just a long poem to keep the interest,
January 29th, 2011 18:51
THE TREE IN MY GARDEN
Cheeky Missy said:
Very nice! Beautiful! You stated it all rather simplistically but pictured it so very well....the accompanying image enhanced the poem delightfully. This was very enjoyable! Your end-rhyming was very pleasant and rythm nice as well. I liked this...made me smile happily!
January 28th, 2011 21:53
Cheeky Missy said:
Very nice! Beautiful! You stated it all rather simplistically but pictured it so very well....the accompanying image enhanced the poem delightfully. This was very enjoyable! Your end-rhyming was very pleasant and rythm nice as well. I liked this...made me smile happily!
January 28th, 2011 21:53
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