Comments received on poems by sudarshan
THE HAUGHTY KING
Terry dailey said:
A story of unheeded warmings. Was intelligently put to thought I see the kings grandeur and boastful arogance led him to His demise. Your poem brought a third party aproach in great form. But seen his death comeing upon his first steps. ifbi was to give you any advice it would be throw the readers off by a twist of added words building a substory maybe the tiger chokes on the kings ego... Great write well written.
January 15th, 2017 03:23
Terry dailey said:
A story of unheeded warmings. Was intelligently put to thought I see the kings grandeur and boastful arogance led him to His demise. Your poem brought a third party aproach in great form. But seen his death comeing upon his first steps. ifbi was to give you any advice it would be throw the readers off by a twist of added words building a substory maybe the tiger chokes on the kings ego... Great write well written.
January 15th, 2017 03:23
My Grandmother says...
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
THANKS SUDAR - Great fantasy poem. There are FAIRIES at the bottom of my garden too ! Please check my poems - BRIAN
April 16th, 2016 10:21
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
THANKS SUDAR - Great fantasy poem. There are FAIRIES at the bottom of my garden too ! Please check my poems - BRIAN
April 16th, 2016 10:21
ACIDS AND BASES
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
When we mix together
We're always at fault
Acids & Bases just
Produce a nice salt
NaOH and HCl
do produce heat
But a nice salt as well !
NaCl adds savour
To flavourless food
Without it food's tasteless
too bland and too crude.
So next time we try
To cut someone to size
Let's be acids & bases
and just NEUTRALISE
Thanks for sharing - BRIAN
March 22nd, 2016 09:07
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
When we mix together
We're always at fault
Acids & Bases just
Produce a nice salt
NaOH and HCl
do produce heat
But a nice salt as well !
NaCl adds savour
To flavourless food
Without it food's tasteless
too bland and too crude.
So next time we try
To cut someone to size
Let's be acids & bases
and just NEUTRALISE
Thanks for sharing - BRIAN
March 22nd, 2016 09:07
THE WORLD OF TELEVISION THROUGH MY EYES
Soumita Sarkar said:
Alas!.........u wont find the inventor.........but a good narration of a status infected by television.........u r the victim beyond repair.........GOOD!
June 10th, 2013 01:10
Soumita Sarkar said:
Alas!.........u wont find the inventor.........but a good narration of a status infected by television.........u r the victim beyond repair.........GOOD!
June 10th, 2013 01:10
LIFE
baj-a said:
excellent words! glad to see some people still understand everything shouldn't be handed to them but that they have to work for what they want and not just think that someone else who has worked hard to achieve their status in life should give them part of it because it isn't fair... lol! yeah it isn't fair you worked your butt off so now you owe me... love the poem!
April 7th, 2013 07:42
baj-a said:
excellent words! glad to see some people still understand everything shouldn't be handed to them but that they have to work for what they want and not just think that someone else who has worked hard to achieve their status in life should give them part of it because it isn't fair... lol! yeah it isn't fair you worked your butt off so now you owe me... love the poem!
April 7th, 2013 07:42
THE SCHOOL
baj-a said:
I had to laugh at the line that teachers give you work to do that bores you a lot :-). fun read!
April 6th, 2013 07:39
baj-a said:
I had to laugh at the line that teachers give you work to do that bores you a lot :-). fun read!
April 6th, 2013 07:39
PRESERVING NATURE
baj-a said:
what a wonderful poem! i am one who believes that trees feel pain when we cut them down and that sound we hear is the tree screaming. we need our trees and yet we destroy them for such wasteful things.
April 3rd, 2013 07:35
baj-a said:
what a wonderful poem! i am one who believes that trees feel pain when we cut them down and that sound we hear is the tree screaming. we need our trees and yet we destroy them for such wasteful things.
April 3rd, 2013 07:35
THE ALTERED WORLD
diamonddagger said:
Your beautiful sad poem caught me and filled me full of sadness. You are a good writer. I enjoy reading your stuff. diamond
April 2nd, 2013 22:00
diamonddagger said:
Your beautiful sad poem caught me and filled me full of sadness. You are a good writer. I enjoy reading your stuff. diamond
April 2nd, 2013 22:00
PRESERVING NATURE
diamonddagger said:
Hello Sudarshan, I am a treehugger at heart. I live in the woods on 34 acres. It is wonderful. I loved your beautiful poem and plea for the lives of the trees. We need more people to help the trees speak since they cannot scream while being cut or beg to be left alone. Thank you for posting such a lovely poem. diamond
April 2nd, 2013 21:47
diamonddagger said:
Hello Sudarshan, I am a treehugger at heart. I live in the woods on 34 acres. It is wonderful. I loved your beautiful poem and plea for the lives of the trees. We need more people to help the trees speak since they cannot scream while being cut or beg to be left alone. Thank you for posting such a lovely poem. diamond
April 2nd, 2013 21:47
THE ALTERED WORLD
baj-a said:
sadly your poem is to true, my friend, we have forgotten we are caretakers of the world and instead are using and abusing its resources for our selfish uses. good write!
April 2nd, 2013 07:22
baj-a said:
sadly your poem is to true, my friend, we have forgotten we are caretakers of the world and instead are using and abusing its resources for our selfish uses. good write!
April 2nd, 2013 07:22
I WONDER WHY?
baj-a said:
What a 'wonder'ful poem :-). so much to see and experience and to bring wonder to our senses. makes me wonder :-) if the wonder years ever really end for us.
April 1st, 2013 07:50
baj-a said:
What a 'wonder'ful poem :-). so much to see and experience and to bring wonder to our senses. makes me wonder :-) if the wonder years ever really end for us.
April 1st, 2013 07:50
THE LOST ROUTE
baj-a said:
the funny thing is that has happened to me too many times and not because of being old... I was much younger and would get lost in my thoughts and would be blocks past my home before I realized it. Once while going to visit my sister I walked into her in-laws house by mistake (they lived right next door)... in school there were doors at the end of this one hallway and the first time the doors were closed I was totally lost because it looked different. yes, minor changes can make things look so different you don't where you are :-). i'll bet the children can help him find his way home :-). fun read.
March 30th, 2013 08:52
baj-a said:
the funny thing is that has happened to me too many times and not because of being old... I was much younger and would get lost in my thoughts and would be blocks past my home before I realized it. Once while going to visit my sister I walked into her in-laws house by mistake (they lived right next door)... in school there were doors at the end of this one hallway and the first time the doors were closed I was totally lost because it looked different. yes, minor changes can make things look so different you don't where you are :-). i'll bet the children can help him find his way home :-). fun read.
March 30th, 2013 08:52
THE LOST ROUTE
diamonddagger said:
isn't that the way of things these days. Very nice children's poem! I enjoyed it very much.
March 29th, 2013 21:14
diamonddagger said:
isn't that the way of things these days. Very nice children's poem! I enjoyed it very much.
March 29th, 2013 21:14
THE GHOST SLAYER
baj-a said:
Fun read but dang! why did he have to kill all the ghosts? Ghosts are not bad they are just trying to have some fun :-). some of my best friends are ghosts... lol!
March 29th, 2013 07:54
baj-a said:
Fun read but dang! why did he have to kill all the ghosts? Ghosts are not bad they are just trying to have some fun :-). some of my best friends are ghosts... lol!
March 29th, 2013 07:54
CHESS EXPLAINED
Cheeky Missy said:
Fun, simplistic explanation of chess! I enjoyed it, a lovely reminder.
August 2nd, 2011 20:06
Cheeky Missy said:
Fun, simplistic explanation of chess! I enjoyed it, a lovely reminder.
August 2nd, 2011 20:06
MOTHER EARTH
Cheeky Missy said:
Very well done, the repeating emphasis of the first line effectively conveys it to the reader. However, according to the LORD God Who created the earth and all that is in it, Who alone is to be worshipped, although He formed man from the dust of the ground indeed, yet He never calls the earth man's mother. Therefore the term "mother earth" is a lie. He is the only One who can deliver it and mankind. He does tell us that He is going to judge the world and the people in it who have destroyed it. Trust in and call upon Him. Great imagery and fascinating choice of words in some places.
July 19th, 2011 19:29
Cheeky Missy said:
Very well done, the repeating emphasis of the first line effectively conveys it to the reader. However, according to the LORD God Who created the earth and all that is in it, Who alone is to be worshipped, although He formed man from the dust of the ground indeed, yet He never calls the earth man's mother. Therefore the term "mother earth" is a lie. He is the only One who can deliver it and mankind. He does tell us that He is going to judge the world and the people in it who have destroyed it. Trust in and call upon Him. Great imagery and fascinating choice of words in some places.
July 19th, 2011 19:29
OLD AGE
Emi said:
Wow I really like this one! The last stanza made me laugh. :)
June 15th, 2011 08:12
Emi said:
Wow I really like this one! The last stanza made me laugh. :)
June 15th, 2011 08:12
CHECKMATE!!!!!!!!!!!
The 13th Zodiac said:
WOWOWWWOW! this was great because I love chess, and you built your poem upon this idea...
GREAT WRITE, so deep and filled with emotions!! :)
10/10
June 5th, 2011 06:57
The 13th Zodiac said:
WOWOWWWOW! this was great because I love chess, and you built your poem upon this idea...
GREAT WRITE, so deep and filled with emotions!! :)
10/10
June 5th, 2011 06:57
CHECKMATE!!!!!!!!!!!
Emi said:
Wow I really loved this one. :) The only thing is that early in the poem you had said that your queen was taken, but then later you move your queen to check the king. Other than that, though, I found it quite enjoyable!
June 5th, 2011 06:21
Emi said:
Wow I really loved this one. :) The only thing is that early in the poem you had said that your queen was taken, but then later you move your queen to check the king. Other than that, though, I found it quite enjoyable!
June 5th, 2011 06:21
Eric, the Evil Emu
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. Thank you! Quite a fascinating tale! I much enjoyed reading it, glued to it to the finish! Very nicely presented tribute to the situation!
April 7th, 2011 23:40
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. Thank you! Quite a fascinating tale! I much enjoyed reading it, glued to it to the finish! Very nicely presented tribute to the situation!
April 7th, 2011 23:40
THE PET CAT
Cheeky Missy said:
Hmm. Fascinating, humorous little anecdote about...an imaginary pussy, right? Beautiful! I enjoyed it.
March 15th, 2011 23:50
Cheeky Missy said:
Hmm. Fascinating, humorous little anecdote about...an imaginary pussy, right? Beautiful! I enjoyed it.
March 15th, 2011 23:50
ADVENTURES IN A DREAM
Cheeky Missy said:
Fun. You might want to make your rhyme scheme more consistent...it isn't as polished as some of your other submissions. It was indeed a fun story...and you concluded it nicely with the rude awakening!
March 10th, 2011 21:17
Cheeky Missy said:
Fun. You might want to make your rhyme scheme more consistent...it isn't as polished as some of your other submissions. It was indeed a fun story...and you concluded it nicely with the rude awakening!
March 10th, 2011 21:17
ADVENTURES IN A DREAM
Dolphine29 said:
The best way to put and in our dreams we do dare to really dream.
Made me smile :)
Best
Dolphine
March 10th, 2011 17:37
Dolphine29 said:
The best way to put and in our dreams we do dare to really dream.
Made me smile :)
Best
Dolphine
March 10th, 2011 17:37
THE DRAWN BATTLE
Cheeky Missy said:
Sweet!!!! I love it!! Excellent! I'm very glad you won, sort of....perpetual checkmate/draw is at least not a loss, thankfully. I like how you built the tension in the poem for the reader, happily surprising us with the relieving conclusion.
March 8th, 2011 00:04
Cheeky Missy said:
Sweet!!!! I love it!! Excellent! I'm very glad you won, sort of....perpetual checkmate/draw is at least not a loss, thankfully. I like how you built the tension in the poem for the reader, happily surprising us with the relieving conclusion.
March 8th, 2011 00:04
THE LOST TREES
Cheeky Missy said:
Ah, indeed! You've excellently pictured the modern disaster...the "concrete jungle" overtaking and eliminating the real living trees and verdure. How necessary the trees are, though, for the general health of the people and planet.
March 5th, 2011 21:42
Cheeky Missy said:
Ah, indeed! You've excellently pictured the modern disaster...the "concrete jungle" overtaking and eliminating the real living trees and verdure. How necessary the trees are, though, for the general health of the people and planet.
March 5th, 2011 21:42
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