Comments received on poems by rajat mahaych
dark night
rajat mahaych said:
thanks
but dont be sad
these are just a few words and
i have just made it as was feeling not good
though everyone has their problems in their life
and many complications
April 7th, 2011 10:29
rajat mahaych said:
thanks
but dont be sad
these are just a few words and
i have just made it as was feeling not good
though everyone has their problems in their life
and many complications
April 7th, 2011 10:29
where are you going?
rajat mahaych said:
ah
Thanks for your notification and i did not get your saying about she is dead in his lap
What have you to say about it please expalin some clearly
March 22nd, 2011 13:30
rajat mahaych said:
ah
Thanks for your notification and i did not get your saying about she is dead in his lap
What have you to say about it please expalin some clearly
March 22nd, 2011 13:30
tears on smiling face
rajat mahaych said:
thanks for your so much interests in my workings
and i would to be thankful to you forever for motivating to
i would like to ask you to please elaborate your this comment so more so that i can get it, understand in a more better way
your this language is a bit typical for me to understand
March 21st, 2011 02:36
rajat mahaych said:
thanks for your so much interests in my workings
and i would to be thankful to you forever for motivating to
i would like to ask you to please elaborate your this comment so more so that i can get it, understand in a more better way
your this language is a bit typical for me to understand
March 21st, 2011 02:36
tears on smiling face
Cheeky Missy said:
The repetition of tears on a smiling face effectively communicates the thought, especially so much at the conclusion, leaving the reader with that assessment of the entire reflection. The symbolism of dark, starless nights aptly expresses the total blindness and lack of direction, the aimless groping to know how to walk and live. Your goal of showing the speaker has been ever faithful amongst liars, comes through rather softly, a rather defensive self-justification and plea of victimization. A bewildered and injured, upright character seems to be presented. Good job.
March 20th, 2011 21:42
Cheeky Missy said:
The repetition of tears on a smiling face effectively communicates the thought, especially so much at the conclusion, leaving the reader with that assessment of the entire reflection. The symbolism of dark, starless nights aptly expresses the total blindness and lack of direction, the aimless groping to know how to walk and live. Your goal of showing the speaker has been ever faithful amongst liars, comes through rather softly, a rather defensive self-justification and plea of victimization. A bewildered and injured, upright character seems to be presented. Good job.
March 20th, 2011 21:42
faith
Cheeky Missy said:
Hmm. Fascinating, intriguing, and bittersweet owing to the broken trust. A curious tale. What could the receiver do to mend things? Forgive?
March 10th, 2011 21:26
Cheeky Missy said:
Hmm. Fascinating, intriguing, and bittersweet owing to the broken trust. A curious tale. What could the receiver do to mend things? Forgive?
March 10th, 2011 21:26
flash back
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. It is so very sad! You poignantly expressed it, and excellently! Smiling when you are crumbling and crying inside...it is awful. You depicted it very well.
March 6th, 2011 00:30
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. It is so very sad! You poignantly expressed it, and excellently! Smiling when you are crumbling and crying inside...it is awful. You depicted it very well.
March 6th, 2011 00:30
where are you going?
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. What a picture you poignantly expressed! Your "author's comment" made it even worse, seeing she is lost forever, if "she is dead and lying in [his] lap"! For it is hopeless now, poor fellow. I loved the sweet scenes you painted in his reminiscing. Altogether you expressed the picture very well, except I never would've guessed she way lying dead in his lap, already gone forever...whither indeed! Very good!
March 1st, 2011 22:47
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. What a picture you poignantly expressed! Your "author's comment" made it even worse, seeing she is lost forever, if "she is dead and lying in [his] lap"! For it is hopeless now, poor fellow. I loved the sweet scenes you painted in his reminiscing. Altogether you expressed the picture very well, except I never would've guessed she way lying dead in his lap, already gone forever...whither indeed! Very good!
March 1st, 2011 22:47
why do people say
Cheeky Missy said:
Aw. It is such a delightfully sweet and beautiful poem about romance and being in love! I quite enjoyed it!!!
March 1st, 2011 00:20
Cheeky Missy said:
Aw. It is such a delightfully sweet and beautiful poem about romance and being in love! I quite enjoyed it!!!
March 1st, 2011 00:20
i can never satisfy
Cheeky Missy said:
Again, a familiar cry you've voiced...trying, but in vain. The story of so many in this world. We can truly never satisfy....excellent point. But if the Lord saves us, He will be satisfied with the work He does in us. Otherwise, satisfaction is often (it seems to me) elusive, arbitrary, and transient, to perpetually chase, if we seek it. Unless of course, the Lord saves us, for He says...He satisfies the longing soul, and fills the hungry soul with goodness...and His Word is true.
February 26th, 2011 18:43
Cheeky Missy said:
Again, a familiar cry you've voiced...trying, but in vain. The story of so many in this world. We can truly never satisfy....excellent point. But if the Lord saves us, He will be satisfied with the work He does in us. Otherwise, satisfaction is often (it seems to me) elusive, arbitrary, and transient, to perpetually chase, if we seek it. Unless of course, the Lord saves us, for He says...He satisfies the longing soul, and fills the hungry soul with goodness...and His Word is true.
February 26th, 2011 18:43
i am alone
Cheeky Missy said:
And it is a familiar cry, more especially so, seeing the only true Lord God of the Bible never promised any one of us getting our dreams. When our first father, Adam disobeyed and sinned against God, death and sin entered the world, thus the misery and pain all taste....and born sinners ever since, all are doomed to perish for their sins, unless they believe on the Lord Jesus Christ. Thus it is a common cry, for until the Lord opens our eyes we are blind and believe the lie that we deserve anything...our dreams, no pain, no loneliness, etc. Very nicely done....again, IF you wish to improve, you might recheck each submission....I do on my own, anyway, and even then errors occasionally elude me.
February 26th, 2011 18:38
Cheeky Missy said:
And it is a familiar cry, more especially so, seeing the only true Lord God of the Bible never promised any one of us getting our dreams. When our first father, Adam disobeyed and sinned against God, death and sin entered the world, thus the misery and pain all taste....and born sinners ever since, all are doomed to perish for their sins, unless they believe on the Lord Jesus Christ. Thus it is a common cry, for until the Lord opens our eyes we are blind and believe the lie that we deserve anything...our dreams, no pain, no loneliness, etc. Very nicely done....again, IF you wish to improve, you might recheck each submission....I do on my own, anyway, and even then errors occasionally elude me.
February 26th, 2011 18:38
my last wish
rajat mahaych said:
thank you very very much from the bottom of my heart
i thought no one would like my work so apart
its really much pleasure for me that my work is being appreciated by some one out side of my country whom i have not seen till now.
i hope you have liked it very much and i need more kind of suggestion of you for my further writings.
i would like to ask you the meaning of this poem in your own words.
if i ask you to describe this n your thoughts, how will you do that.
how will you prepare the summery of this?
and everything from the literature point of view.
February 14th, 2011 07:55
rajat mahaych said:
thank you very very much from the bottom of my heart
i thought no one would like my work so apart
its really much pleasure for me that my work is being appreciated by some one out side of my country whom i have not seen till now.
i hope you have liked it very much and i need more kind of suggestion of you for my further writings.
i would like to ask you the meaning of this poem in your own words.
if i ask you to describe this n your thoughts, how will you do that.
how will you prepare the summery of this?
and everything from the literature point of view.
February 14th, 2011 07:55
my sweetest dream
Cheeky Missy said:
Ah, I love your sweetest dream! And you expressed it so beautifully with your images of dancing, and music, smiling roses and singing birds....it was delightful. I quite enjoyed it. Bet it would be alluring put to music.
February 12th, 2011 15:26
Cheeky Missy said:
Ah, I love your sweetest dream! And you expressed it so beautifully with your images of dancing, and music, smiling roses and singing birds....it was delightful. I quite enjoyed it. Bet it would be alluring put to music.
February 12th, 2011 15:26
my last wish
Cheeky Missy said:
Beautiful, fascinating, sweet. Your author's comment was complementary, lending more understanding to the poem which expressed it well anyway. Your metaphors depicted it very well, along with your reference to pain and forgiveness....all so expressive of love. I quite enjoyed it. Very nicely expressed! Your slight touch of end-rhyming was very pleasant as well.
February 8th, 2011 15:23
Cheeky Missy said:
Beautiful, fascinating, sweet. Your author's comment was complementary, lending more understanding to the poem which expressed it well anyway. Your metaphors depicted it very well, along with your reference to pain and forgiveness....all so expressive of love. I quite enjoyed it. Very nicely expressed! Your slight touch of end-rhyming was very pleasant as well.
February 8th, 2011 15:23
my last wish
Rajat said:
very nice..just check the spelling of 'know' and check the line's location...:)
February 7th, 2011 10:41
Rajat said:
very nice..just check the spelling of 'know' and check the line's location...:)
February 7th, 2011 10:41
