Comments received on poems by Poetic Justice
Demons Of Darkness
Gary Edward Geraci said:
By jumping your character concedes her temporary, material problems for what\'s likely to be eternal damnation and eternal company with the very demons she was trying to escape. For me this is a conflict that is not easily resolved. Your short story would be more valiant, heroic, and compelling if your protagonist dug deep within and slayed her inner demons.
July 9th, 2017 22:53
Gary Edward Geraci said:
By jumping your character concedes her temporary, material problems for what\'s likely to be eternal damnation and eternal company with the very demons she was trying to escape. For me this is a conflict that is not easily resolved. Your short story would be more valiant, heroic, and compelling if your protagonist dug deep within and slayed her inner demons.
July 9th, 2017 22:53
Demons Of Darkness
LIGHT WARRIOR said:
Keep on writing...let it out there young lady...because you will go far if you do so...very well written...let us hear some more!I wish you well in all of your endeavors...
July 9th, 2017 21:59
LIGHT WARRIOR said:
Keep on writing...let it out there young lady...because you will go far if you do so...very well written...let us hear some more!I wish you well in all of your endeavors...
July 9th, 2017 21:59
Life As Mixed Child
valene said:
People can be cruel, stupid, unfairly judgmental, etc... and it\'s unfortunate you\'ve already had to face it. Having said that, my hope is your relationship with your folks is a close one, and you\'re able to talk about all the things you\'ve mentioned here so they can help you get past the issues. Embrace who you are and don\'t allow anyone to make feel as though you have to apologize for you being you! Poetry is a great outlet for dealing with whatever this crazy world throws at you....it can be very cathartic and I hope this piece was for you. One technical thing I\'m curios about...in the 13th line you start it with the word \'why\' and I\'m wondering if you meant \'what.\' I think the line would read better, with changing out the word. It\'s a good, and thought provoking poem, Rose. Glad you shared it with us.
April 7th, 2017 22:13
valene said:
People can be cruel, stupid, unfairly judgmental, etc... and it\'s unfortunate you\'ve already had to face it. Having said that, my hope is your relationship with your folks is a close one, and you\'re able to talk about all the things you\'ve mentioned here so they can help you get past the issues. Embrace who you are and don\'t allow anyone to make feel as though you have to apologize for you being you! Poetry is a great outlet for dealing with whatever this crazy world throws at you....it can be very cathartic and I hope this piece was for you. One technical thing I\'m curios about...in the 13th line you start it with the word \'why\' and I\'m wondering if you meant \'what.\' I think the line would read better, with changing out the word. It\'s a good, and thought provoking poem, Rose. Glad you shared it with us.
April 7th, 2017 22:13
Life As Mixed Child
P.H.Rose said:
Rose this just brilliant
I absolutely love it.
I am a mixed child
Also, my dad is
White, my mother
Is half Arab
Had all the racist
Remarks growing
Up...the most stupid
Thing anyone ever told
Me was, what doesn\'t
Kill you makes you stronger
My answer was walk
In my shoes for a day
People can be hurtful,
More often than not
It\'s because they feel
Inferior....all I can say
Is Rose.. It gets easier
As you get older...
Ps. My grand daughters
Middle name is Rose..
April 6th, 2017 14:24
P.H.Rose said:
Rose this just brilliant
I absolutely love it.
I am a mixed child
Also, my dad is
White, my mother
Is half Arab
Had all the racist
Remarks growing
Up...the most stupid
Thing anyone ever told
Me was, what doesn\'t
Kill you makes you stronger
My answer was walk
In my shoes for a day
People can be hurtful,
More often than not
It\'s because they feel
Inferior....all I can say
Is Rose.. It gets easier
As you get older...
Ps. My grand daughters
Middle name is Rose..
April 6th, 2017 14:24
Life As Mixed Child
orchidee said:
A fine write. It sure is madness to be discriminated against due to the colour of one\'s skin. We may as well persecute marmalade if it was blue, or yellow, or whatever! doh!
April 6th, 2017 03:25
orchidee said:
A fine write. It sure is madness to be discriminated against due to the colour of one\'s skin. We may as well persecute marmalade if it was blue, or yellow, or whatever! doh!
April 6th, 2017 03:25
Life As Mixed Child
Fay Slimm. said:
You are and will always be special dear Rose - your writing shows both talent and tolerance. All humans are from parental mixtures which means we inherit the gift of ourselves as a real individual. Keep writing with head held high.
April 6th, 2017 02:12
Fay Slimm. said:
You are and will always be special dear Rose - your writing shows both talent and tolerance. All humans are from parental mixtures which means we inherit the gift of ourselves as a real individual. Keep writing with head held high.
April 6th, 2017 02:12
Life As Mixed Child
Mello said:
I feel like there is a idea we all support, like being white acomes with some ups and being black comes with some downs. But your different that good, they say having a mixed is actually good. But ignorance is always going to be around. Know that true beauty lies within. Good poem.
April 6th, 2017 02:05
Mello said:
I feel like there is a idea we all support, like being white acomes with some ups and being black comes with some downs. But your different that good, they say having a mixed is actually good. But ignorance is always going to be around. Know that true beauty lies within. Good poem.
April 6th, 2017 02:05
Life As Mixed Child
Frank Prem said:
Enjoyed this very much Rose. I found it a good read. Thank you.
April 6th, 2017 02:00
Frank Prem said:
Enjoyed this very much Rose. I found it a good read. Thank you.
April 6th, 2017 02:00
Life As Mixed Child
Goldfinch60 said:
Each of us is an individual and if people do not understand who you are that is their problem, not yours. Enjoy your life as you. Good write.
April 6th, 2017 01:45
Goldfinch60 said:
Each of us is an individual and if people do not understand who you are that is their problem, not yours. Enjoy your life as you. Good write.
April 6th, 2017 01:45
I Am Tired
Elegant_Style said:
I hear you!! Beautiful poem and deep questions that really need answers. You are definitely loved here!! Never give up!!
November 29th, 2016 21:36
Elegant_Style said:
I hear you!! Beautiful poem and deep questions that really need answers. You are definitely loved here!! Never give up!!
November 29th, 2016 21:36
Gotta Have You
Simple-Man87 said:
Very well done. I\'ve had the same feeling.
November 25th, 2016 23:53
Simple-Man87 said:
Very well done. I\'ve had the same feeling.
November 25th, 2016 23:53
Hard Love
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME KIMBERLEY ~ THANKS FOR YOUR FIRST POEM ~ WHICH I ENJOYED ! Well structured and bursting with rhyme and rhythm ! BUT ~ I found the context a little sad. In my experience LOVE is a rocky road of ups & downs and Ins & outs. But on the whole I always say \"Better to have loved and lost ~ than have never loved at all !\" What we do gain is experience and resolve. This sentiment is beautifully echoed in your last line \"Well before we say goodbye ~ the girl inside is glad you met her\" hanks for caring ~ Yours BRIAN
November 24th, 2016 14:45
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME KIMBERLEY ~ THANKS FOR YOUR FIRST POEM ~ WHICH I ENJOYED ! Well structured and bursting with rhyme and rhythm ! BUT ~ I found the context a little sad. In my experience LOVE is a rocky road of ups & downs and Ins & outs. But on the whole I always say \"Better to have loved and lost ~ than have never loved at all !\" What we do gain is experience and resolve. This sentiment is beautifully echoed in your last line \"Well before we say goodbye ~ the girl inside is glad you met her\" hanks for caring ~ Yours BRIAN
November 24th, 2016 14:45
