Comments received on poems by PotbellyPleb
Twisted
Barry Hodges said:
I found the odd rhyming scheme a little disconcerting but the whole piece had some charm.
PS Line 7 should be its without an apostrophe.
March 1st, 2020 08:19
Barry Hodges said:
I found the odd rhyming scheme a little disconcerting but the whole piece had some charm.
PS Line 7 should be its without an apostrophe.
March 1st, 2020 08:19
The Atheist
dusk arising said:
Potbelly rather than send me huge private messages attempting to tell me what some old man insists is how poetry is written may I suggest the following.
1) Make such communications readable rather than the confused skipping match you presented.
2) Keep your comments for the comments section (here)
3) Don\'t try to teach me in private what is and is not poetry. If you have a criticism or comments upon my work then use the comments section provided.
4) Learn to take criticism. Here your piece has been commented upon by a few poets who publish on MPS. All seem to be making the same points. I assume that you are not so thick headed as to ignore these.
5) Poetry as a facet of language and literature is a fluid and ever changing thing. What somebody in your past considers to be correct is a thing of the past. MPS is a thing of today. Byron and Keats, though each have their beauty, are in the past. MPS is of today.
March 1st, 2020 07:26
dusk arising said:
Potbelly rather than send me huge private messages attempting to tell me what some old man insists is how poetry is written may I suggest the following.
1) Make such communications readable rather than the confused skipping match you presented.
2) Keep your comments for the comments section (here)
3) Don\'t try to teach me in private what is and is not poetry. If you have a criticism or comments upon my work then use the comments section provided.
4) Learn to take criticism. Here your piece has been commented upon by a few poets who publish on MPS. All seem to be making the same points. I assume that you are not so thick headed as to ignore these.
5) Poetry as a facet of language and literature is a fluid and ever changing thing. What somebody in your past considers to be correct is a thing of the past. MPS is a thing of today. Byron and Keats, though each have their beauty, are in the past. MPS is of today.
March 1st, 2020 07:26
The Atheist
dusk arising said:
I\'m not sure who is the most confused here, you or your readers.
February 28th, 2020 13:10
dusk arising said:
I\'m not sure who is the most confused here, you or your readers.
February 28th, 2020 13:10
Twisted
PotbellyPleb said:
So I don\'t know why the 12th and 14th verse came out further behind all the others, but....do what you wish, my poetic side.
February 14th, 2020 11:27
PotbellyPleb said:
So I don\'t know why the 12th and 14th verse came out further behind all the others, but....do what you wish, my poetic side.
February 14th, 2020 11:27
Where Humility Is Needed
dusk arising said:
This dude was definitely \'fly\'.
January 21st, 2020 13:11
dusk arising said:
This dude was definitely \'fly\'.
January 21st, 2020 13:11
Twisted Ears
dusk arising said:
OK \'big ears\' I really enjoyed this. It\'s the third piece of yours i have read today. You obviously are a talent to watch and enjoy.
January 21st, 2020 13:09
dusk arising said:
OK \'big ears\' I really enjoyed this. It\'s the third piece of yours i have read today. You obviously are a talent to watch and enjoy.
January 21st, 2020 13:09
A Mother\'s View
dusk arising said:
Love the way you\'ve chosen to present this \'conversational verse\'.
Light, witty and prosaic.
January 21st, 2020 13:06
dusk arising said:
Love the way you\'ve chosen to present this \'conversational verse\'.
Light, witty and prosaic.
January 21st, 2020 13:06
The Shore
dusk arising said:
To read you is delightful!
Firstly i read your accompanying words which i found very entertaining and well written. Moving on to your piece i was yes delighted. Such a joyous, warm and light hearted adventure.
I must read more of your stuff.
January 21st, 2020 13:03
dusk arising said:
To read you is delightful!
Firstly i read your accompanying words which i found very entertaining and well written. Moving on to your piece i was yes delighted. Such a joyous, warm and light hearted adventure.
I must read more of your stuff.
January 21st, 2020 13:03
The Shore
Goldfinch60 said:
Super loving write, may your sailing the sea of love never end.
January 21st, 2020 02:08
Goldfinch60 said:
Super loving write, may your sailing the sea of love never end.
January 21st, 2020 02:08
A Mother\'s View
P.H.Rose said:
Ha ha... loved this
And so bloody true.
Well done sir....
January 10th, 2017 20:26
P.H.Rose said:
Ha ha... loved this
And so bloody true.
Well done sir....
January 10th, 2017 20:26
Twisted Ears
WriteBeLight said:
\"Sounds\" like a great poem, but not for the kid with the ears!..:)
January 9th, 2017 16:32
WriteBeLight said:
\"Sounds\" like a great poem, but not for the kid with the ears!..:)
January 9th, 2017 16:32
Where Humility Is Needed
willyweed said:
This is a wonderful work for children,
clean, witty and all of what omgoli
says . a withstand the time nursery rhyme is what you have penned here.
Kudos ww
January 6th, 2017 11:26
willyweed said:
This is a wonderful work for children,
clean, witty and all of what omgoli
says . a withstand the time nursery rhyme is what you have penned here.
Kudos ww
January 6th, 2017 11:26
Where Humility Is Needed
omgoli said:
Beautifully put together, flows quite nicely off the tongue.
January 6th, 2017 11:18
omgoli said:
Beautifully put together, flows quite nicely off the tongue.
January 6th, 2017 11:18
