Comments received on poems by anora_aragon
In love with me?
Louis Gibbs said:
I agree with Fred, the shape of the poem captured me as much or more than the poem itself. A poem\'s shape, to me, is a critical element of it, and can add greatly to its impact. A lesson to be learned by so many who contribute to this site. Thank you for this fine, well thought out poem, anora.
June 22nd, 2017 09:19
Louis Gibbs said:
I agree with Fred, the shape of the poem captured me as much or more than the poem itself. A poem\'s shape, to me, is a critical element of it, and can add greatly to its impact. A lesson to be learned by so many who contribute to this site. Thank you for this fine, well thought out poem, anora.
June 22nd, 2017 09:19
In love with me?
FredPeyer said:
Anora, I don\'t know if you are writing from experience or about an imaginary person. But it does not matter, your writing is great. Your poem drew me in and made me think.
The physical shape which resembles an hour glass is very interesting too as if you want to convey that it might only be a question of time. I can nearly see the sand running down from the top to the bottom. Someone (cannot think of the name anymore) once said that a poem is a picture of words, and you nailed it.
Great poem. Thank you.
June 22nd, 2017 00:00
FredPeyer said:
Anora, I don\'t know if you are writing from experience or about an imaginary person. But it does not matter, your writing is great. Your poem drew me in and made me think.
The physical shape which resembles an hour glass is very interesting too as if you want to convey that it might only be a question of time. I can nearly see the sand running down from the top to the bottom. Someone (cannot think of the name anymore) once said that a poem is a picture of words, and you nailed it.
Great poem. Thank you.
June 22nd, 2017 00:00
I\'m Sorry
Gary Edward Geraci said:
\"Tiring to love\" and \"tiring to hurt\" best said in poetry. We are created for love Anora; infinite, inexhaustible love....
May 17th, 2017 22:43
Gary Edward Geraci said:
\"Tiring to love\" and \"tiring to hurt\" best said in poetry. We are created for love Anora; infinite, inexhaustible love....
May 17th, 2017 22:43
Anger
Pintu Mahakul said:
Blind faith is ignited by bright light of knowledge and self is luminous light that sparks well to judge. Wonderful thoughtful poem is shared here.
March 14th, 2017 06:54
Pintu Mahakul said:
Blind faith is ignited by bright light of knowledge and self is luminous light that sparks well to judge. Wonderful thoughtful poem is shared here.
March 14th, 2017 06:54
Drunk
Will Hiltz said:
I\'ve not read your work before, and I know no more about you than this poem reveals, but what you wrote compelled me to make a few analytic observations that are not meant to be cruel or a put down, but which I post because they may be instructive to you, although not, perhaps, altogether welcome. I\'m a bit new here, and don\'t know how to respond except in this rather public space, which you may resent as well, and for that I do apologize. The moderators are certainly welcome to erase this if they find it unfit for or unbecoming of this site.
Beneath the obvious play of dramatic emotions in this poem lies the poem\'s semantic structure, which tells me what it is really about. The poem has 80 words: 2 words, \"sun,\" and \"shot\" (which is only mentioned twice, 4 times if you count \"another\") refer to inanimate things external to you. The other person, also external to you, is mentioned only 5 times in 2nd person singular, 2 of those times as an object, and only 3 times as subject. The first person plural, \"we,\" a relational word encompassing you and he, is used only twice. But by contrast to all that, the first person singular, \"I\" and its possessive, \"my\" occur a total of 15 times in the poem, representing 18.75% (almost 1/5) of the words in the entire poem - that\'s a rather unbalanced amount of focus!
The title here is \"Drunk,\" but the alcohol is merely a bit player by comparison in this unhappy scene, which I think you\'ve captured more accurately than you consciously intended. It is a powerful poem in that way, but powerfully sad. I wish you the best in working your way through that over the years, and while the alcohol is not the main problem, it will certainly get horribly in your way, and is something you would do well to avoid entirely.
March 10th, 2017 01:23
Will Hiltz said:
I\'ve not read your work before, and I know no more about you than this poem reveals, but what you wrote compelled me to make a few analytic observations that are not meant to be cruel or a put down, but which I post because they may be instructive to you, although not, perhaps, altogether welcome. I\'m a bit new here, and don\'t know how to respond except in this rather public space, which you may resent as well, and for that I do apologize. The moderators are certainly welcome to erase this if they find it unfit for or unbecoming of this site.
Beneath the obvious play of dramatic emotions in this poem lies the poem\'s semantic structure, which tells me what it is really about. The poem has 80 words: 2 words, \"sun,\" and \"shot\" (which is only mentioned twice, 4 times if you count \"another\") refer to inanimate things external to you. The other person, also external to you, is mentioned only 5 times in 2nd person singular, 2 of those times as an object, and only 3 times as subject. The first person plural, \"we,\" a relational word encompassing you and he, is used only twice. But by contrast to all that, the first person singular, \"I\" and its possessive, \"my\" occur a total of 15 times in the poem, representing 18.75% (almost 1/5) of the words in the entire poem - that\'s a rather unbalanced amount of focus!
The title here is \"Drunk,\" but the alcohol is merely a bit player by comparison in this unhappy scene, which I think you\'ve captured more accurately than you consciously intended. It is a powerful poem in that way, but powerfully sad. I wish you the best in working your way through that over the years, and while the alcohol is not the main problem, it will certainly get horribly in your way, and is something you would do well to avoid entirely.
March 10th, 2017 01:23
Drunk
Augustus said:
This just perfectly describes what drives the addict in us. Well done.
March 9th, 2017 23:28
Augustus said:
This just perfectly describes what drives the addict in us. Well done.
March 9th, 2017 23:28
Loneliness
Goldfinch60 said:
You are still with us and will be for a long time to enthral us with your wonderful words.
March 9th, 2017 02:36
Goldfinch60 said:
You are still with us and will be for a long time to enthral us with your wonderful words.
March 9th, 2017 02:36
Lost
Tony36 said:
You are an awesome writer, and I enjoy reading your work. Don\'t be to hard on yourself it does no good
March 7th, 2017 16:05
Tony36 said:
You are an awesome writer, and I enjoy reading your work. Don\'t be to hard on yourself it does no good
March 7th, 2017 16:05
Monday Showers
Isabel Chelisia Villa said:
ive been there, great write though..
March 6th, 2017 11:21
Isabel Chelisia Villa said:
ive been there, great write though..
March 6th, 2017 11:21
Possibilities
willyweed said:
you can\'t worry about how it will end if you won\'t let it begin?
March 5th, 2017 15:47
willyweed said:
you can\'t worry about how it will end if you won\'t let it begin?
March 5th, 2017 15:47
Heartache
AtheistAngel- Daniel Mc\'leod said:
This piece touched me in a deeply personal way and for that i thank you.
March 4th, 2017 05:24
AtheistAngel- Daniel Mc\'leod said:
This piece touched me in a deeply personal way and for that i thank you.
March 4th, 2017 05:24
Heartache
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good emotive write. May your rocks soon be spilled out and you come up from the depths of despair into a world of love.
March 4th, 2017 02:22
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good emotive write. May your rocks soon be spilled out and you come up from the depths of despair into a world of love.
March 4th, 2017 02:22
Heartache
Hopey_xx said:
Well done, I could feel the emotion through the words!
March 3rd, 2017 16:12
Hopey_xx said:
Well done, I could feel the emotion through the words!
March 3rd, 2017 16:12
Spring
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME ANORA ~ Thanks for your first Poem ! Like your \"Flower\" it is tinged with sadness ~ but there are glimmers of hope ! We are all affected by the seasons and in the UK we are (slowly) coming into Spring with it\'s promise of New Life and New Love ~ then the Summer where the \"Winter of Depression & Discontent\" will (hopefully) seem a long time ago ! Thanks for sharing. Please check my Poems ~ Thanks BRIAN
February 28th, 2017 17:32
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME ANORA ~ Thanks for your first Poem ! Like your \"Flower\" it is tinged with sadness ~ but there are glimmers of hope ! We are all affected by the seasons and in the UK we are (slowly) coming into Spring with it\'s promise of New Life and New Love ~ then the Summer where the \"Winter of Depression & Discontent\" will (hopefully) seem a long time ago ! Thanks for sharing. Please check my Poems ~ Thanks BRIAN
February 28th, 2017 17:32
