orchidee

An Autumn Dance (adapted)



Adapted with permission

from a poem of same title by Lamb067

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Tune: Lux Benigna

('Lead, kindly Light')

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Took upon, forced, a blustery Autumn dance

I saw by chance

Partnered in routine, sun's rays shimmering

Enchancements bring

Nature's pallet, abundant with shades all

Summer heat fades, we painted into Fall

 

Voives of the trees flirt to a scatter

Leaves lay flatter

On ground, but sporadic movement there be

And rustling free

Chitter chatter their sound, they to us come

With hopeful hearts through days, then guide us home

 

With disappointment we sweep them away

Their colours fray

Now comes a slow end unto Autumn's days

It goes its ways

As curtain falls and carpet coverings

All soft, deep leaves, Winter waits in the wings

 

So now the trees stand tall and bare and quiet

As if lost heart

Their voices not sound yet, till Spring's advent

They be patient

Though now howl of the Winter's ghose we'll hear

Promise of Spring again shall re-appear 

 

Comments7

  • Michael Edwards

    I was doing a leaf dance and then autumn arrived - I got very cold. Hey this something different and a fine write it is Orchi.

    • orchidee

      Thanks Michael. Did ya see the original poem by Lamb067? I've only added one or two originals bits myself. I have adapted a few poet's poems in the past, with permission, not plagi-wotsit them. You know - that big word that sound like 'plague', and means nicking other poet's works - and incurring their wrath! One naughty poet did it on a site, and copped it. He tried to make money out of it too.

      • Michael Edwards

        Strangely I've also used someones poem as an inspiration but it's quite different to the original to the effect that it would be hard to match them together. and I certainly wouldn't want to attempt to make money out of it.

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      • BRIAN & ANGELA

        Thanks UNCLE STEVE ~ ALED is still a fine singer ~ Often Choir Boys become CROAKY but not ALED. Our Dream Cruise would be with ALED as the Guest Singer ~ AMEN. Thanks for POEM ~ I often adapt but always acknowledge to be safe !
        Autumn is a great Season but too soon (like today !) it morphs into WINTER ! Angela is enjoying SPRING in NZ and December 1st it will be Summer. Shes still in BED (6 am) I will SKYPE her @ 7 am (NZ time). Yours as always BRIAN !

        • orchidee

          Thanks B&A. Pity I turned up to sing with Aled, and ruined everything! heehee.

        • lambo67

          Approval all around. Well done my friend

          • orchidee

            Thanks lambo.

          • Laura

            Orchi,

            Great adaptation!
            Bravo! 👏🏻

            ~Laura~

            • orchidee

              Thanks Laura.

            • Tamara Beryl Latham - The Poet

              Nicely written orchidee. Although I didn't see the original poem, I loved your nature's theme, but hate the fact we will soon experience the icy cold of Winter.

              :-)

              • orchidee

                Thanks Tamara. Lambo's original poem is still on the site, if you do a search.

                • Tamara Beryl Latham - The Poet

                  OK, I will. Thanks!

                  I tried, but couldn't find it.

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                • Goldfinch60

                  Nature's pallet is to be held in awe.
                  Brilliant write Orchi.

                  • orchidee

                    Thanks Gold.

                  • Tamara Beryl Latham - The Poet

                    Yes, I finally saw the original. Your version is a nice tribute too.



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