The picture above is me working in the studio taken from my website. For an explanation about the work below please see my comments in the COMMENTS box to the right.
No resting place for pliant thoughts
His fears to die an unwept death
Were still inclined
Inclined by indolence
But slowly bruises with
As old presiding spirit flowed
Once stupefied his soul
Unfolding now
Seeks to cross divided thoughts
old / dissipate unfounded prejudices
Blind prejudice _/Feelings …..influenced the tongue
Where once the soiled water flowed
As sunshine falls on barren ? arid soils
He seeks to cross the ? empty basin
As rivulets begin to flow
The dark obstructions
swept away
Sources of all displeasure
And snow melt waters start to seep
Builds …….
And feelings fountain flows again.
And /‘tho /now on calming waters
He no longer looks/no more/ for bridges.
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Forgive me for not posting an actual poem but I had a PM asking how I go about writing my poems so thought I'd post the first stage. I usually start off with a basic theme and then gather ideas and word associations, often over several days, which I think might be useful. The work posted opposite is the first stage in a poem and gives a number of ideas some of which I have used, some altered and some discarded. I have called the finished poem HE NO LONGER LOOKS FOR BRIDGES - I will post the finished work tomorrow.
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EXCELLENT MICHAEL ~ Thanks for taking time and space to explain the "Evolution of a Poem" One of the problems of composing on a PC is that all the DRAFTS are deleted. When I give a talk on a POET like John Betjeman I show picture of his altered and revised MS because it demonstrates the process you describe. Betjeman's finished poems are honed masterpieces and a "linguisitic and grammar model" for any Young Poet to try to emulate. My posted poems are not perfect and I do get sent corrections ! I don't do it all on the PC but my paper pre-copies are all destroyed ! I look forward to your Poem ~ BRIAN. Please check my latest poem which just flowed and needed no editing ! However if I had thought about I would not have posted it ~ Trump's G-Men know where I live ! Thanks B
I do so agree with you Brian. I often think that JB is often by-passed probably because his work is so often tongue in cheek or light hearted but for me he is up there with the best. I also love Roger McGough and John Hegley for the same reasons.
Very educational. Great shot of you!
thanks so much and- yes - probably one of the better shots.
Your first stage certainly has a form to sculp a beautiful poem. The process of writing a poem may take tme, but is worth it to produce great work.
Often just gathering ideas can take days - often getting inspiration from books and even dialogue on the TV - thanks for commenting rrodiguez.
wow ~ you do work clean! so glad you posted this so that we could get a view into your studio and additionally into the creative process of your poetry writing! can't wait to see the finished product, although the unfinished product is pretty amazing in and of itself!
Thanks Janey - I am rather tidy (almost obsessively so) and having read through my scribbles I must agree the first 3 or 4 lines almost stand up in their own right.
Wow! Thanks for sharing this! Cannot wait to see the finished work!
Posted tomorrow first light here in the UK - thanks for commenting.
Sometimes we have to look out the window to see the light and realize that the bridge to Paradise is a two way crossing.Our attitudes, our outlook on life, and life in general is a blank canvas. We choose the image, the color, the lighting.
A great idea for your poem. Old feelings (soiled water) are refreshed by (snow melt waters). No need to search for a better place. Happiness is here. Will look forward to tomorrow's post. - Phil A.
Thanks so much Phil - just hope I wake up tomorrow - well you never know :0)
It's interesting to see how you make your artwork and poems. I really liked your poem today. Can't wait to see what you post tomorrow!!
Thanks so much Christina.
Awesome write
Thanks Tony - well I hope so - let me know what you think when I post the outcome.
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