ENJOY & EXPERIENCE THE 5 SENSES OF LOVE @ SUNSET !
When she came into my VISION
My heart skipped a beat ~ it was her EYES
Liquid pools of LOVE ~ Her HAIR spun Jet
Sensual effect came on me by surprise !
I'd never seen an ANGEL ~ or perhaps
Another Worldly Being in disguise ?
As He walked closer
His powerful SCENT enchanted Me
A delicate SCENT of Sandlewood
Exuded from Him ~ no one else could see
His PHEREMONES had lured me in
Like the tide pulls in the Sea !
The TASTE of a Lady is subtle
A melange of many differing flavours
HONEY of lips and petals ~ SALT of tears
MUSK of perspiration ~ these are what one savours !
To kiss ~ to lick ~ to suck
These are Man's pursuits
His LOVE to prove ~ and win His Lady's favours
With power in his fingertips
Man's TOUCH ~ has Magic all its own
Caress that travels through the skin
Gliding to my sweet Love Zones ~ unknown !
It's my delight to feel it ~ soft or rough
His loving TOUCHES ~ when we are alone
The SOUND of LOVE is never silent
Whispering sweet nothings in her ears
Verbalising intimacies ~ Kitten & Puppy talk
Karma Sutrac sounds ~ that no one else can hear
Words WE would never use in Public
Too intimate for Public use I fear ~ And
I can only guess ~ why my Love's screaming ~ YES YES YES !
Thanks for visiting ~ comments welcome ~ Love B & S XOX
This Poem is a lighthearted Ode on the "Five Senses of Love"
composed alternatively by BRIANSODES and SANTITA ~ Enjoy
The Poem is presented as five sextets each with a consistent
rhyming pattern xaxaxa xbxbxb xcxcxc There is an extra
line in verse five from the Sound Effects Man ~ OK !
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Author:
BRIANSODES (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: August 31st, 2017 01:05
- Comment from author about the poem: A Collaboration Poem is composed by two people. It is based on an agreed theme and then each person composes an alternate verse which ~ complement each other ~ using an agreed structure. SANTITA and I agreed on the the title which limited the ode to five verses ! I composed verses 1. Sight 3. Taste 5. Sound and SANTITA verses 2. Scent and 4. Touch. From a distance ~ we agreed the content and composition of each verse and agreed (for the sake of the Children !) that it should be classified as "18". Comments welcome ~ Yours as ever SANTITA & BRIAN XOXOXOX
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Comments11
Excellent collaboration!! Bravo! You both did an excellent job on your senses and it came out wonderful and tastefully done! A joy to read. Hugs to both!--Christina
Thanks CHRISTINA ~ for your very loving and generous comment ~ I am pleased that a Lady of your standing found it tasteful ~ we tried to keep within accepted MPS linguistic boundaries ! It was written to express the sensual JOY of LOVE and I am pleased that that was your perception too ! Thanks again ~ Big Hugs ~ BRIAN (Your BEST MPS Friend !)
Wow - some collaboration - I take my hat off to you both - an exceptional end result.
YES YES YES MICHAEL ~ Somewhere along the way Love's been good to me. We are very grateful for you TITFA removing comment ~ We felt the complete Poem exceeded the sum of the parts. That's the Glory of ~ that' the Story of ~ a Symbiotic Collaboration Poem ~ Thanks B & S
Very good write by you both.
THANKS ANDY ~ Pleased you liked it ~ I guess it needed an 18 ! ~ Yours B & S
A lovely write! But oh woe, shall I ever experience it? Shall I ever get past swooning, and that's only reading about it! heehee. I should "get out more" cos I keep living in this shelter!
Thanks for your comment STEVE ! You should know by now ~ that Love lasts as long as the senses are active ! However I\'m informed by my Grandparents that the comatose ~ who dwell in shelters ~ feel hardly anything ~ Yours BRIAN
Excellent job both of you.
Thanks DA ~ We are "Soul Mates fn the Muse" and the collaboration resonated in perfect harmony ~ Thanks for your kind comment ~ Yours B & S
In this case one plus one equals three!
Yes indeed FRED ~ Well spotted ~ we both love the finished collaboration and we agree that finished polished product is (at least) 150% better than the sum of the parts (you do the Maths) Yours as ever ~ B & S
That was a beautiful collaboration. Very well written from both of you.
Thanks SM87 ~ for your positive comment ~ much appreciated ~ Yours B & S
I would find it difficult to this so hats off to you for working so well together , nicely expressed and executed....
Thanks for your encouraging comment Friend . SANTITA and I are empathetic and have similar tastes in poetry so we resonate ! This helps to focus the writing and it facilitates both the writing ~ and agreeing the draft ~ OK. Yours B & S
Unbelievable. so seamless.
Perfect.
Thanks for your encouraging comments ! Because Santita and I on the same wavelength poetically ~ we resonate and our Collaboration could have bee by one hand (without the Gender Bias) ~ OK Yours B & S
I'm happy to come here to find this one. Very nice written. You two are a perfect paired poets, I must say. Great sinthony. Love the subject and it came out perfect. Congrats for both.
Thanks MALU ~ Yes we are poetic SOUL MATES and in perfect Harmony ~ empathy in action ~ Brotherly Love as always BROTHER ~ BRIAN Please check our latest Joint Fusion on DRINK ~ Click on developing to see it Yous BRIAN
Bravo on your collaboration, both Brian and Santita. Great going.
Thanks FRANK ~ Collaboration poems are FUN and the whole is always greater than the sum of the Poems ~ BRIAN
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