We met in a coffee house
As you spoke some unbearable truth
I’m just being ‘brutally honest’ you said
As your words became loose
I sunk into the chair
While you started to snare
Your intentions may have been good
But I promise no pain can compare
I agree with your points
While my cemented tears dry
Even though I had no choice
You made sure this was goodbye
I could of ‘palmed you off to someone else’
This earthquake rung my ears
While you covered your own back
Revealing my greatest doubts and fears
Memories have been tainted
Past lyrics faked
I was so excited to see you
Until you caused me unfair shame
You knew I was hurting
But twisted the knife deep
Right behind my back
A place I couldn’t see
You made me numb to feel
My sanity started to peel
As I told you ‘don’t start’
I now remain a blurry picture of swallowed art
I will never return to that coffee house
Or replay my favourite song
Never again taste that sweet poisoned cinnamon drink
As that’s where it ended
That’s where my heart was tore
Piece by piece
By someone I truly adored
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Author:
ShannonXx (
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- Comment from author about the poem: This is about a friendship that went wrong
- Category: Friendship
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I read this almost like a book - it flowed (the mark of a good work) really enjoyed it despite it being a sad read.
Thank you!
Sad and hurtful as it was, you were shown what that person is really like. You deserve better and you will find someone better. I believe in what goes around, will come around. Their time will come when the hurt will be on them. Written with purpose and conviction. Excellent write Shannon. ; )
Thank you very much! And yes they certainly weren't the person I thought they were
You're welcome. I too have had friendships that were not what I'd thought or changed over time. Some people never seem to grow up. My best friend of 40+ years is a perfect example. Suddenly I'd noticed how immature he was and also disrespectful. I just said, "OK, I've had enough". And we haven't talked since. So choose your friends wisely Shannon. ; )
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Your excellent poem made something so clear: Too many people, especially men, lack empathy.
And your writing is very, very, good: 'I now remain a blurry picture of swallowed art' made me stop and re-read.
Thank you so much!
"While my cemented tears dry" - what a great line. Very good emotive write Shannon - some people are just untrustworthy and always hurt others.
Thank you! Yes unfortunately we have people like that in this world
Your phrasing paints such clear mental pictures. The scene the anguish, the characters. A long piece but unlike many a similar outpouring yours was never repetative or in the slightest boring/mundane. Compelling reading.
Thank you! I really appreciate the comment 🙂
This made my heart melt! Good write
Thank you!
Thanks for sharing SHANNON ~ I trust you found it CATHARTIC ! To your Friends on MPS you are a lovely Young Lady ~ How could some stupid Person (there are a lot of them out there) treat you like that ? We all respect and love you ~ Every Blessing ~ Love BRIAN XOX
Thank you so much! Very kind words 🙂
hi shannon , i think some people can be careless in their words towards other people , there is a way to go about things and it seems his/ her way was kind of wrong ... its ok to be honest but brutal honesty can hurt like hell. it sounds like you are a sensitive person who was hurt by somebody who lacks a bit of consideration towards your feelings .. the knife digging deep into your back shows how much pain this person caused you , i love the line referring to a swallowed piece of art , that is quite an interesting and unique line i like how you mentioned memoriees being tainted. i really do like this .. you know, you express very well the pain this person caused you and how his brutal honesty deeply hurt you .. sorry
Thank you so much! I really appreciate your comment 🙂
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