much more intricate
than man's design ~ dew covered
bejewelled spider web
sunken stone glistening
silent trout ~ with his shadow
turns them off and on
no shelter from rain
damp pigeon ~ lets the rain drops
escape down her tail
waving green sea-grass
a bright fringe on the dark dunes
in coastal sunrise
jewel of an insect
iridescent dragon fly
alights on my pond
Thanks for sharing ~ comments welcome ~ BRIAN XOX
Classical English Haiku must be about NATURE ~ written
in lower case with no Rhyme and no Punctuation ! SENRYU
are about HUMAN Foibles & Emotions Ideally they should have
17 syllables presented in a 5 7 5 pattern ~ The above are
good examples and ones I use (each with its own picture)
in my Poetry Class for Seniors ~ ENJOY ~ BRIAN XOX
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A fine flurry of fabulous Haiku Brian. I've run out of 'f's now!
Thanks STEVE for your encouraging comment ! Also for reminding us of the importance of ALLITERATION in poetry ! It add rhythm and aids recitation ! Yours BRIAN
Good Haikus Brian but your statement about Senryu is incorrect Senryu are about emotion.
THANKS FOR YOUR COMMENT ANDY ~ YES In my experience SENRYU do tend to be about people and human foibles ! They are emotional and often cynical and humorous whereas HAIKU are more gentle and serious ~ Yours BRIAN Thanks for your comment on Artists (FUSION) I have added a picture of Holman Hunt's ~ Light of the World ~ OK !
I especially love the 2nd and 3rd little haikus Brian.....
Thanks LORNA and thanks for saving it as a FAVORITE ~TWO is my fave ~ i love to watch rainbow trout in a clear stream ! I have added a DRAGON FLY ~ you might like to re-visit ! Yours as ever ~ BRIAN Please add a ARTIST to my new FUSION ~ I will add a PAINTING ~ Thanks B !
A great collection of Haiku today Brian! I like the bejeweled spider web one, probably because it comes with a picture! Glad you are doing well!
THANKS CHRIS ~ All is in order ~ A & R are enjoying their stopover in SINGAPORE ~ New Zealand tomorrow ! Pleased you liked the HAIKU ~ I love dew bedecked Spider Webs but I have changed the picture please check ~ Hugs ~ Brian & Angela ~ @@@@@@@
Very nice Haiku Brains, very pleasant work as always-Theta
Thanks THETA ~ Pleased you liked them ! I always post to give pleasure ~ OK ~ BRIAN
Five gems Brian
Thanks MIKE ~ Nature always stirs my MUSE and what better response than a perfect ENGLISH HAIKU ~ Pleased you enjoyed them as you would a gemstone ! Each one represents something I have witnessed in Nature ~ Yours BRIAN
Please add an ARTIST to my latest FUSION and I will add an apt painting as I did for ANDY ~ Thanks B !
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