Comments received on poems by Jo Middleton
Hand me down
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
a sweater which has loose threads , and is itchy and scratchy .. maybe somebody needs to re-invent this sweater , make it less itchy , less scratchy, sow the threads back together .. then the sweater will be wanted... there is nothing wrong with you jo and you seem like a lovely person , , i can relate to feeling unwanted... i think maybe people need to take more notice of this sweater and realise it is still worth something , it should not be discarded or left alone, the sweater needs to be treated with love , just like the broken girl , she needs to heal ..
February 11th, 2018 06:08
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
a sweater which has loose threads , and is itchy and scratchy .. maybe somebody needs to re-invent this sweater , make it less itchy , less scratchy, sow the threads back together .. then the sweater will be wanted... there is nothing wrong with you jo and you seem like a lovely person , , i can relate to feeling unwanted... i think maybe people need to take more notice of this sweater and realise it is still worth something , it should not be discarded or left alone, the sweater needs to be treated with love , just like the broken girl , she needs to heal ..
February 11th, 2018 06:08
Hand me down
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
BRILLIANT jo ! 😊 and i feel very sorry for the sweater.. seems nobody wants this sweater , eventually it ends up on a lampost for all to see, so sad .. it speaks to me of a girl who feels unloved and unwanted . you really have some great way with words, i love how you used the idea of an unwanted sweater .. nicely done 😊
February 11th, 2018 05:54
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
BRILLIANT jo ! 😊 and i feel very sorry for the sweater.. seems nobody wants this sweater , eventually it ends up on a lampost for all to see, so sad .. it speaks to me of a girl who feels unloved and unwanted . you really have some great way with words, i love how you used the idea of an unwanted sweater .. nicely done 😊
February 11th, 2018 05:54
Charlotte
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
BEAUTIFUL 😊 aaw , thankyou .. you are so kind and this is such a good piece of writing .. i will reply to your private message a bit later.. x
February 10th, 2018 06:55
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
BEAUTIFUL 😊 aaw , thankyou .. you are so kind and this is such a good piece of writing .. i will reply to your private message a bit later.. x
February 10th, 2018 06:55
Annihilation
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
wow, joe ! this is quite incredibly AMAZING for someone so young, you have one amazing poetic talent ! :-) this speaks to me of a girl who has pushed someone away , someone who she loved ...
All I wanted to absolute dedication
Buts it a rude request when their ribs are breaking
Under my thumbs I press harder
I didn\'t mean to, but I beat louder \'\'
really so expressive .. such strong wording here! it sounds like you realise you put too much pressure on him , you understand why he walked away from you , you stil want him and yet you realise it is not going to happen . so much pain in this writing joe, and a lot of self loathing and suicidal type feelings ..
i especially love these lines ..
\'\'My happy rose pill is gone and left me
It\'s dark not because it\'s night
But rays of sunshine fell fell fell
Let I still hear those butterflies going about
Wings fluttering, irritating me now
so sad joe , i understand what it feels like to live in darkness in your mind and when pretty/ happy things are around you , it just causes one irritation , as you are not happy and just want to be happy .. you have so much amazing talent, please do keep sharing , i love your work just sorry you have to suffer , i can relate in a way
February 8th, 2018 04:45
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
wow, joe ! this is quite incredibly AMAZING for someone so young, you have one amazing poetic talent ! :-) this speaks to me of a girl who has pushed someone away , someone who she loved ...
All I wanted to absolute dedication
Buts it a rude request when their ribs are breaking
Under my thumbs I press harder
I didn\'t mean to, but I beat louder \'\'
really so expressive .. such strong wording here! it sounds like you realise you put too much pressure on him , you understand why he walked away from you , you stil want him and yet you realise it is not going to happen . so much pain in this writing joe, and a lot of self loathing and suicidal type feelings ..
i especially love these lines ..
\'\'My happy rose pill is gone and left me
It\'s dark not because it\'s night
But rays of sunshine fell fell fell
Let I still hear those butterflies going about
Wings fluttering, irritating me now
so sad joe , i understand what it feels like to live in darkness in your mind and when pretty/ happy things are around you , it just causes one irritation , as you are not happy and just want to be happy .. you have so much amazing talent, please do keep sharing , i love your work just sorry you have to suffer , i can relate in a way
February 8th, 2018 04:45
Overdose
Leigh Cameron said:
i normally don\'t comment on poems, but this one really hit home. it\'s well written i felt every word written. keep writing, sugar.
xoxo, L.D. Cameron
January 30th, 2018 22:08
Leigh Cameron said:
i normally don\'t comment on poems, but this one really hit home. it\'s well written i felt every word written. keep writing, sugar.
xoxo, L.D. Cameron
January 30th, 2018 22:08
Overdose
AlexHoy said:
Well written. Although I’d like to mention that I think the word you were looking for was “breathe” rather than “breath”
For example, “I can not breathe” versus “I can not catch my breath”
January 30th, 2018 15:54
AlexHoy said:
Well written. Although I’d like to mention that I think the word you were looking for was “breathe” rather than “breath”
For example, “I can not breathe” versus “I can not catch my breath”
January 30th, 2018 15:54
Butterfly
Aislinn Wilson said:
This is extremely strong writing with vivid imagery and a fantastic sense of tone. The symbolism is haunting, and the whispering flow astounds.
I mean this as a compliment when I say this gives me vibes of the music artist Nicole Dollanganger.
January 29th, 2018 13:40
Aislinn Wilson said:
This is extremely strong writing with vivid imagery and a fantastic sense of tone. The symbolism is haunting, and the whispering flow astounds.
I mean this as a compliment when I say this gives me vibes of the music artist Nicole Dollanganger.
January 29th, 2018 13:40
Butterfly
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
i can\'t help thinking that the butterfly is another girl ... and she caught \'\' his \'\' attention. someone else catching his attention whilst you are in pain .. my interpration anyhow , maybe i am wrong , beautiful and powerful poem , anyhow :-)
January 29th, 2018 09:55
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
i can\'t help thinking that the butterfly is another girl ... and she caught \'\' his \'\' attention. someone else catching his attention whilst you are in pain .. my interpration anyhow , maybe i am wrong , beautiful and powerful poem , anyhow :-)
January 29th, 2018 09:55
Butterfly
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
hey jo :-) this is a very strong piece of writing and quite beautiful .. a butterfly should never be squashed or hurt .. pretty / beautiful parts of the world should never been hurt. i enjoyed reading this
January 29th, 2018 09:51
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
hey jo :-) this is a very strong piece of writing and quite beautiful .. a butterfly should never be squashed or hurt .. pretty / beautiful parts of the world should never been hurt. i enjoyed reading this
January 29th, 2018 09:51
floccinaucinihilipilification
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
gosh , this is a real word lol floccinaucinihilipilification... never heard of it before but i see it means relating to worthlessness ... thanks for sharing a word i never heard of before :-)
January 25th, 2018 05:01
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
gosh , this is a real word lol floccinaucinihilipilification... never heard of it before but i see it means relating to worthlessness ... thanks for sharing a word i never heard of before :-)
January 25th, 2018 05:01
floccinaucinihilipilification
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
you should check out my poem .. tunnel turning me to shadow \'\' same type of idea, isolate , alone , scared, feeling like we cannot get out
January 25th, 2018 04:57
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
you should check out my poem .. tunnel turning me to shadow \'\' same type of idea, isolate , alone , scared, feeling like we cannot get out
January 25th, 2018 04:57
floccinaucinihilipilification
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
wow, this is a very powerful piece of writing .. interesting how yo posted one about darkness and tunnel , because so have i ! so used to the darkness that we feel weird when we see a light ... you express very well the loneliness and isolation of being stuck in a neverending tunnel , well done :-) i can relate
January 25th, 2018 04:56
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
wow, this is a very powerful piece of writing .. interesting how yo posted one about darkness and tunnel , because so have i ! so used to the darkness that we feel weird when we see a light ... you express very well the loneliness and isolation of being stuck in a neverending tunnel , well done :-) i can relate
January 25th, 2018 04:56
The embezzled halo
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
hi jo.. wow :-) i can\'t help but enjoy this .. i love how you describe the angel with lips like a ruby and hair like sunshine beams. it seems you carried sailors who were not very nice at all, and they killed this lovely and beautiful angel .. a truly great read :-) i feel sad for the angel
January 24th, 2018 04:09
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
hi jo.. wow :-) i can\'t help but enjoy this .. i love how you describe the angel with lips like a ruby and hair like sunshine beams. it seems you carried sailors who were not very nice at all, and they killed this lovely and beautiful angel .. a truly great read :-) i feel sad for the angel
January 24th, 2018 04:09
The Encase Wrap
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
interesting way of writing .. i really liked this .. tho can i ask , who is jack referring to ?
January 24th, 2018 04:01
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
interesting way of writing .. i really liked this .. tho can i ask , who is jack referring to ?
January 24th, 2018 04:01
Awake
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME JO ~ Thanks for your first poem ~ very autobiographical ! I like it because you tell it like it was ad now is and many of us can empathise ! Being 16 is the BEST of TIMES and the WORST of TIMES ~ we all want to break from our past ~ but we don\'t know how to because we\'re scared of the FUTURE and as you say ~ We just sit quaking ~ quaking ~ waiting ! All I can promise ~ from my experience ~ it does get gradually better ~ if your try to make the RIGHT CHOICES ~ that is what life is all about ! Blessings ~ Yours BRIAN (UK) P.S. Having a CAT is the best Friend you will ever have ~ Cats are empathetic and always know just how we feel !
January 22nd, 2018 18:24
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME JO ~ Thanks for your first poem ~ very autobiographical ! I like it because you tell it like it was ad now is and many of us can empathise ! Being 16 is the BEST of TIMES and the WORST of TIMES ~ we all want to break from our past ~ but we don\'t know how to because we\'re scared of the FUTURE and as you say ~ We just sit quaking ~ quaking ~ waiting ! All I can promise ~ from my experience ~ it does get gradually better ~ if your try to make the RIGHT CHOICES ~ that is what life is all about ! Blessings ~ Yours BRIAN (UK) P.S. Having a CAT is the best Friend you will ever have ~ Cats are empathetic and always know just how we feel !
January 22nd, 2018 18:24
Awake
Poetic Dan said:
That was brilliant so many heart felt lines. Thank you
January 22nd, 2018 12:25
Poetic Dan said:
That was brilliant so many heart felt lines. Thank you
January 22nd, 2018 12:25
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