Comments received on poems by Dan Williams
Would Be Wordsmith
sorenbarrett said:
Very nicely written the thoughts of a poet who is writing to convey a message. As to the last line so nicely stated \"make it clever or just make it pretty?\" I say make it from the heart and that is enough. I have been inside that thought of this poem and know its color, smell and texture. A wonderful write poet to poet.
August 18th, 2024 04:59
sorenbarrett said:
Very nicely written the thoughts of a poet who is writing to convey a message. As to the last line so nicely stated \"make it clever or just make it pretty?\" I say make it from the heart and that is enough. I have been inside that thought of this poem and know its color, smell and texture. A wonderful write poet to poet.
August 18th, 2024 04:59
At the Bottom, In the Pit
Dan Williams said:
I suspect any number things could spell the demise of humans; greed is he top of my list. It drives the rest and seems cannot be cured or even diminished. Any that could control it are the very ones profiting most from it. Makes me sad, colors most of my writing. Thanks for recognizing it.
August 17th, 2024 23:08
Dan Williams said:
I suspect any number things could spell the demise of humans; greed is he top of my list. It drives the rest and seems cannot be cured or even diminished. Any that could control it are the very ones profiting most from it. Makes me sad, colors most of my writing. Thanks for recognizing it.
August 17th, 2024 23:08
At the Bottom, In the Pit
sorenbarrett said:
Gluttony, greed a human quality no other animals kill more than they need to eat. A nicely rhymed poem that speaks of this. Nicely worded my friend.
August 17th, 2024 07:08
sorenbarrett said:
Gluttony, greed a human quality no other animals kill more than they need to eat. A nicely rhymed poem that speaks of this. Nicely worded my friend.
August 17th, 2024 07:08
Tigers Tearing
Dan Williams said:
I did ask, and thanks. I tend to slip into rant but am working on it.
August 16th, 2024 19:26
Dan Williams said:
I did ask, and thanks. I tend to slip into rant but am working on it.
August 16th, 2024 19:26
The Student?
Dan Williams said:
I write a lot about this because I genuinely fear what this country will be Luke for my daughter. Somehow maybe she won\'t have to say \"he told you so\" Thanks.
August 16th, 2024 19:14
Dan Williams said:
I write a lot about this because I genuinely fear what this country will be Luke for my daughter. Somehow maybe she won\'t have to say \"he told you so\" Thanks.
August 16th, 2024 19:14
Tigers Tearing
sorenbarrett said:
Dan this reads clearly and is full of vivid images. As you asked I will give one hint. Less is more see if you can condense the full meaning of each line into fewer words. Loved the message and only include the suggestion because you asked.
August 16th, 2024 04:59
sorenbarrett said:
Dan this reads clearly and is full of vivid images. As you asked I will give one hint. Less is more see if you can condense the full meaning of each line into fewer words. Loved the message and only include the suggestion because you asked.
August 16th, 2024 04:59
Tigers Tearing
Cassie58 said:
Tigers Tearing, what frightful dreams you have. Fortunately for me , my dreams are
far less troublesome Dan. I hope your dreams don’t linger with you all day. An interesting and descriptive write, very imaginative. Have a happy Friday.
August 16th, 2024 01:38
Cassie58 said:
Tigers Tearing, what frightful dreams you have. Fortunately for me , my dreams are
far less troublesome Dan. I hope your dreams don’t linger with you all day. An interesting and descriptive write, very imaginative. Have a happy Friday.
August 16th, 2024 01:38
The Student?
Doggerel Dave said:
\"illusion of liberty\" Does it for me, Dan. You really don\'t have to justify that, but since you have - good stuff.
August 16th, 2024 01:17
Doggerel Dave said:
\"illusion of liberty\" Does it for me, Dan. You really don\'t have to justify that, but since you have - good stuff.
August 16th, 2024 01:17
Tigers Tearing
Neville said:
You are absolutely write .. this must surely be the mother of all pessimistic dreams .. blame it on the world why don\'tcha .. I don\'t suppose the cheese has anything to do with it ..
August 16th, 2024 01:13
Neville said:
You are absolutely write .. this must surely be the mother of all pessimistic dreams .. blame it on the world why don\'tcha .. I don\'t suppose the cheese has anything to do with it ..
August 16th, 2024 01:13
Gargoyle of Dreams
sorenbarrett said:
The sad story of the folly of youth and the jadedness of age. Time takes us all and few grow wisdom. Very nice.
August 15th, 2024 03:48
sorenbarrett said:
The sad story of the folly of youth and the jadedness of age. Time takes us all and few grow wisdom. Very nice.
August 15th, 2024 03:48
Complacency Dares
sorenbarrett said:
Brilliant!! A masterpiece. The rhyme and meter in this pulls me on as time itself. The story itself majestically told in metaphor and splendid words and symbolism. Your word choice is excellent. Loved this write my friend
August 14th, 2024 04:55
sorenbarrett said:
Brilliant!! A masterpiece. The rhyme and meter in this pulls me on as time itself. The story itself majestically told in metaphor and splendid words and symbolism. Your word choice is excellent. Loved this write my friend
August 14th, 2024 04:55
Complacency Dares
Neville said:
This is magic sir .. that\'s the category I think most fitting .. bravo poet .. N
August 14th, 2024 02:00
Neville said:
This is magic sir .. that\'s the category I think most fitting .. bravo poet .. N
August 14th, 2024 02:00
Choir of Angels
sorenbarrett said:
The blues are soulful and come straight from the heart. Love the blues more than something commercially shiny
August 13th, 2024 05:27
sorenbarrett said:
The blues are soulful and come straight from the heart. Love the blues more than something commercially shiny
August 13th, 2024 05:27
Choir of Angels
2781 said:
My wife tells me I am depressing. Funny thing is, I feel like the happiest man alive.
Good to keep our eyes open.
August 13th, 2024 02:17
2781 said:
My wife tells me I am depressing. Funny thing is, I feel like the happiest man alive.
Good to keep our eyes open.
August 13th, 2024 02:17
Dawn Comes
Dan Williams said:
I count on folks being as perceptive as you when I am writing these things, often that is not the case. I wonder do you, as I do, throw away more than you keep? Thanks anyway.
August 12th, 2024 22:06
Dan Williams said:
I count on folks being as perceptive as you when I am writing these things, often that is not the case. I wonder do you, as I do, throw away more than you keep? Thanks anyway.
August 12th, 2024 22:06
Dawn Comes
sorenbarrett said:
I was intrigued by the rhyme scheme that allows you to draw out the thought. Some wonderful lines here \"thin overcoats against hurricanes\" \"What\'s not been lost can not be found\" Very nice
August 12th, 2024 04:30
sorenbarrett said:
I was intrigued by the rhyme scheme that allows you to draw out the thought. Some wonderful lines here \"thin overcoats against hurricanes\" \"What\'s not been lost can not be found\" Very nice
August 12th, 2024 04:30
After the Ending
Dan Williams said:
Not sure what is dark about your mind. Thank you anyway.
August 11th, 2024 22:29
Dan Williams said:
Not sure what is dark about your mind. Thank you anyway.
August 11th, 2024 22:29
After the Ending
aDarkerMind said:
a very impressive write Dam.
your opening line took me in,
and what followed was even better.
one to favour...
August 11th, 2024 09:39
aDarkerMind said:
a very impressive write Dam.
your opening line took me in,
and what followed was even better.
one to favour...
August 11th, 2024 09:39
After the Ending
sorenbarrett said:
Life and poems full of paradoxes and this poem has a few. Very nice to engage the mind and reader. The opening started this way. The ending I loved. It implies that life would be boring if one were not able to be awed. Lovely
August 11th, 2024 04:55
sorenbarrett said:
Life and poems full of paradoxes and this poem has a few. Very nice to engage the mind and reader. The opening started this way. The ending I loved. It implies that life would be boring if one were not able to be awed. Lovely
August 11th, 2024 04:55
Unrealistic Inclusion
Doggerel Dave said:
The sad mess that is human existence today, both social and political..
Complain away, Dan.
August 11th, 2024 01:44
Doggerel Dave said:
The sad mess that is human existence today, both social and political..
Complain away, Dan.
August 11th, 2024 01:44
Cry of The Hermit
Bella Shepard said:
You \"have been here before\", but you\'re still writing, good write, good for you!
August 10th, 2024 10:46
Bella Shepard said:
You \"have been here before\", but you\'re still writing, good write, good for you!
August 10th, 2024 10:46
The Violin Man
sorenbarrett said:
This is a wonderful poem and I can see how it is a song as well. The refrain is great and brings a sense of emotion to this piece. The last two lines are a prefect finish to this piece.
August 10th, 2024 05:26
sorenbarrett said:
This is a wonderful poem and I can see how it is a song as well. The refrain is great and brings a sense of emotion to this piece. The last two lines are a prefect finish to this piece.
August 10th, 2024 05:26
Cry of The Hermit
sorenbarrett said:
Loved the first two lines and the last the most. They convey a distant and mystical feeling to this poem. Very nice.
August 10th, 2024 05:15
sorenbarrett said:
Loved the first two lines and the last the most. They convey a distant and mystical feeling to this poem. Very nice.
August 10th, 2024 05:15
Amelia
Neville said:
I could not pass by without leaving my mark here sir ..
what amazing recollections you have poemed .. indeed, this is excellent ..
August 10th, 2024 01:28
Neville said:
I could not pass by without leaving my mark here sir ..
what amazing recollections you have poemed .. indeed, this is excellent ..
August 10th, 2024 01:28
Cry of The Hermit
Neville said:
This certainly has more than its fair share of ouch factor sir ..
August 10th, 2024 01:25
Neville said:
This certainly has more than its fair share of ouch factor sir ..
August 10th, 2024 01:25
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