Comments received on poems by Dan Williams
Dawn Comes
sorenbarrett said:
I was intrigued by the rhyme scheme that allows you to draw out the thought. Some wonderful lines here \"thin overcoats against hurricanes\" \"What\'s not been lost can not be found\" Very nice
August 12th, 2024 04:30
sorenbarrett said:
I was intrigued by the rhyme scheme that allows you to draw out the thought. Some wonderful lines here \"thin overcoats against hurricanes\" \"What\'s not been lost can not be found\" Very nice
August 12th, 2024 04:30
After the Ending
Dan Williams said:
Not sure what is dark about your mind. Thank you anyway.
August 11th, 2024 22:29
Dan Williams said:
Not sure what is dark about your mind. Thank you anyway.
August 11th, 2024 22:29
After the Ending
aDarkerMind said:
a very impressive write Dam.
your opening line took me in,
and what followed was even better.
one to favour...
August 11th, 2024 09:39
aDarkerMind said:
a very impressive write Dam.
your opening line took me in,
and what followed was even better.
one to favour...
August 11th, 2024 09:39
After the Ending
sorenbarrett said:
Life and poems full of paradoxes and this poem has a few. Very nice to engage the mind and reader. The opening started this way. The ending I loved. It implies that life would be boring if one were not able to be awed. Lovely
August 11th, 2024 04:55
sorenbarrett said:
Life and poems full of paradoxes and this poem has a few. Very nice to engage the mind and reader. The opening started this way. The ending I loved. It implies that life would be boring if one were not able to be awed. Lovely
August 11th, 2024 04:55
Unrealistic Inclusion
Doggerel Dave said:
The sad mess that is human existence today, both social and political..
Complain away, Dan.
August 11th, 2024 01:44
Doggerel Dave said:
The sad mess that is human existence today, both social and political..
Complain away, Dan.
August 11th, 2024 01:44
Cry of The Hermit
Bella Shepard said:
You \"have been here before\", but you\'re still writing, good write, good for you!
August 10th, 2024 10:46
Bella Shepard said:
You \"have been here before\", but you\'re still writing, good write, good for you!
August 10th, 2024 10:46
The Violin Man
sorenbarrett said:
This is a wonderful poem and I can see how it is a song as well. The refrain is great and brings a sense of emotion to this piece. The last two lines are a prefect finish to this piece.
August 10th, 2024 05:26
sorenbarrett said:
This is a wonderful poem and I can see how it is a song as well. The refrain is great and brings a sense of emotion to this piece. The last two lines are a prefect finish to this piece.
August 10th, 2024 05:26
Cry of The Hermit
sorenbarrett said:
Loved the first two lines and the last the most. They convey a distant and mystical feeling to this poem. Very nice.
August 10th, 2024 05:15
sorenbarrett said:
Loved the first two lines and the last the most. They convey a distant and mystical feeling to this poem. Very nice.
August 10th, 2024 05:15
Amelia
Neville said:
I could not pass by without leaving my mark here sir ..
what amazing recollections you have poemed .. indeed, this is excellent ..
August 10th, 2024 01:28
Neville said:
I could not pass by without leaving my mark here sir ..
what amazing recollections you have poemed .. indeed, this is excellent ..
August 10th, 2024 01:28
Cry of The Hermit
Neville said:
This certainly has more than its fair share of ouch factor sir ..
August 10th, 2024 01:25
Neville said:
This certainly has more than its fair share of ouch factor sir ..
August 10th, 2024 01:25
Amelia
sorenbarrett said:
Masterfully worded this write in verse conveys love and care and the advance of age or infirmity that tears from us those we love. You have conveyed so well the dance of life and love. Another piece of art that I could feel. Brilliant!
August 9th, 2024 05:31
sorenbarrett said:
Masterfully worded this write in verse conveys love and care and the advance of age or infirmity that tears from us those we love. You have conveyed so well the dance of life and love. Another piece of art that I could feel. Brilliant!
August 9th, 2024 05:31
Amelia
Cassie58 said:
How lovely a read is this. Reminds me of my first love. He died at 26. Your Amelia touched your heart too. First love, never forgotten. Have a great Friday.
August 9th, 2024 01:41
Cassie58 said:
How lovely a read is this. Reminds me of my first love. He died at 26. Your Amelia touched your heart too. First love, never forgotten. Have a great Friday.
August 9th, 2024 01:41
Squeaks
Thad Wilk said:
Terrific poem!! 👍
Captivating and
thought provoking indeed! 🤔
Awesomazing rhyme,
Rhythm, and flow AND
a real pleasure to read!!
Best regards ✌️ Thad
August 8th, 2024 09:15
Thad Wilk said:
Terrific poem!! 👍
Captivating and
thought provoking indeed! 🤔
Awesomazing rhyme,
Rhythm, and flow AND
a real pleasure to read!!
Best regards ✌️ Thad
August 8th, 2024 09:15
Squeaks
Doggerel Dave said:
Where else do these sheep get their information from these days?
I’ve lived between the UK and Australia over the years. (see personal profile)
UK ‘60’s and ‘70’s – I obtained a three year social science degree when not only were my fees paid, but I had a living allowance paid also. Further, Adult education classes were free. Policy objective to build an informed public.
In Australia at the same time, university education was free. A large proportion of our current politicians benefited. Now fees which may burden for the rest of an ex student’s life. Adult education classes not subsidised either. Only attendees are old fogies like me who can afford.
My middle name , BTW is Squeakywheel…
August 8th, 2024 06:59
Doggerel Dave said:
Where else do these sheep get their information from these days?
I’ve lived between the UK and Australia over the years. (see personal profile)
UK ‘60’s and ‘70’s – I obtained a three year social science degree when not only were my fees paid, but I had a living allowance paid also. Further, Adult education classes were free. Policy objective to build an informed public.
In Australia at the same time, university education was free. A large proportion of our current politicians benefited. Now fees which may burden for the rest of an ex student’s life. Adult education classes not subsidised either. Only attendees are old fogies like me who can afford.
My middle name , BTW is Squeakywheel…
August 8th, 2024 06:59
Squeaks
sorenbarrett said:
Maybe it is only recently that we have seen ourselves as sheep. Awakening from the matrix this awareness leaves us paranoid and jaded believing in nothing and even more susceptible to manipulation by the wolves. Great write with very nice flow and rhyme loved it.
August 8th, 2024 05:22
sorenbarrett said:
Maybe it is only recently that we have seen ourselves as sheep. Awakening from the matrix this awareness leaves us paranoid and jaded believing in nothing and even more susceptible to manipulation by the wolves. Great write with very nice flow and rhyme loved it.
August 8th, 2024 05:22
Squeaks
Teddy.15 said:
lol actually I too live in a town much like this, I\'m the black sheep of course. We say keeping up with the Jones\'s too, they go one direction I go the other, I love your interpretation it\'s quite a social wake up call. 🌹
August 8th, 2024 00:59
Teddy.15 said:
lol actually I too live in a town much like this, I\'m the black sheep of course. We say keeping up with the Jones\'s too, they go one direction I go the other, I love your interpretation it\'s quite a social wake up call. 🌹
August 8th, 2024 00:59
Always Never
Dan Williams said:
Stop. Such heartfelt praise can make me cry. Thank you so much, again.
August 8th, 2024 00:26
Dan Williams said:
Stop. Such heartfelt praise can make me cry. Thank you so much, again.
August 8th, 2024 00:26
Always Never
sorenbarrett said:
This is a very powerful write that slowly takes hold of the reader, then with many great lines drags him along down dark streets and ally\'s, through seldom tread walkways in the mind of a tortured soul. The questions are human, ones we all ask but haven\'t the courage to utter. Here great lines
\" from praying to gods he does not believe in
for an insanity that will not be granted;\" echo these thoughts. For anyone that has passed this way a hidden masterpiece.
August 7th, 2024 03:33
sorenbarrett said:
This is a very powerful write that slowly takes hold of the reader, then with many great lines drags him along down dark streets and ally\'s, through seldom tread walkways in the mind of a tortured soul. The questions are human, ones we all ask but haven\'t the courage to utter. Here great lines
\" from praying to gods he does not believe in
for an insanity that will not be granted;\" echo these thoughts. For anyone that has passed this way a hidden masterpiece.
August 7th, 2024 03:33
The Student?
Bobby O said:
You’re tricky. I mean you are a self admitted man forever blind to metaphor that is unsure about the deal of Cope causing one to wonders how happenstance and finely fitted focused plans dance and Samba
August 7th, 2024 01:20
Bobby O said:
You’re tricky. I mean you are a self admitted man forever blind to metaphor that is unsure about the deal of Cope causing one to wonders how happenstance and finely fitted focused plans dance and Samba
August 7th, 2024 01:20
Can You Wash Me?
Dan Williams said:
You people are embarrassing me. I guess after fifty some years of trying I should produce a winner or two. Like the monkey at the typewriter who eventually types his name. Thank you.
August 6th, 2024 21:57
Dan Williams said:
You people are embarrassing me. I guess after fifty some years of trying I should produce a winner or two. Like the monkey at the typewriter who eventually types his name. Thank you.
August 6th, 2024 21:57
Can You Wash Me?
Bella Shepard said:
The pain seems overwhelming, but you write it out of you, instead of letting it lie in wait, and I think that\'s a positive thing. Your fingers on the keys perhaps begin to let go of what is pent up inside. A very powerful and truthful write my friend.
August 6th, 2024 14:00
Bella Shepard said:
The pain seems overwhelming, but you write it out of you, instead of letting it lie in wait, and I think that\'s a positive thing. Your fingers on the keys perhaps begin to let go of what is pent up inside. A very powerful and truthful write my friend.
August 6th, 2024 14:00
Can You Wash Me?
sorenbarrett said:
This poem reeks with pain. This I believe is one of my favorite of yours. It begins so powerfully and the rhyme and rhythm aid in the building emotion. Word choice is superb. If I may be so bold, watch the repetition of words and phrases. By my definition this is definitely a piece of art. Brilliant!
August 6th, 2024 04:44
sorenbarrett said:
This poem reeks with pain. This I believe is one of my favorite of yours. It begins so powerfully and the rhyme and rhythm aid in the building emotion. Word choice is superb. If I may be so bold, watch the repetition of words and phrases. By my definition this is definitely a piece of art. Brilliant!
August 6th, 2024 04:44
Can You Wash Me?
Neville said:
if this disclosure all wrapped in a poem is autobiographical then it must have been close to devastating ..
I trust you have now moved on .. Now wishing you All Good Things, Neville
August 6th, 2024 01:01
Neville said:
if this disclosure all wrapped in a poem is autobiographical then it must have been close to devastating ..
I trust you have now moved on .. Now wishing you All Good Things, Neville
August 6th, 2024 01:01
Can You Wash Me?
Bobby O said:
I like the way you create a commanding mood and shift into asking question. As if you know the metaphorical stain is yours until you cope or deal and those questions might have been just to announce and to gather
August 6th, 2024 00:36
Bobby O said:
I like the way you create a commanding mood and shift into asking question. As if you know the metaphorical stain is yours until you cope or deal and those questions might have been just to announce and to gather
August 6th, 2024 00:36
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