Comments received on poems by Nemo
Alone
Goldfinch60 said:
We will hear her cries and will lead her into the Light of life.
January 5th, 2020 02:32
Goldfinch60 said:
We will hear her cries and will lead her into the Light of life.
January 5th, 2020 02:32
Alone
dusk arising said:
Thank goodness for the positive human spirit within us all which enables us to lift ourselves from the despair you describe so well here.
January 4th, 2020 10:29
dusk arising said:
Thank goodness for the positive human spirit within us all which enables us to lift ourselves from the despair you describe so well here.
January 4th, 2020 10:29
Cruel world
Goldfinch60 said:
May her life come into the light soon, with your words helping her it will happen.
January 4th, 2020 01:11
Goldfinch60 said:
May her life come into the light soon, with your words helping her it will happen.
January 4th, 2020 01:11
Cruel world
myself and me said:
Hope she is strong enough to overcome the nightmare. Well done.
January 3rd, 2020 17:49
myself and me said:
Hope she is strong enough to overcome the nightmare. Well done.
January 3rd, 2020 17:49
Time
Fay Slimm. said:
A look at what love does to time - very well styled and full of romantic allure- loved the flow too - thank for sharing it Nemo.
January 2nd, 2020 14:22
Fay Slimm. said:
A look at what love does to time - very well styled and full of romantic allure- loved the flow too - thank for sharing it Nemo.
January 2nd, 2020 14:22
Time
FineB said:
Hi Nemo!
A timeless, beautiful write!
Wonderful!
Keep on writing in 2020.
FineB
January 2nd, 2020 11:29
FineB said:
Hi Nemo!
A timeless, beautiful write!
Wonderful!
Keep on writing in 2020.
FineB
January 2nd, 2020 11:29
Yet an other fling
dusk arising said:
Yes, you express this well. For me the period was a prequel to abstinence.
January 1st, 2020 14:14
dusk arising said:
Yes, you express this well. For me the period was a prequel to abstinence.
January 1st, 2020 14:14
Known stranger
Goldfinch60 said:
\'Fate\' has this ability to bring back painful memories, may you move on once more into a pain free life.
January 1st, 2020 02:18
Goldfinch60 said:
\'Fate\' has this ability to bring back painful memories, may you move on once more into a pain free life.
January 1st, 2020 02:18
Known stranger
Fay Slimm. said:
The awful heart-tugging moment can happen to either gender and wrench out tears as your apt words here show - - have been there myself so I know the feeling. A touching read Nemo.
December 31st, 2019 08:57
Fay Slimm. said:
The awful heart-tugging moment can happen to either gender and wrench out tears as your apt words here show - - have been there myself so I know the feeling. A touching read Nemo.
December 31st, 2019 08:57
Known stranger
dusk arising said:
I had a similar experience divided by thirty years.
Yes you capture the gut wrenching, heart racing moment with your well written piece today.
December 31st, 2019 04:11
dusk arising said:
I had a similar experience divided by thirty years.
Yes you capture the gut wrenching, heart racing moment with your well written piece today.
December 31st, 2019 04:11
Love at first sight
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful write Nemo, those fleeting occasions can be so meaningful.
December 31st, 2019 01:10
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderful write Nemo, those fleeting occasions can be so meaningful.
December 31st, 2019 01:10
Love at first sight
Gregstarandgoff said:
Very nice!
Really like some of the lines and I think will be something that all of us will connect with.
December 30th, 2019 07:02
Gregstarandgoff said:
Very nice!
Really like some of the lines and I think will be something that all of us will connect with.
December 30th, 2019 07:02
Missed chances
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
HI NEMO ~ Welcome to MPS ! It is a FRIENDLY sute ad operates by READING & COMMENTING on each other POEMS ! Thnaks for sharing your first Poem ! A powerful but sad Subject ~ well expressed full of Rhymr & Rhythm. Im 36 and had many missed chances ~ BUT ~ Angela (31) is my Fiancee and we are getting married in April 2020 ~ SO She is one wonderful CHANCE I havent missed ~ AMEN This is a GOOD Poem but to read & recite better I would suggest a better poetic spacing ~ OK ! This is not a criticism ~ just a suggestion !
MISED CHANCES
Alone waiting ~ by the phone !
Holding on to this frame ~ the pictures dont feel the same
Mistakes were made ~ we turned our separate ways
Regret is the only thing that stayed
Maybe a few words ~ could have made you stay
But I guess its too late !
Wish I would have rushed ~ through that hall
Right before you closed the door
Hold you by the hand ~ show you that I cant stand
The thought alone makes me drop to my knees
But I could not get myself to beg and plead
This room is dark ~ I am left with your thoughts !
I am losing my way ~ Its not what I thought
Its not what I wanted to see !
Spring has passed ~ cold Winter nights
Love in disguise ~ some tears in the rain
Im hiding my pain ~ our paths wont meet
Will never see you again............................
Just some picture ~ stuck in my brain !
What good does this all do ? WITHOUT YOU !
Hope that helps ~ I have divided it into three separate verses (without altering any of the words) to make it more readable (I am a performance Poet !) and emphasise the internal & external rhyming.
Best wishes ~ Yours BRIAN
Please check our SITE ~ Thanks !
December 29th, 2019 19:11
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
HI NEMO ~ Welcome to MPS ! It is a FRIENDLY sute ad operates by READING & COMMENTING on each other POEMS ! Thnaks for sharing your first Poem ! A powerful but sad Subject ~ well expressed full of Rhymr & Rhythm. Im 36 and had many missed chances ~ BUT ~ Angela (31) is my Fiancee and we are getting married in April 2020 ~ SO She is one wonderful CHANCE I havent missed ~ AMEN This is a GOOD Poem but to read & recite better I would suggest a better poetic spacing ~ OK ! This is not a criticism ~ just a suggestion !
MISED CHANCES
Alone waiting ~ by the phone !
Holding on to this frame ~ the pictures dont feel the same
Mistakes were made ~ we turned our separate ways
Regret is the only thing that stayed
Maybe a few words ~ could have made you stay
But I guess its too late !
Wish I would have rushed ~ through that hall
Right before you closed the door
Hold you by the hand ~ show you that I cant stand
The thought alone makes me drop to my knees
But I could not get myself to beg and plead
This room is dark ~ I am left with your thoughts !
I am losing my way ~ Its not what I thought
Its not what I wanted to see !
Spring has passed ~ cold Winter nights
Love in disguise ~ some tears in the rain
Im hiding my pain ~ our paths wont meet
Will never see you again............................
Just some picture ~ stuck in my brain !
What good does this all do ? WITHOUT YOU !
Hope that helps ~ I have divided it into three separate verses (without altering any of the words) to make it more readable (I am a performance Poet !) and emphasise the internal & external rhyming.
Best wishes ~ Yours BRIAN
Please check our SITE ~ Thanks !
December 29th, 2019 19:11
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