Peanut Butter
sorenbarrett said:

\"and the old ghosts of the souls
that i used to know still haunt me
it was sunshine coming through
glass window panes, bright but distorted\" a great line that seems the principle point of this poem to me. Memories are selective and either more harsh or softer that the reality. This write was full of good metaphors and very relatable

April 13th, 2023 12:49

Juliet
Sakwa Franc said:

Good work poet

January 10th, 2023 11:36

Jade Dust
L. B. Mek said:

\'these nights it feels heavy
black carbon: the stern bow
remnants of decayed wood
stretch the yellowing hair
tighter, tighter
scrub at it with frozen amber
until it glows white
as the frost, until it shines
pretend it is not aging
pretend it is still new\'
so relatable, thanks for sharing

October 28th, 2022 05:50

Rebirth of a Season
KeneBujold said:

well done Sophin. I especially like the driving rhythm you build through the lines...and my heart is heavy 2 the swaths of faded red. not sure how to offer criticism here, since I\'m new, but you might want to consider cutting the \"and\" that starts the next line. With some punctuation after red, beginning next line with I would continue to drive the pulse of the poem. Please take my view for what it is, just a thought on maintaining that nice rhythm you have

August 22nd, 2022 17:36

scatter
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:

Such a lovely writing !🙂

March 23rd, 2022 00:45

that distant shard
Garth Rakumakoe said:

I find this inspirational on so many levels, for it is as graphic and honest as it is poetic, in describing the apathy in the empathy, wretched souls bring out of us. Thank you for sharing this. I absolutely love it!

March 19th, 2022 23:49

Journey
L. B. Mek said:

Brilliant!
(please, forgive
my inexcusable rudeness, dear poet
my foolish overeager, nature
couldn\'t resist
sharing with you, how
your wondrous poetry
presented itself to me
I\'m so sorry, I truly mean no disrespect..
thank you! for choosing to share your poetic genius)
\'and we exist for a moment infinitely
in the only way we know, in the only way we will\'

\'those glittering grains of sand, coarse
against my aged hands, but no bother
follow me close, don’t miss that next turn
the turn is important, this is a one-way street\'

\'watch your step- don’t you know that
if you’re not careful, you could
step on a land mine and unearth
a memory your mind has been merciful enough
to let you forget\'

\'if you cannot feel my presence or see my faded form
you must pretend i am still there, eyes forward
you cannot afford to look for me, i do not matter
in the grand scheme of things, isn’t it beautiful
how as the waters ebb light spills in
as the different colors float across this flooded dreamland\'

\'with the vision of a paradise now extinct
captured like a bird in the cage of your thoughts
don’t forget to make the turn
on the way back to the train station
and if you let your eyes linger
on the fuzzy lines try not to wonder
what the lines are made of
if you do, you might forget
what it is like to love.\'

March 18th, 2022 05:16

that distant shard
L. B. Mek said:

simply exquisite! Brilliant poetry!
love your depth
showcasing characteristics, of two characters
in each poetic line of empathetic insight..
(indeed, I too
look in awe, at all those
that live, life
with their splintered heart\'s
adorning their sleeves, bravely
for all to see..)
thank you! for choosing to share!

February 11th, 2022 06:14

Elegy to My Autumn
L. B. Mek said:

\'and i
click seven out of the nine
locks shut, and push her coffin
into the dusty closet, where
no light shines, and i
apologize, but it is only this way
that you can remain unchanged,
frozen in time,\'
(there\'s more poignant imagery
in this single poem
than any ten I can pen)
so well written
what a multi talented, Artist
you must be
I hope you find the recognition
you desire
and the rewards your hard work, deserves
dear Poet..
thank you, for choosing to share
like \'fallenangel\' said best
aim high and \'Shine Bright\'

January 24th, 2022 06:55

White Roses
AuburnScribbler said:

An excellently written, and fantastical like scene you\'ve unfolded here sophin.

I\'m sure those white roses, will make their defiant return, in the spring.

Bravo, and I hope that all is well!

January 23rd, 2022 13:39

Orion
rockpile said:

Read your poems. Very moving. More, please.

January 17th, 2022 00:09

Amputee
Buzz Bray said:

Powerful words. Relationships are the limbs of our souls. Nicely done!

January 11th, 2022 22:29