Comments received on poems by sophin
Moses
sorenbarrett said:
I feel that I have been there, the images evoked memories of tornadoes when I lived in Oklahoma and the many hurricanes I have been through in Florida. The poem was vivid and tense. I hope everything is ok.
May 8th, 2023 12:01
sorenbarrett said:
I feel that I have been there, the images evoked memories of tornadoes when I lived in Oklahoma and the many hurricanes I have been through in Florida. The poem was vivid and tense. I hope everything is ok.
May 8th, 2023 12:01
Peanut Butter
sorenbarrett said:
\"and the old ghosts of the souls
that i used to know still haunt me
it was sunshine coming through
glass window panes, bright but distorted\" a great line that seems the principle point of this poem to me. Memories are selective and either more harsh or softer that the reality. This write was full of good metaphors and very relatable
April 13th, 2023 12:49
sorenbarrett said:
\"and the old ghosts of the souls
that i used to know still haunt me
it was sunshine coming through
glass window panes, bright but distorted\" a great line that seems the principle point of this poem to me. Memories are selective and either more harsh or softer that the reality. This write was full of good metaphors and very relatable
April 13th, 2023 12:49
Moses
L. B. Mek said:
hope you\'re ok
I like the sense of magnitude
imbued in your vivid imagery
thanks for sharing
February 27th, 2023 04:16
L. B. Mek said:
hope you\'re ok
I like the sense of magnitude
imbued in your vivid imagery
thanks for sharing
February 27th, 2023 04:16
Jade Dust
L. B. Mek said:
\'these nights it feels heavy
black carbon: the stern bow
remnants of decayed wood
stretch the yellowing hair
tighter, tighter
scrub at it with frozen amber
until it glows white
as the frost, until it shines
pretend it is not aging
pretend it is still new\'
so relatable, thanks for sharing
October 28th, 2022 05:50
L. B. Mek said:
\'these nights it feels heavy
black carbon: the stern bow
remnants of decayed wood
stretch the yellowing hair
tighter, tighter
scrub at it with frozen amber
until it glows white
as the frost, until it shines
pretend it is not aging
pretend it is still new\'
so relatable, thanks for sharing
October 28th, 2022 05:50
Elegy to My Autumn
KeneBujold said:
Hi again Sophin. After reading your Rebirth of a Season I took a bit of time to scroll through your other poems. I love this poem, its imagery, the cadence pulled me in from the 1st line. Then when I reached you comment I went back and read it again. If you played that cello half as well as you write its a shame you\'ve locked it away in the closet
August 22nd, 2022 17:45
KeneBujold said:
Hi again Sophin. After reading your Rebirth of a Season I took a bit of time to scroll through your other poems. I love this poem, its imagery, the cadence pulled me in from the 1st line. Then when I reached you comment I went back and read it again. If you played that cello half as well as you write its a shame you\'ve locked it away in the closet
August 22nd, 2022 17:45
Rebirth of a Season
KeneBujold said:
well done Sophin. I especially like the driving rhythm you build through the lines...and my heart is heavy 2 the swaths of faded red. not sure how to offer criticism here, since I\'m new, but you might want to consider cutting the \"and\" that starts the next line. With some punctuation after red, beginning next line with I would continue to drive the pulse of the poem. Please take my view for what it is, just a thought on maintaining that nice rhythm you have
August 22nd, 2022 17:36
KeneBujold said:
well done Sophin. I especially like the driving rhythm you build through the lines...and my heart is heavy 2 the swaths of faded red. not sure how to offer criticism here, since I\'m new, but you might want to consider cutting the \"and\" that starts the next line. With some punctuation after red, beginning next line with I would continue to drive the pulse of the poem. Please take my view for what it is, just a thought on maintaining that nice rhythm you have
August 22nd, 2022 17:36
Lunar
L. B. Mek said:
wonderful imagery, nature
articulating our suffering\'s, voice..
thanks for sharing
August 15th, 2022 03:53
L. B. Mek said:
wonderful imagery, nature
articulating our suffering\'s, voice..
thanks for sharing
August 15th, 2022 03:53
Amputee
Paul Bell said:
Love sure is a broken heart in the making, then we go and do it again.
March 20th, 2022 10:26
Paul Bell said:
Love sure is a broken heart in the making, then we go and do it again.
March 20th, 2022 10:26
that distant shard
Garth Rakumakoe said:
I find this inspirational on so many levels, for it is as graphic and honest as it is poetic, in describing the apathy in the empathy, wretched souls bring out of us. Thank you for sharing this. I absolutely love it!
March 19th, 2022 23:49
Garth Rakumakoe said:
I find this inspirational on so many levels, for it is as graphic and honest as it is poetic, in describing the apathy in the empathy, wretched souls bring out of us. Thank you for sharing this. I absolutely love it!
March 19th, 2022 23:49
Journey
Garth Rakumakoe said:
One very seldom comes accross such a versatile use of language these days. Your poetic licence depth is quite seminal, dear writer. Very well done. So vivid one could touch the picture.
March 19th, 2022 23:41
Garth Rakumakoe said:
One very seldom comes accross such a versatile use of language these days. Your poetic licence depth is quite seminal, dear writer. Very well done. So vivid one could touch the picture.
March 19th, 2022 23:41
Journey
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(please, forgive
my inexcusable rudeness, dear poet
my foolish overeager, nature
couldn\'t resist
sharing with you, how
your wondrous poetry
presented itself to me
I\'m so sorry, I truly mean no disrespect..
thank you! for choosing to share your poetic genius)
\'and we exist for a moment infinitely
in the only way we know, in the only way we will\'
\'those glittering grains of sand, coarse
against my aged hands, but no bother
follow me close, don’t miss that next turn
the turn is important, this is a one-way street\'
\'watch your step- don’t you know that
if you’re not careful, you could
step on a land mine and unearth
a memory your mind has been merciful enough
to let you forget\'
\'if you cannot feel my presence or see my faded form
you must pretend i am still there, eyes forward
you cannot afford to look for me, i do not matter
in the grand scheme of things, isn’t it beautiful
how as the waters ebb light spills in
as the different colors float across this flooded dreamland\'
\'with the vision of a paradise now extinct
captured like a bird in the cage of your thoughts
don’t forget to make the turn
on the way back to the train station
and if you let your eyes linger
on the fuzzy lines try not to wonder
what the lines are made of
if you do, you might forget
what it is like to love.\'
March 18th, 2022 05:16
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(please, forgive
my inexcusable rudeness, dear poet
my foolish overeager, nature
couldn\'t resist
sharing with you, how
your wondrous poetry
presented itself to me
I\'m so sorry, I truly mean no disrespect..
thank you! for choosing to share your poetic genius)
\'and we exist for a moment infinitely
in the only way we know, in the only way we will\'
\'those glittering grains of sand, coarse
against my aged hands, but no bother
follow me close, don’t miss that next turn
the turn is important, this is a one-way street\'
\'watch your step- don’t you know that
if you’re not careful, you could
step on a land mine and unearth
a memory your mind has been merciful enough
to let you forget\'
\'if you cannot feel my presence or see my faded form
you must pretend i am still there, eyes forward
you cannot afford to look for me, i do not matter
in the grand scheme of things, isn’t it beautiful
how as the waters ebb light spills in
as the different colors float across this flooded dreamland\'
\'with the vision of a paradise now extinct
captured like a bird in the cage of your thoughts
don’t forget to make the turn
on the way back to the train station
and if you let your eyes linger
on the fuzzy lines try not to wonder
what the lines are made of
if you do, you might forget
what it is like to love.\'
March 18th, 2022 05:16
that distant shard
Rocky Lagou said:
The way I\'m just finding out about this poem. I love your style of poetry; your formatting and syntax is so unique. I also strive to \"break the norms\" with free verse poetry to create something not only meaningful, but visually striking. This was so freaking good! Bravo! 💖✨💖
February 22nd, 2022 11:16
Rocky Lagou said:
The way I\'m just finding out about this poem. I love your style of poetry; your formatting and syntax is so unique. I also strive to \"break the norms\" with free verse poetry to create something not only meaningful, but visually striking. This was so freaking good! Bravo! 💖✨💖
February 22nd, 2022 11:16
that distant shard
L. B. Mek said:
simply exquisite! Brilliant poetry!
love your depth
showcasing characteristics, of two characters
in each poetic line of empathetic insight..
(indeed, I too
look in awe, at all those
that live, life
with their splintered heart\'s
adorning their sleeves, bravely
for all to see..)
thank you! for choosing to share!
February 11th, 2022 06:14
L. B. Mek said:
simply exquisite! Brilliant poetry!
love your depth
showcasing characteristics, of two characters
in each poetic line of empathetic insight..
(indeed, I too
look in awe, at all those
that live, life
with their splintered heart\'s
adorning their sleeves, bravely
for all to see..)
thank you! for choosing to share!
February 11th, 2022 06:14
Elegy to My Autumn
Rocky Lagou said:
Well written. Love all the different colors displayed in this work.
February 4th, 2022 11:09
Rocky Lagou said:
Well written. Love all the different colors displayed in this work.
February 4th, 2022 11:09
Elegy to My Autumn
L. B. Mek said:
\'and i
click seven out of the nine
locks shut, and push her coffin
into the dusty closet, where
no light shines, and i
apologize, but it is only this way
that you can remain unchanged,
frozen in time,\'
(there\'s more poignant imagery
in this single poem
than any ten I can pen)
so well written
what a multi talented, Artist
you must be
I hope you find the recognition
you desire
and the rewards your hard work, deserves
dear Poet..
thank you, for choosing to share
like \'fallenangel\' said best
aim high and \'Shine Bright\'
January 24th, 2022 06:55
L. B. Mek said:
\'and i
click seven out of the nine
locks shut, and push her coffin
into the dusty closet, where
no light shines, and i
apologize, but it is only this way
that you can remain unchanged,
frozen in time,\'
(there\'s more poignant imagery
in this single poem
than any ten I can pen)
so well written
what a multi talented, Artist
you must be
I hope you find the recognition
you desire
and the rewards your hard work, deserves
dear Poet..
thank you, for choosing to share
like \'fallenangel\' said best
aim high and \'Shine Bright\'
January 24th, 2022 06:55
Elegy to My Autumn
FallenAngel1🕊 said:
Dazzling piece of work!🌟🌟🌟 Take a bow and shine bright 🌹🌞😎
January 23rd, 2022 21:42
FallenAngel1🕊 said:
Dazzling piece of work!🌟🌟🌟 Take a bow and shine bright 🌹🌞😎
January 23rd, 2022 21:42
White Roses
AuburnScribbler said:
An excellently written, and fantastical like scene you\'ve unfolded here sophin.
I\'m sure those white roses, will make their defiant return, in the spring.
Bravo, and I hope that all is well!
January 23rd, 2022 13:39
AuburnScribbler said:
An excellently written, and fantastical like scene you\'ve unfolded here sophin.
I\'m sure those white roses, will make their defiant return, in the spring.
Bravo, and I hope that all is well!
January 23rd, 2022 13:39
White Roses
spilleronsheet said:
Beautiful imagery
Took me from nature to seasons and then to retrospection inside
Well penned dear poet
January 19th, 2022 02:19
spilleronsheet said:
Beautiful imagery
Took me from nature to seasons and then to retrospection inside
Well penned dear poet
January 19th, 2022 02:19
Orion
AuburnScribbler said:
A masterful piece of poetry here sophin.
I very much like the way you\'ve intertwined the parallel hunts of both Orion and yourself, Orion for his food and his place amongst the stars, and yours for understanding, happiness and of course to retain a vivid memory.
Bravo, and I hope that all is well!
January 13th, 2022 04:29
AuburnScribbler said:
A masterful piece of poetry here sophin.
I very much like the way you\'ve intertwined the parallel hunts of both Orion and yourself, Orion for his food and his place amongst the stars, and yours for understanding, happiness and of course to retain a vivid memory.
Bravo, and I hope that all is well!
January 13th, 2022 04:29
Amputee
Buzz Bray said:
Powerful words. Relationships are the limbs of our souls. Nicely done!
January 11th, 2022 22:29
Buzz Bray said:
Powerful words. Relationships are the limbs of our souls. Nicely done!
January 11th, 2022 22:29
Orion
James Alexander said:
What delightful writing . Such openness as if speaking to a friend. Orion may be fading as our lives fade with age but like everlasting Orion your legacy will remain through your writing. Looking to hear more from you.
January 2nd, 2022 22:13
James Alexander said:
What delightful writing . Such openness as if speaking to a friend. Orion may be fading as our lives fade with age but like everlasting Orion your legacy will remain through your writing. Looking to hear more from you.
January 2nd, 2022 22:13
