Comments received on poems by Debake
Inside
L. B. Mek said:
\'Inception\'
of a poem, in a Poem, within a poem
that interactive first line works well
wonderful creativity, thanks for sharing
June 9th, 2023 03:55
L. B. Mek said:
\'Inception\'
of a poem, in a Poem, within a poem
that interactive first line works well
wonderful creativity, thanks for sharing
June 9th, 2023 03:55
Wrecked relationSHIPs
Mello said:
This portrays a strong sense of abandonment and loss, capturing the emotions of being left behind and forgotten. The use of vivid imagery and metaphors adds depth to the sentiment of the speaker. GW
March 18th, 2023 17:23
Mello said:
This portrays a strong sense of abandonment and loss, capturing the emotions of being left behind and forgotten. The use of vivid imagery and metaphors adds depth to the sentiment of the speaker. GW
March 18th, 2023 17:23
Long Distance
David Wakeling said:
The characters are not named so the reader is not engaged.Nothing is explained and so nothing is communicated.
February 21st, 2023 22:59
David Wakeling said:
The characters are not named so the reader is not engaged.Nothing is explained and so nothing is communicated.
February 21st, 2023 22:59
What is Love
Ok Waleed said:
Do you think God loves us although we have never heard it directly ?
February 7th, 2023 11:43
Ok Waleed said:
Do you think God loves us although we have never heard it directly ?
February 7th, 2023 11:43
Betrayal
L. B. Mek said:
(sadly, we don\'t get to choose our family
initially
yet, once we\'ve developed our own sense of self
it\'s important we realise
family may be blood, and blood
may be thicker
may deserve our loyalty and patience
BUT!
we must include family members
as part of our subjective
grouping of the people
WE WANT
in our lives..
we need not walk with them day in
day out
we can extend an elongated line
between us
be there for them , in their time of need
should we wish, to
but live our life\'s, firmly
distanced
from their toxic influence
on our lives..
We , Curate
who gets to be graced
by our Presence
in life...
choose family, as you would your friends
but
just to be on the safe side
keep a link open, a door
half ajar
in the hope, they may someday
surprise you...)
stay strong!
thanks for sharing, dear poet
February 6th, 2023 04:50
L. B. Mek said:
(sadly, we don\'t get to choose our family
initially
yet, once we\'ve developed our own sense of self
it\'s important we realise
family may be blood, and blood
may be thicker
may deserve our loyalty and patience
BUT!
we must include family members
as part of our subjective
grouping of the people
WE WANT
in our lives..
we need not walk with them day in
day out
we can extend an elongated line
between us
be there for them , in their time of need
should we wish, to
but live our life\'s, firmly
distanced
from their toxic influence
on our lives..
We , Curate
who gets to be graced
by our Presence
in life...
choose family, as you would your friends
but
just to be on the safe side
keep a link open, a door
half ajar
in the hope, they may someday
surprise you...)
stay strong!
thanks for sharing, dear poet
February 6th, 2023 04:50
A Sinner\'s Plea
Ok Waleed said:
This gave me goosebumps! Shudders! Amazing poem
January 31st, 2023 17:05
Ok Waleed said:
This gave me goosebumps! Shudders! Amazing poem
January 31st, 2023 17:05
Writer
L. B. Mek said:
I do, too dear poet
thank you for wording it so eloquently
love that last line!
January 30th, 2023 04:14
L. B. Mek said:
I do, too dear poet
thank you for wording it so eloquently
love that last line!
January 30th, 2023 04:14
Writer
thinkerbell said:
Loved this poem...beautifully captures the emotions of a writer struck by an idea to compose or write🥰❤️
January 30th, 2023 02:50
thinkerbell said:
Loved this poem...beautifully captures the emotions of a writer struck by an idea to compose or write🥰❤️
January 30th, 2023 02:50
True Friendship
orchidee said:
Good write A.
I was in some maths, calculating the size of a table rounded at both ends.
Chop the circular bits off the end of the table (not literally. lol). Put the two, now semi-circles, together, and it\'s a circle. Bit like friendship really.
Then one can calculate the circumference of the circle, and the perimeter of the rectangle - the other bit of the table that\'s left!
What am I wittering on about? lol.
\'Arggh - not Maths\' you say?!
January 28th, 2023 13:48
orchidee said:
Good write A.
I was in some maths, calculating the size of a table rounded at both ends.
Chop the circular bits off the end of the table (not literally. lol). Put the two, now semi-circles, together, and it\'s a circle. Bit like friendship really.
Then one can calculate the circumference of the circle, and the perimeter of the rectangle - the other bit of the table that\'s left!
What am I wittering on about? lol.
\'Arggh - not Maths\' you say?!
January 28th, 2023 13:48
Emotional Commotion
L. B. Mek said:
(inside, a mind n heart
in perpetual disruption
and eventually, yielding
a segregation of self
from that once
much sought after, ideal)
an important message
written with such brevity
thanks for sharing
January 27th, 2023 04:01
L. B. Mek said:
(inside, a mind n heart
in perpetual disruption
and eventually, yielding
a segregation of self
from that once
much sought after, ideal)
an important message
written with such brevity
thanks for sharing
January 27th, 2023 04:01
