Comments received on poems by seventeen
pure lust
Thomas W Case said:
Fantastic. Very erotic and sublime use of language.
October 23rd, 2023 00:44
Thomas W Case said:
Fantastic. Very erotic and sublime use of language.
October 23rd, 2023 00:44
canvas
Thomas W Case said:
Brilliant...nice use of space and time to move the piece.
October 23rd, 2023 00:43
Thomas W Case said:
Brilliant...nice use of space and time to move the piece.
October 23rd, 2023 00:43
canvas
Bobby O said:
A really interesting and introspective piece that held my interest and was compelled to immediately reread it.
“artist…to blame “ “ripped…what felt like soul “ and though that canvas is blank , I’m feeling that it represents an undaunted survival to cheer and to boldly say this sand on my tongue means in here and it’s a celebration and it might as well be honey. Freaking really really nice and I’m a big fan.
October 22nd, 2023 17:28
Bobby O said:
A really interesting and introspective piece that held my interest and was compelled to immediately reread it.
“artist…to blame “ “ripped…what felt like soul “ and though that canvas is blank , I’m feeling that it represents an undaunted survival to cheer and to boldly say this sand on my tongue means in here and it’s a celebration and it might as well be honey. Freaking really really nice and I’m a big fan.
October 22nd, 2023 17:28
green skies
MendedFences27 said:
I don\'t know what the basis for this poem is, but it sounds like you\'re dealing with many things in it; Shame, self-doubt, and abuse among them.
You have a gift for phrasing and a poetic skill. This subject is overwhelming to the point of obscuring the poem\'s poetic value. Your first stanza is where I found the poetic value, the next three were heavy with the weight of the subject matter. Those three were well written, but the subject< for me, buried them. I guess what I\'m trying to say is that you are a gifted writer and I hope that you are not suffering from what you expressed
in your three last stanzas. - Phil A
October 8th, 2023 16:00
MendedFences27 said:
I don\'t know what the basis for this poem is, but it sounds like you\'re dealing with many things in it; Shame, self-doubt, and abuse among them.
You have a gift for phrasing and a poetic skill. This subject is overwhelming to the point of obscuring the poem\'s poetic value. Your first stanza is where I found the poetic value, the next three were heavy with the weight of the subject matter. Those three were well written, but the subject< for me, buried them. I guess what I\'m trying to say is that you are a gifted writer and I hope that you are not suffering from what you expressed
in your three last stanzas. - Phil A
October 8th, 2023 16:00
human
A.D. Small said:
I love the fact that you ended with ripping your own skin off like you were shedding and coming out of the situation anew. Great peace I really loved it
September 30th, 2023 00:01
A.D. Small said:
I love the fact that you ended with ripping your own skin off like you were shedding and coming out of the situation anew. Great peace I really loved it
September 30th, 2023 00:01
dreamscape
A.D. Small said:
Really great poem good job I enjoyed it quite a lot!!!!
September 29th, 2023 23:58
A.D. Small said:
Really great poem good job I enjoyed it quite a lot!!!!
September 29th, 2023 23:58
self-mutation
sweetescape said:
i\'m so in love with your writing style. i can feel every line. all these words are wonderfully echoing in my heart
thank you
September 19th, 2023 02:06
sweetescape said:
i\'m so in love with your writing style. i can feel every line. all these words are wonderfully echoing in my heart
thank you
September 19th, 2023 02:06
self-mutation
orchidee said:
We won\'t see ya fine poems if ya go up in a puff of smoke! :)
September 19th, 2023 01:59
orchidee said:
We won\'t see ya fine poems if ya go up in a puff of smoke! :)
September 19th, 2023 01:59
stardust
L. B. Mek said:
a wonderfully genuine poetic voice, thanks for sharing
September 11th, 2023 06:06
L. B. Mek said:
a wonderfully genuine poetic voice, thanks for sharing
September 11th, 2023 06:06
stardust
LIZ said:
Oh this is sad, but so beautiful! The memories remain, and linger. Losing someone we love is so heartbreaking. All we can do is remember the good times, and hope one day we get to see them again! Thank you for sharing!
September 11th, 2023 06:03
LIZ said:
Oh this is sad, but so beautiful! The memories remain, and linger. Losing someone we love is so heartbreaking. All we can do is remember the good times, and hope one day we get to see them again! Thank you for sharing!
September 11th, 2023 06:03
human
Bobby O said:
The ruins of my own desires
That line epitomizes the whole piece
I’m not one to believe in vows or promises to self. What ruins desire enables easy lies. The part that hurts me to know is that you look and hope for support and it’s not to be found. Grab somebody who should respond and tell them to wake up. Stuff is just too important and serious when you feel adrift. I’m with your pilgrimage toward righteous and fair. Borrow some silk thread from Ariadne to enable path to retrace especially in what seems to be a solo mission. My prayers and best thought sent your way.
September 10th, 2023 18:02
Bobby O said:
The ruins of my own desires
That line epitomizes the whole piece
I’m not one to believe in vows or promises to self. What ruins desire enables easy lies. The part that hurts me to know is that you look and hope for support and it’s not to be found. Grab somebody who should respond and tell them to wake up. Stuff is just too important and serious when you feel adrift. I’m with your pilgrimage toward righteous and fair. Borrow some silk thread from Ariadne to enable path to retrace especially in what seems to be a solo mission. My prayers and best thought sent your way.
September 10th, 2023 18:02
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