Comments received on poems by Hidan
Please come
Cheeky Missy said:
Aw, simple and rather sweet. Your end-rhyming was nice, and your concluding line good. Nicely written, I enjoyed it.
February 6th, 2011 20:35
Cheeky Missy said:
Aw, simple and rather sweet. Your end-rhyming was nice, and your concluding line good. Nicely written, I enjoyed it.
February 6th, 2011 20:35
Cherry and Valentine
Cheeky Missy said:
Well-written, bittersweet and simplistic yet with such feeling....I am glad for your author's note and hope it goes well for you and that she will love you too...
February 5th, 2011 22:40
Cheeky Missy said:
Well-written, bittersweet and simplistic yet with such feeling....I am glad for your author's note and hope it goes well for you and that she will love you too...
February 5th, 2011 22:40
Cherry and Valentine
Emi said:
Awww so sweet and sad! :( But after reading your description, I hope Valentine's Day goes well for you! :)
February 5th, 2011 11:20
Emi said:
Awww so sweet and sad! :( But after reading your description, I hope Valentine's Day goes well for you! :)
February 5th, 2011 11:20
Looking back
Cheeky Missy said:
Fascinating, especially since it can allude to something deeper....like, for example, what does the park symbolize? and etc. It is a very sad story of broken trust, heartbreak and broken love. I enjoyed that you drew a scene and the scene you painted, by which you presented the treachery. Very nicely done!
February 4th, 2011 14:04
Cheeky Missy said:
Fascinating, especially since it can allude to something deeper....like, for example, what does the park symbolize? and etc. It is a very sad story of broken trust, heartbreak and broken love. I enjoyed that you drew a scene and the scene you painted, by which you presented the treachery. Very nicely done!
February 4th, 2011 14:04
Dreams
Cheeky Missy said:
Sweet....a delightful dream!....the world all to yourselves in love alone...forever, peacefully and so pleasant....
January 29th, 2011 23:15
Cheeky Missy said:
Sweet....a delightful dream!....the world all to yourselves in love alone...forever, peacefully and so pleasant....
January 29th, 2011 23:15
December Night
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. I like how you presented it....you so aptly characterized the entire situation, all the gaiety, light and cheerfulness from which one thing is lacking...your heart is not in it, you are so very alone and suffering. Beautifully depicted. Excellent!
January 27th, 2011 12:26
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. I like how you presented it....you so aptly characterized the entire situation, all the gaiety, light and cheerfulness from which one thing is lacking...your heart is not in it, you are so very alone and suffering. Beautifully depicted. Excellent!
January 27th, 2011 12:26
Hallucinate
Cheeky Missy said:
Fascinating! Beautiful. The title captured it all so perfectly. Wow. Great job...I enjoyed it...not the misery or the dream, but how well you put it together.
January 26th, 2011 22:37
Cheeky Missy said:
Fascinating! Beautiful. The title captured it all so perfectly. Wow. Great job...I enjoyed it...not the misery or the dream, but how well you put it together.
January 26th, 2011 22:37
Do not bury me
Cheeky Missy said:
Even though you finish gracefully as you say, on the battlefield, shall your bones then lie in the sun and elements to be ravaged by the birds and beasts and left to whiten in the sun as testimony of the bloody life you led? Shan't we bury you honorably afterall? It is a fascinating consideration if it signifies more than the bloody skirmishes we fight here....what is it alluding to poetically?
January 25th, 2011 09:07
Cheeky Missy said:
Even though you finish gracefully as you say, on the battlefield, shall your bones then lie in the sun and elements to be ravaged by the birds and beasts and left to whiten in the sun as testimony of the bloody life you led? Shan't we bury you honorably afterall? It is a fascinating consideration if it signifies more than the bloody skirmishes we fight here....what is it alluding to poetically?
January 25th, 2011 09:07
I am sorry
Cheeky Missy said:
It is very nicely written, too. If I may dare make a suggestion, it seems the sentiment expressed in this would be better represented by dropping the word "no" in the first line of the second verse/stanza, for the addressee seems to have loved dearly. And if that's the case, then forgiveness almost seems a given, for wouldn't love forgive? I like how it ends sweetly promising to requite the love......I enjoyed this!
January 23rd, 2011 18:19
Cheeky Missy said:
It is very nicely written, too. If I may dare make a suggestion, it seems the sentiment expressed in this would be better represented by dropping the word "no" in the first line of the second verse/stanza, for the addressee seems to have loved dearly. And if that's the case, then forgiveness almost seems a given, for wouldn't love forgive? I like how it ends sweetly promising to requite the love......I enjoyed this!
January 23rd, 2011 18:19
