Comments received on poems by lostgirl24
Shadow Dog
niallprideaux said:
Losing a pet is gut-wrenching, especially when you\'ve had them for so long. Amazing tribute x
July 8th, 2017 16:16
niallprideaux said:
Losing a pet is gut-wrenching, especially when you\'ve had them for so long. Amazing tribute x
July 8th, 2017 16:16
Shadow Dog
Nicholas Browning said:
Much empathy. Good use of description and full of emotion.
My condolences, good work.
July 8th, 2017 15:50
Nicholas Browning said:
Much empathy. Good use of description and full of emotion.
My condolences, good work.
July 8th, 2017 15:50
Shadow Dog
FredPeyer said:
A very moving poem for your departed Jack. You write well with much feeling.
July 8th, 2017 15:17
FredPeyer said:
A very moving poem for your departed Jack. You write well with much feeling.
July 8th, 2017 15:17
Shadow Dog
Confused kid said:
Its really sad to lose a pet, Jack is probably happy where every he is.
July 8th, 2017 14:07
Confused kid said:
Its really sad to lose a pet, Jack is probably happy where every he is.
July 8th, 2017 14:07
Shadow Dog
Louis Gibbs said:
Lovely tribute to your pet and companion, Jack! Well presented, L.G.
July 8th, 2017 13:20
Louis Gibbs said:
Lovely tribute to your pet and companion, Jack! Well presented, L.G.
July 8th, 2017 13:20
Turn Away
SheWasTheSun said:
This is beautifully written and it left me wanting more! Wonderful job :)
July 7th, 2017 20:56
SheWasTheSun said:
This is beautifully written and it left me wanting more! Wonderful job :)
July 7th, 2017 20:56
Turn Away
FredPeyer said:
You do have a way with words, lostgirl, and you are so right too.
Thanks for sharing.
July 7th, 2017 20:18
FredPeyer said:
You do have a way with words, lostgirl, and you are so right too.
Thanks for sharing.
July 7th, 2017 20:18
Turn Away
Poetic Dan said:
Haha I\'ve been singing my own song all day today too.
\"ringing alone in my automobile, I\'m the power behind the wheel, now I just click on your stuff, telling I\'m on the right track.
Feed that power you have, we are the change ;)
July 7th, 2017 18:01
Poetic Dan said:
Haha I\'ve been singing my own song all day today too.
\"ringing alone in my automobile, I\'m the power behind the wheel, now I just click on your stuff, telling I\'m on the right track.
Feed that power you have, we are the change ;)
July 7th, 2017 18:01
Cemetery Rain
Goldfinch60 said:
Good write I think that the last line \"And they return to stardust\" is wonderful.
July 7th, 2017 00:27
Goldfinch60 said:
Good write I think that the last line \"And they return to stardust\" is wonderful.
July 7th, 2017 00:27
Cemetery Rain
FredPeyer said:
If cemeteries could talk! Your well written poem reminded me that there is so much more to cemeteries than just a bunch of head stones. There is a story under every one of them. Well done!
July 6th, 2017 18:39
FredPeyer said:
If cemeteries could talk! Your well written poem reminded me that there is so much more to cemeteries than just a bunch of head stones. There is a story under every one of them. Well done!
July 6th, 2017 18:39
Suicide Thoughts
lost-but-not-broken17 said:
I feel this so hardcore. It\'s over whelming and you feel like there\'s nothing you can do. I\'d love to talk to you more and maybe we can help each other out? (:
July 6th, 2017 14:16
lost-but-not-broken17 said:
I feel this so hardcore. It\'s over whelming and you feel like there\'s nothing you can do. I\'d love to talk to you more and maybe we can help each other out? (:
July 6th, 2017 14:16
Cemetery Rain
seeker123 said:
Beautiful Poem:) I especially like the last four lines they capture everything about the dead and death and how we may see a flash before our eyes that either shows our life our the meaning of life. For at death I beleive it is revealed.
July 6th, 2017 12:06
seeker123 said:
Beautiful Poem:) I especially like the last four lines they capture everything about the dead and death and how we may see a flash before our eyes that either shows our life our the meaning of life. For at death I beleive it is revealed.
July 6th, 2017 12:06
Cemetery Rain
Nicholas Browning said:
I like this quite a bit. The word choices are simple, but you make them work so well. Good work.
July 6th, 2017 09:41
Nicholas Browning said:
I like this quite a bit. The word choices are simple, but you make them work so well. Good work.
July 6th, 2017 09:41
Cemetery Rain
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks ANGEL a very beautiful and nostalgic Poem ! I love CEMETERIES and a number of my Friends and many Relatives live in them ~ mainly in the UK and some abroad ~ I visit when I can ! I always give my Photography Students an assignment to photograph in the Church Graveyard near the College (with the permission of the Vicar). They produce some amazing pictures. Thanks for caring ~ Hugs BRIAN
July 6th, 2017 09:21
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks ANGEL a very beautiful and nostalgic Poem ! I love CEMETERIES and a number of my Friends and many Relatives live in them ~ mainly in the UK and some abroad ~ I visit when I can ! I always give my Photography Students an assignment to photograph in the Church Graveyard near the College (with the permission of the Vicar). They produce some amazing pictures. Thanks for caring ~ Hugs BRIAN
July 6th, 2017 09:21
Suicide Thoughts
Poetic Dan said:
.... Always stay open and true to your self. I\'ve walked and still Walking this path for 22 years now. A year ago I lost a new friend to this disease, one poem to her is called live, learn and figure out.
Most want want to hear your truth, for the it\'s too ugly, they just won\'t see. But to the right kind of people your truth is needed more than the air that we breathe.
Take care, as we all need each other ;)
July 6th, 2017 01:32
Poetic Dan said:
.... Always stay open and true to your self. I\'ve walked and still Walking this path for 22 years now. A year ago I lost a new friend to this disease, one poem to her is called live, learn and figure out.
Most want want to hear your truth, for the it\'s too ugly, they just won\'t see. But to the right kind of people your truth is needed more than the air that we breathe.
Take care, as we all need each other ;)
July 6th, 2017 01:32
Suicide Thoughts
Hopey_xx said:
You did a great job at writing these emotions out. I completely feel the same way, and I struggle to deal with them sometimes. I\'m here if you ever need me, just send me a message.
ps: welcome to Mps!
July 5th, 2017 13:15
Hopey_xx said:
You did a great job at writing these emotions out. I completely feel the same way, and I struggle to deal with them sometimes. I\'m here if you ever need me, just send me a message.
ps: welcome to Mps!
July 5th, 2017 13:15
Suicide Thoughts
kendra_dawnn said:
I think it\'s a good thing that you write, not only the good things that Stephen.Sapaugh suggested, but also the bad because how else will you get them out in a non-harming way? I understand what you\'re going through, and I felt the exact same way as you are right now. If you ever need to talk, message me. It can be about anything; the sky, your thoughts, your favorite food. Anything, I mean it. You did a great job.
July 5th, 2017 11:43
kendra_dawnn said:
I think it\'s a good thing that you write, not only the good things that Stephen.Sapaugh suggested, but also the bad because how else will you get them out in a non-harming way? I understand what you\'re going through, and I felt the exact same way as you are right now. If you ever need to talk, message me. It can be about anything; the sky, your thoughts, your favorite food. Anything, I mean it. You did a great job.
July 5th, 2017 11:43
Suicide Thoughts
AmandaJade said:
A heartfelt poem, greatly written. I understand how alone you may feel, and i definitely understand the pain. If you ever need someone to talk to, feel free to message me anytime! You aren\'t alone girl!
July 5th, 2017 11:42
AmandaJade said:
A heartfelt poem, greatly written. I understand how alone you may feel, and i definitely understand the pain. If you ever need someone to talk to, feel free to message me anytime! You aren\'t alone girl!
July 5th, 2017 11:42
Suicide Thoughts
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME FRIEND ~ Thanks for your first poem ~ well penned ~ it throbbed with rhythm which kept one\'s attention to the last line WHO DO YOU THINK I AM ? You tell us you are 13 ~ well that figures ~ we were all 13 once and life is never easy when you enter your teens especially in 2017 when so so much is expected of GiRLS (and to a lesser extent BOYS).. We all had good \"externals\" which kept us going ~ but all TEENS share an internal angst about Body image ~ Intelligence ~ Personality ~ The World and God etc and if we get enough NEGATIVES we seek an easy way out ~ SUICIDE ~ but in my experience that is the COWARDS WAY and doesn\'t give GOD a chance for your to developp as HE designed YOU and your PARENTS whose DNA they shared with you ! OK when I was i3 we did not have mobiles etc (which i hate) but there wers still lots of BITCHES who tryrd to humiliate us. All of us who are replying to you ~ have survive our TEENS and our corporate advice is PRAY ~ TRUST and DON\'T JUMP ~ you can never get your life back again ~ AMEN Thinking of you Praying for you ~ Yours BRIAN (UK)
July 5th, 2017 11:38
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME FRIEND ~ Thanks for your first poem ~ well penned ~ it throbbed with rhythm which kept one\'s attention to the last line WHO DO YOU THINK I AM ? You tell us you are 13 ~ well that figures ~ we were all 13 once and life is never easy when you enter your teens especially in 2017 when so so much is expected of GiRLS (and to a lesser extent BOYS).. We all had good \"externals\" which kept us going ~ but all TEENS share an internal angst about Body image ~ Intelligence ~ Personality ~ The World and God etc and if we get enough NEGATIVES we seek an easy way out ~ SUICIDE ~ but in my experience that is the COWARDS WAY and doesn\'t give GOD a chance for your to developp as HE designed YOU and your PARENTS whose DNA they shared with you ! OK when I was i3 we did not have mobiles etc (which i hate) but there wers still lots of BITCHES who tryrd to humiliate us. All of us who are replying to you ~ have survive our TEENS and our corporate advice is PRAY ~ TRUST and DON\'T JUMP ~ you can never get your life back again ~ AMEN Thinking of you Praying for you ~ Yours BRIAN (UK)
July 5th, 2017 11:38
Suicide Thoughts
burning-embers said:
I like this, it really benefits from your choice of layout too. Have you considered how many of your contemporaries who also say \'i\'m fine\' and \'everythings good\' are also having your internal turmoil? I betcha 90% of writers have. I hope you find comments here rewarding and give us more of yourself..
July 5th, 2017 10:57
burning-embers said:
I like this, it really benefits from your choice of layout too. Have you considered how many of your contemporaries who also say \'i\'m fine\' and \'everythings good\' are also having your internal turmoil? I betcha 90% of writers have. I hope you find comments here rewarding and give us more of yourself..
July 5th, 2017 10:57
Suicide Thoughts
FredPeyer said:
You penned a heart-wrenching cry for help. Very well written, the opening lines drew me in and kept me there right up to your conclusion.
Lostgirl24 you are good, I d like your writing and would love to read a lot more. So PLEASE, no more talk about suicide.
July 5th, 2017 10:34
FredPeyer said:
You penned a heart-wrenching cry for help. Very well written, the opening lines drew me in and kept me there right up to your conclusion.
Lostgirl24 you are good, I d like your writing and would love to read a lot more. So PLEASE, no more talk about suicide.
July 5th, 2017 10:34
Suicide Thoughts
Stephen.Sapaugh said:
Usually I would write a review of the poem, and critique it, however due to the subject matter I don\'t know if you would like me to do that. Instead I will give my thoughts.
Suicide is a tempting thing for most people, however in reality what draws us back away from it every time is the thought of how many people we hurt if we do do it. I am glad that you are still here writing, and haven\'t given in. You have potential as a poet, and I hope that you will pursue that. Also, it would be nice if you could write about the good things that are in your life. That might make you feel better.
July 5th, 2017 10:15
Stephen.Sapaugh said:
Usually I would write a review of the poem, and critique it, however due to the subject matter I don\'t know if you would like me to do that. Instead I will give my thoughts.
Suicide is a tempting thing for most people, however in reality what draws us back away from it every time is the thought of how many people we hurt if we do do it. I am glad that you are still here writing, and haven\'t given in. You have potential as a poet, and I hope that you will pursue that. Also, it would be nice if you could write about the good things that are in your life. That might make you feel better.
July 5th, 2017 10:15
