Comments received on poems by Aislinn Wilson
Like a Man
orchidee said:
Ohhh I\'ve had a sheltered life. Please excuse me, I\'ve just been sick. Not that I\'m sick of the poem! lol.
Is she having a bad hair-day?! She does not seem to be having one of her happiest days - under-statement of the year?!
April 11th, 2018 13:38
orchidee said:
Ohhh I\'ve had a sheltered life. Please excuse me, I\'ve just been sick. Not that I\'m sick of the poem! lol.
Is she having a bad hair-day?! She does not seem to be having one of her happiest days - under-statement of the year?!
April 11th, 2018 13:38
The Amazing Spider-Man, Issue #121
FineB said:
Hi Aislinn,
A vivid, interesting poem.
Great stuff.
Keep writing
FineB
March 28th, 2018 09:15
FineB said:
Hi Aislinn,
A vivid, interesting poem.
Great stuff.
Keep writing
FineB
March 28th, 2018 09:15
Missed Connections
queer-with-a-pen said:
Oh, this was a hilarious read. Loved this poem. It would also make a very good book. Excellent!
February 17th, 2018 14:23
queer-with-a-pen said:
Oh, this was a hilarious read. Loved this poem. It would also make a very good book. Excellent!
February 17th, 2018 14:23
Ingestion
Shadowbox15 said:
Fascinating piece of writing! Had you not mentioned that it was a dream, I would have suspected that this was driven by the terror of suffering, in contrast to death. Nevertheless, fantastic use of imagery.
January 29th, 2018 17:14
Shadowbox15 said:
Fascinating piece of writing! Had you not mentioned that it was a dream, I would have suspected that this was driven by the terror of suffering, in contrast to death. Nevertheless, fantastic use of imagery.
January 29th, 2018 17:14
Ingestion
Michael Edwards said:
I take my hat off to you Aislinn, writing work this good and yet still seeking advice to improve it.
Anent the last line: I am trapped, I am lead, I am beckoned all indicate subserviency and to reflect this and round the poem off - for the last line a slight change of repetition to reflect this and thus:
\'\'I am a child of rot\' I concede\'.
January 29th, 2018 15:34
Michael Edwards said:
I take my hat off to you Aislinn, writing work this good and yet still seeking advice to improve it.
Anent the last line: I am trapped, I am lead, I am beckoned all indicate subserviency and to reflect this and round the poem off - for the last line a slight change of repetition to reflect this and thus:
\'\'I am a child of rot\' I concede\'.
January 29th, 2018 15:34
Ingestion
ZIGGY said:
your style of writing seems perfect to me no need to ever change it as I see just evolve ,,,,zigs
January 29th, 2018 14:10
ZIGGY said:
your style of writing seems perfect to me no need to ever change it as I see just evolve ,,,,zigs
January 29th, 2018 14:10
Ingestion
ZIGGY said:
Wow stunning piece of writing every word and line grabbed my imagination very well penned this is one of those I will want to read again ,,,,zigs
January 29th, 2018 14:03
ZIGGY said:
Wow stunning piece of writing every word and line grabbed my imagination very well penned this is one of those I will want to read again ,,,,zigs
January 29th, 2018 14:03
Ingestion
dusk arising said:
That\'ll teach you not to eat blue cheese for supper!
January 29th, 2018 13:50
dusk arising said:
That\'ll teach you not to eat blue cheese for supper!
January 29th, 2018 13:50
Ingestion
Lorna said:
Very frightening dream - I absolutely loved this line: Drinking me towards the drawbridge’s empty gullet,
January 29th, 2018 13:18
Lorna said:
Very frightening dream - I absolutely loved this line: Drinking me towards the drawbridge’s empty gullet,
January 29th, 2018 13:18
What \"The Gays\" Will Label Songs to Avoid Saying They Enjoy Country Music
Michael Edwards said:
A fun write - more power to your elbow Aislinn.
January 21st, 2018 01:23
Michael Edwards said:
A fun write - more power to your elbow Aislinn.
January 21st, 2018 01:23
Dear Gretchen the Cheerleader, My First Crush,
kevin browne said:
let it out, my friend, you deserve your own creation of yourself and your sexuality. a very encouraging write.
January 20th, 2018 20:11
kevin browne said:
let it out, my friend, you deserve your own creation of yourself and your sexuality. a very encouraging write.
January 20th, 2018 20:11
What \"The Gays\" Will Label Songs to Avoid Saying They Enjoy Country Music
kevin browne said:
I\'ve learned over the years that provoking sexuality comes as a damning threat towards the the real person you feel you need to be. I have been bi-sexual since I was 17, I\'m now 48 and content. I love your musical metaphors to combat the people who prey upon us. well written though, my friend.
January 20th, 2018 20:07
kevin browne said:
I\'ve learned over the years that provoking sexuality comes as a damning threat towards the the real person you feel you need to be. I have been bi-sexual since I was 17, I\'m now 48 and content. I love your musical metaphors to combat the people who prey upon us. well written though, my friend.
January 20th, 2018 20:07
Dear Gretchen the Cheerleader, My First Crush,
Aals said:
i can relate, but its a beautiful poem nonetheless
January 20th, 2018 09:42
Aals said:
i can relate, but its a beautiful poem nonetheless
January 20th, 2018 09:42
Missed Connections
Michael Edwards said:
Reading this early here in the UK - great start to the day.
January 20th, 2018 00:59
Michael Edwards said:
Reading this early here in the UK - great start to the day.
January 20th, 2018 00:59
Missed Connections
FredPeyer said:
You do have a comedian talet, Aislinn!
Read it twice, lol!
January 19th, 2018 13:43
FredPeyer said:
You do have a comedian talet, Aislinn!
Read it twice, lol!
January 19th, 2018 13:43
Dear Gretchen the Cheerleader, My First Crush,
AlexHoy said:
Great piece! It expresses your innermost feelings. As long as you can forgive her for not having an understanding of who you are. Love is the key to everything!
January 19th, 2018 09:10
AlexHoy said:
Great piece! It expresses your innermost feelings. As long as you can forgive her for not having an understanding of who you are. Love is the key to everything!
January 19th, 2018 09:10
Dear Gretchen the Cheerleader, My First Crush,
FredPeyer said:
This is a refreshingly good, open, honest write! Well structured, well rhymed. Good work, Aislinn!
January 18th, 2018 12:59
FredPeyer said:
This is a refreshingly good, open, honest write! Well structured, well rhymed. Good work, Aislinn!
January 18th, 2018 12:59
Two Rooks
FredPeyer said:
There is definitely a little bit of Poe in there, Aislinn, but it\'s just a hint, the poem is all yours. Love your style, story development, and lol, the last line!
January 18th, 2018 12:54
FredPeyer said:
There is definitely a little bit of Poe in there, Aislinn, but it\'s just a hint, the poem is all yours. Love your style, story development, and lol, the last line!
January 18th, 2018 12:54
God, Our Mother
FredPeyer said:
Aislinn, I absolutely love this poem. It reminded me of a lady who once said to me: \'God is a woman, and SHE is black\'!
For me \'God\' is universal power, the life force of which we are part of and from where we come, and to where we will return. Your beautifully written poem is exactly about this relationship. The power is within us and we are within it.
You are an excellent writer!
January 18th, 2018 12:47
FredPeyer said:
Aislinn, I absolutely love this poem. It reminded me of a lady who once said to me: \'God is a woman, and SHE is black\'!
For me \'God\' is universal power, the life force of which we are part of and from where we come, and to where we will return. Your beautifully written poem is exactly about this relationship. The power is within us and we are within it.
You are an excellent writer!
January 18th, 2018 12:47
A Lamentation
FredPeyer said:
I agree with Michael, Aislinn! You do have quite a way with words. I am Catholic on paper only, but do have my own belief and the belief that everybody has a right to believe anything they want!
I agree with you that one can be mad with God, the same way being made with our parents or siblings does not diminish our love for them.
Very well written!
January 18th, 2018 12:41
FredPeyer said:
I agree with Michael, Aislinn! You do have quite a way with words. I am Catholic on paper only, but do have my own belief and the belief that everybody has a right to believe anything they want!
I agree with you that one can be mad with God, the same way being made with our parents or siblings does not diminish our love for them.
Very well written!
January 18th, 2018 12:41
Monologophobia
FredPeyer said:
Aislinn, I must say I love it the way it is. There is one thing I would change and that is to leave out the word \'and\' in lines \'And I am afraid of circles\' and \'And I am\', changing them to the direct \'I am afraid of circles\', and \'I am\'. To me the \'and\' makes me wonder what else you are afraid of.
But hey, that\'s just me and my humble opinion. You have the artistic freedom to do anything you want!
Good poem!
January 18th, 2018 12:32
FredPeyer said:
Aislinn, I must say I love it the way it is. There is one thing I would change and that is to leave out the word \'and\' in lines \'And I am afraid of circles\' and \'And I am\', changing them to the direct \'I am afraid of circles\', and \'I am\'. To me the \'and\' makes me wonder what else you are afraid of.
But hey, that\'s just me and my humble opinion. You have the artistic freedom to do anything you want!
Good poem!
January 18th, 2018 12:32
Two Rooks
Fay Slimm. said:
Interesting and engaging writes here Aislinn - -rooks with dark happenings and used with an gift for prose - -keep that ink flowing.
January 18th, 2018 11:44
Fay Slimm. said:
Interesting and engaging writes here Aislinn - -rooks with dark happenings and used with an gift for prose - -keep that ink flowing.
January 18th, 2018 11:44
Dear Gretchen the Cheerleader, My First Crush,
orchidee said:
Good write Aislinn.
January 18th, 2018 10:47
orchidee said:
Good write Aislinn.
January 18th, 2018 10:47
God, Our Mother
Poetic Dan said:
Great writing, really enjoyed it. Thank you for bearing your all
January 18th, 2018 10:28
Poetic Dan said:
Great writing, really enjoyed it. Thank you for bearing your all
January 18th, 2018 10:28
Dear Gretchen the Cheerleader, My First Crush,
queer-with-a-pen said:
First crushes, especially on people of the same gender, can either be awesome or terrible. Especially if that person is homophobic and/or a jerk.
I enjoyed the rhyming in this poem, and the last line is very well delivered.
January 18th, 2018 09:20
queer-with-a-pen said:
First crushes, especially on people of the same gender, can either be awesome or terrible. Especially if that person is homophobic and/or a jerk.
I enjoyed the rhyming in this poem, and the last line is very well delivered.
January 18th, 2018 09:20
Dear Gretchen the Cheerleader, My First Crush,
Michael Edwards said:
Well I wouldn\'t call it silly - it\'s a good write and well deserves it\'s place in the gallery.
January 18th, 2018 08:40
Michael Edwards said:
Well I wouldn\'t call it silly - it\'s a good write and well deserves it\'s place in the gallery.
January 18th, 2018 08:40
God, Our Mother
Gary Edward Geraci said:
Nice. I might read it as one having a conversation with God - the Infinite “unsexed” Creator (the obvious first cause of masculinity and femininity), about, “our mother” the Virgin Mary, the blessed Mother of God or our natural mother here on earth with us. If only because scriptural revelation is unequivocal in revealing God as a Father. Wonderfully deep and intellectually stimulating poem.
January 17th, 2018 23:51
Gary Edward Geraci said:
Nice. I might read it as one having a conversation with God - the Infinite “unsexed” Creator (the obvious first cause of masculinity and femininity), about, “our mother” the Virgin Mary, the blessed Mother of God or our natural mother here on earth with us. If only because scriptural revelation is unequivocal in revealing God as a Father. Wonderfully deep and intellectually stimulating poem.
January 17th, 2018 23:51
Two Rooks
Michael Edwards said:
I love them both but prefer the second by a narrow margin. Such fresh writing and such a sad story - Superb work Aislinn
January 17th, 2018 12:30
Michael Edwards said:
I love them both but prefer the second by a narrow margin. Such fresh writing and such a sad story - Superb work Aislinn
January 17th, 2018 12:30
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