Comments received on poems by Reyas
Up in Flames
E-Poems said:
Awesome, very raw but brilliantly written as always Reyas!
August 10th, 2018 16:54
E-Poems said:
Awesome, very raw but brilliantly written as always Reyas!
August 10th, 2018 16:54
Up in Flames
orchidee said:
It\'s a horrid thing, smoking. I wanted a snack outdoors on a warm day. I had to move about 4 times. Someone was smoking and so I was in side-stream smoke. I moved, then another, and another person started smoking! Grrr!
It does no-one any good.
August 10th, 2018 12:33
orchidee said:
It\'s a horrid thing, smoking. I wanted a snack outdoors on a warm day. I had to move about 4 times. Someone was smoking and so I was in side-stream smoke. I moved, then another, and another person started smoking! Grrr!
It does no-one any good.
August 10th, 2018 12:33
Midnight Cravings
Goldfinch60 said:
Good fun write. \"Do you want fries with that?\"
August 10th, 2018 00:43
Goldfinch60 said:
Good fun write. \"Do you want fries with that?\"
August 10th, 2018 00:43
Cutting Edge
serenity-poetry said:
This poem is very dark, but it\'s honest.
I think there is so much power in truthful poetry, and I really respect you for writing this.
Awesome work.
August 9th, 2018 18:18
serenity-poetry said:
This poem is very dark, but it\'s honest.
I think there is so much power in truthful poetry, and I really respect you for writing this.
Awesome work.
August 9th, 2018 18:18
Slow Down
orchidee said:
Then again, I ran too fast, and ran over the cliifffffffff! Good acting innit?! heehee.
August 9th, 2018 10:01
orchidee said:
Then again, I ran too fast, and ran over the cliifffffffff! Good acting innit?! heehee.
August 9th, 2018 10:01
Slow Down
orchidee said:
A fine write Reyas. I\'m writing this ever so s-l-o-w-l-y, ya know!
August 9th, 2018 01:47
orchidee said:
A fine write Reyas. I\'m writing this ever so s-l-o-w-l-y, ya know!
August 9th, 2018 01:47
Save Me
Crystal Hope said:
Your acrostic is so greatly done in contents. well done!
August 8th, 2018 21:40
Crystal Hope said:
Your acrostic is so greatly done in contents. well done!
August 8th, 2018 21:40
Don’t Falter
orchidee said:
You faltered there? You collapsed all in a heap?! Oops! (heehee).
August 8th, 2018 01:48
orchidee said:
You faltered there? You collapsed all in a heap?! Oops! (heehee).
August 8th, 2018 01:48
Don’t Falter
Goldfinch60 said:
Stand tall and go forward helping others and as you help them you will get stronger, strong enough to save yourself.
August 8th, 2018 00:36
Goldfinch60 said:
Stand tall and go forward helping others and as you help them you will get stronger, strong enough to save yourself.
August 8th, 2018 00:36
Don’t Falter
orchidee said:
And yet we all need help ourselves at times. We can appear \'superior\' if we\'re seemingly always helping others, while at times it\'s a \'front\'
August 7th, 2018 13:12
orchidee said:
And yet we all need help ourselves at times. We can appear \'superior\' if we\'re seemingly always helping others, while at times it\'s a \'front\'
August 7th, 2018 13:12
Don’t Falter
dusk arising said:
Aha the external shell we all build around our feelings and inner sensitivity.
It used to be the \'stiff upper lip\' mentality and macho me that was the acceptable face of Brit masculinity but things have move along. And aren\'t we all the better for it!
I think your piece is to tempt your reader to reveal they have no desire to maintain a front which involves standing tall and showing THE way.
Being communicative, visibly fallible and able to offer advice upon A way is probably the effective solution.
Great thought provoking piece.
August 7th, 2018 11:45
dusk arising said:
Aha the external shell we all build around our feelings and inner sensitivity.
It used to be the \'stiff upper lip\' mentality and macho me that was the acceptable face of Brit masculinity but things have move along. And aren\'t we all the better for it!
I think your piece is to tempt your reader to reveal they have no desire to maintain a front which involves standing tall and showing THE way.
Being communicative, visibly fallible and able to offer advice upon A way is probably the effective solution.
Great thought provoking piece.
August 7th, 2018 11:45
Bang!
Brother_Kane said:
Really well written for some reason It read to me like a thrash metal/screamo style which I ain’t actually much of a heavy metal guy lol the twist at the end amazing and I think very topical with the current school shootings plague America is having it’s almost like the narrator (the reader or your self the writer) is a parent and the gun is in their hand because they are pro guns again don’t know why that analogy has come to me I’m english and not a parent lol
August 6th, 2018 17:01
Brother_Kane said:
Really well written for some reason It read to me like a thrash metal/screamo style which I ain’t actually much of a heavy metal guy lol the twist at the end amazing and I think very topical with the current school shootings plague America is having it’s almost like the narrator (the reader or your self the writer) is a parent and the gun is in their hand because they are pro guns again don’t know why that analogy has come to me I’m english and not a parent lol
August 6th, 2018 17:01
Cutting Edge
dusk arising said:
Physical to overcome the mental. Incisive harsh action punishes the reader with reality.
August 6th, 2018 00:14
dusk arising said:
Physical to overcome the mental. Incisive harsh action punishes the reader with reality.
August 6th, 2018 00:14
Cutting Edge
JasmineUK said:
A lovely piece with real insight,
Giving us a glimpse of the inner fight.
Drown out that foul voice of deceit,
With every true voice in praise replete.
August 5th, 2018 17:28
JasmineUK said:
A lovely piece with real insight,
Giving us a glimpse of the inner fight.
Drown out that foul voice of deceit,
With every true voice in praise replete.
August 5th, 2018 17:28
Cutting Edge
orchidee said:
It happens in reality. But I hope it\'s not a self-write. Oops should be marked 18+ maybe?
You will make my 18+ watchdog bark. Woof! Be quiet, Rover!
(That\'s killed the tension of the poem. Whoops! heehee.)
Sorry, I needed to. I get shudders on this theme, having heard some true stories.
August 5th, 2018 11:22
orchidee said:
It happens in reality. But I hope it\'s not a self-write. Oops should be marked 18+ maybe?
You will make my 18+ watchdog bark. Woof! Be quiet, Rover!
(That\'s killed the tension of the poem. Whoops! heehee.)
Sorry, I needed to. I get shudders on this theme, having heard some true stories.
August 5th, 2018 11:22
Ballet of Flames
orchidee said:
A fine write Reyas. I dunno what was happening at a BBQ in a park. I was the other end of the park, but heck of a lot of smoke. They\'ll burn the place down!
August 4th, 2018 08:41
orchidee said:
A fine write Reyas. I dunno what was happening at a BBQ in a park. I was the other end of the park, but heck of a lot of smoke. They\'ll burn the place down!
August 4th, 2018 08:41
A Young Poet’s Dream
Poetic Dan said:
Fantastic although I must include yourself too, an uplifting soulful dream that I believe you already achieved.
August 3rd, 2018 14:38
Poetic Dan said:
Fantastic although I must include yourself too, an uplifting soulful dream that I believe you already achieved.
August 3rd, 2018 14:38
Save Me
Poetic Dan said:
Sounds like you have, its your ship to sail the way you wish.
Well expressed
August 3rd, 2018 13:00
Poetic Dan said:
Sounds like you have, its your ship to sail the way you wish.
Well expressed
August 3rd, 2018 13:00
Backyard Imagination
orchidee said:
You having fun there?! heehee. It all had to stop for dinner!
August 3rd, 2018 01:35
orchidee said:
You having fun there?! heehee. It all had to stop for dinner!
August 3rd, 2018 01:35
Backyard Imagination
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good fun write, dinner comes before everything else.
August 3rd, 2018 01:20
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good fun write, dinner comes before everything else.
August 3rd, 2018 01:20
Backyard Imagination
dusk arising said:
He he he i love it. But this love of mum\'s food spoiling all the fun. Worrysome... did you gain weight? Was Ben eventually slain??
More please.
August 2nd, 2018 14:22
dusk arising said:
He he he i love it. But this love of mum\'s food spoiling all the fun. Worrysome... did you gain weight? Was Ben eventually slain??
More please.
August 2nd, 2018 14:22
A Young Poet’s Dream
Goldfinch60 said:
Good positive write, if you can help somebody take just one step along their path of life your job has been done.
August 2nd, 2018 00:30
Goldfinch60 said:
Good positive write, if you can help somebody take just one step along their path of life your job has been done.
August 2nd, 2018 00:30
A Young Poet’s Dream
dusk arising said:
A fine aspiration \"I want it said when i am gone, i moved the world just one step on.\"
Many people have a similar desire but it\'s not in the saying, it\'s in the doing.
You are right though, making one persons day better does move the world on. Something to encompass into daily life for us all.
August 1st, 2018 14:15
dusk arising said:
A fine aspiration \"I want it said when i am gone, i moved the world just one step on.\"
Many people have a similar desire but it\'s not in the saying, it\'s in the doing.
You are right though, making one persons day better does move the world on. Something to encompass into daily life for us all.
August 1st, 2018 14:15
A Young Poet’s Dream
orchidee said:
A fine write R.
Yep, you could change me today. I mean - give me singing lessons. Might not help though. I\'ve had about 5 million lessons already. Hmm, why did tutor wear ear plugs all the time?! heehee.
August 1st, 2018 13:58
orchidee said:
A fine write R.
Yep, you could change me today. I mean - give me singing lessons. Might not help though. I\'ve had about 5 million lessons already. Hmm, why did tutor wear ear plugs all the time?! heehee.
August 1st, 2018 13:58
A Young Poet’s Dream
dusk arising said:
A fine aspiration \"I want it said when i am gone, i moved the world just one step on.\"
Many people have a similar desire but it\'s not in the saying, it\'s in the doing.
You are right though, making one persons day better does move the world on. Something to encompass into daily life for us all.
August 1st, 2018 13:44
dusk arising said:
A fine aspiration \"I want it said when i am gone, i moved the world just one step on.\"
Many people have a similar desire but it\'s not in the saying, it\'s in the doing.
You are right though, making one persons day better does move the world on. Something to encompass into daily life for us all.
August 1st, 2018 13:44
A Young Poet’s Dream
Heartwriter said:
What an uplifting read!! Thanks for sharing .
August 1st, 2018 13:38
Heartwriter said:
What an uplifting read!! Thanks for sharing .
August 1st, 2018 13:38
Save Me
orchidee said:
A bad-hair day? Can\'t make out if to save you or not - the initials say yes, and the words say no!
July 31st, 2018 10:39
orchidee said:
A bad-hair day? Can\'t make out if to save you or not - the initials say yes, and the words say no!
July 31st, 2018 10:39
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