Comments received on poems by empty vial
red viaduct
L. B. Mek said:
there are tons of red bridges
in our world
crimson painted, as if prophetic
warning
of the allure, in those accessible
escape points
to lives, overburdened by chaos
and incessant, strife
but
for every one, individual
defeat, overwhelms
thousands upon, thousands
hear those same exact
whispering \'orbs\'
only, they\'ve cultivated an
appreciation and worth
for themselves
that filters, the bulls shit
in those venomous, thought \'orbs\'
and so, recognise
how fleeting those words are..
(there was a study done
on those that survived their suicide attempts
and almost all of them, stated
within second of taking the plunge
they immediately realised
in the scope of the existence, they\'d
just given - up, on
they were alarmed
at how insignificant, their issues/problems
seemed)
I am not, in any way
trying to belittle your suffering
or the depicted suffering
in your poetry\'s, voice
I
am merely trying to provide
a long lensed, wide scoped
perspective
on the moment, your poetry portrays
that we all, need
to survive
so we may, be offered an opportunity
at a better, day
dawning, in our next experience
of aurora\'s, greeting..
I wish you all the best
if these words are taken from a personal
point of view or experience
then I laud, your bravery and fight!
and if they are words
empathetically depicting, the horror
realities
some of us are dealing with, everyday
then I laud, your compassionate humanity!
\'I wish you Peace, dear Poet
stay strong!\'
thank you, for choosing to share
May 17th, 2022 04:47
L. B. Mek said:
there are tons of red bridges
in our world
crimson painted, as if prophetic
warning
of the allure, in those accessible
escape points
to lives, overburdened by chaos
and incessant, strife
but
for every one, individual
defeat, overwhelms
thousands upon, thousands
hear those same exact
whispering \'orbs\'
only, they\'ve cultivated an
appreciation and worth
for themselves
that filters, the bulls shit
in those venomous, thought \'orbs\'
and so, recognise
how fleeting those words are..
(there was a study done
on those that survived their suicide attempts
and almost all of them, stated
within second of taking the plunge
they immediately realised
in the scope of the existence, they\'d
just given - up, on
they were alarmed
at how insignificant, their issues/problems
seemed)
I am not, in any way
trying to belittle your suffering
or the depicted suffering
in your poetry\'s, voice
I
am merely trying to provide
a long lensed, wide scoped
perspective
on the moment, your poetry portrays
that we all, need
to survive
so we may, be offered an opportunity
at a better, day
dawning, in our next experience
of aurora\'s, greeting..
I wish you all the best
if these words are taken from a personal
point of view or experience
then I laud, your bravery and fight!
and if they are words
empathetically depicting, the horror
realities
some of us are dealing with, everyday
then I laud, your compassionate humanity!
\'I wish you Peace, dear Poet
stay strong!\'
thank you, for choosing to share
May 17th, 2022 04:47
muffled words
arqios said:
The use of repetition here is quite effective and not annoying. It\'s great when lines are put to good use! Thanks for sharing. /Rik.
May 14th, 2022 17:20
arqios said:
The use of repetition here is quite effective and not annoying. It\'s great when lines are put to good use! Thanks for sharing. /Rik.
May 14th, 2022 17:20
muffled words
blacksparrow79 said:
This feels like genuine expression. How the mind formulates things on an instants notice ... Just those kinds of thoughts. Broken, yet also complete. Thanks for sharing
May 13th, 2022 19:53
blacksparrow79 said:
This feels like genuine expression. How the mind formulates things on an instants notice ... Just those kinds of thoughts. Broken, yet also complete. Thanks for sharing
May 13th, 2022 19:53
\"due five days ago\"
Saxon Crow said:
Dude. You guys have got it so much harder than us oldies. There is just waaaaayyyyyhh too much pressure to succeed and as you point out, for what in the end? Really good expressive poem EV
April 27th, 2022 13:48
Saxon Crow said:
Dude. You guys have got it so much harder than us oldies. There is just waaaaayyyyyhh too much pressure to succeed and as you point out, for what in the end? Really good expressive poem EV
April 27th, 2022 13:48
\"due five days ago\"
Crowns4Christ said:
What is your assignment about, maybe I can help with ideas
April 27th, 2022 13:46
Crowns4Christ said:
What is your assignment about, maybe I can help with ideas
April 27th, 2022 13:46
\"due five days ago\"
Christina8 said:
Hey listen I have a son that struggled and this is not lost on me at all! A lot of kids feel this way. Thank you for sharing your beautiful poetry!
April 27th, 2022 12:57
Christina8 said:
Hey listen I have a son that struggled and this is not lost on me at all! A lot of kids feel this way. Thank you for sharing your beautiful poetry!
April 27th, 2022 12:57
\"due five days ago\"
Rocky Lagou said:
So relatable though. I\'m literally responding to this as I\'m in a school Zoom meeting, I\'m doing it virtually. I have like a gazillion assignments just pending my attention. Hope to graduate!!
April 27th, 2022 10:08
Rocky Lagou said:
So relatable though. I\'m literally responding to this as I\'m in a school Zoom meeting, I\'m doing it virtually. I have like a gazillion assignments just pending my attention. Hope to graduate!!
April 27th, 2022 10:08
epitome
Christina8 said:
To add to what everyone else already said, I think it\'s a really sweet poem. I usually write about love and this is a great one! Thanks!
April 25th, 2022 14:22
Christina8 said:
To add to what everyone else already said, I think it\'s a really sweet poem. I usually write about love and this is a great one! Thanks!
April 25th, 2022 14:22
epitome
MR.apocalypse said:
The distinct feeling between love and puppy love are hard to put in words yet you did it with ease great poem great words great heart
April 25th, 2022 14:06
MR.apocalypse said:
The distinct feeling between love and puppy love are hard to put in words yet you did it with ease great poem great words great heart
April 25th, 2022 14:06
epitome
Crowns4Christ said:
Sweet, definitely hang onto this, like Rocky said, love is a beautiful gift that God has given us
April 25th, 2022 13:23
Crowns4Christ said:
Sweet, definitely hang onto this, like Rocky said, love is a beautiful gift that God has given us
April 25th, 2022 13:23
epitome
Rocky Lagou said:
Quite the epitome, indeed. Feels true and blissful, just hold onto that bond, and try not to let it tie you in knots and tangles.
April 25th, 2022 12:59
Rocky Lagou said:
Quite the epitome, indeed. Feels true and blissful, just hold onto that bond, and try not to let it tie you in knots and tangles.
April 25th, 2022 12:59
up the hill
Crowns4Christ said:
That\'s one way to get out your frustrations and pent up anxiety
April 23rd, 2022 19:15
Crowns4Christ said:
That\'s one way to get out your frustrations and pent up anxiety
April 23rd, 2022 19:15
exposed bones
MR.apocalypse said:
I took in a lot of messages from your poem the person in the poem is trying to find something along the lines of love, comfort, and safety and they dig beneath the scars from the trauma weather its hypothetical or not this poem has a lot of emotions piercing through it keep it up
April 22nd, 2022 14:39
MR.apocalypse said:
I took in a lot of messages from your poem the person in the poem is trying to find something along the lines of love, comfort, and safety and they dig beneath the scars from the trauma weather its hypothetical or not this poem has a lot of emotions piercing through it keep it up
April 22nd, 2022 14:39
starry midnight sky
Rocky Lagou said:
I totally feel this sensation you convey. That line \"only the rain drops gravitating from the roof / to a leaf\" really struck me, probably because of the word you used, \"gravitate,\" that gives these raindrops deeper meaning, but also it helps supports the setting you\'re presenting. It\'s peace.
April 22nd, 2022 09:06
Rocky Lagou said:
I totally feel this sensation you convey. That line \"only the rain drops gravitating from the roof / to a leaf\" really struck me, probably because of the word you used, \"gravitate,\" that gives these raindrops deeper meaning, but also it helps supports the setting you\'re presenting. It\'s peace.
April 22nd, 2022 09:06
cherry flavored chapstick
L. B. Mek said:
your use of that vivid, cherry Chapstick
as anchor
to those two opposing stanzas
is wonderful..
thanks for sharing
April 21st, 2022 03:36
L. B. Mek said:
your use of that vivid, cherry Chapstick
as anchor
to those two opposing stanzas
is wonderful..
thanks for sharing
April 21st, 2022 03:36
cherry flavored chapstick
Crowns4Christ said:
Sometimes these specific memories are difficult to shake, just like a bad habit is hard to break,but I can assure you that you\'re not alone,I\'m here if you ever need a friend
April 20th, 2022 16:32
Crowns4Christ said:
Sometimes these specific memories are difficult to shake, just like a bad habit is hard to break,but I can assure you that you\'re not alone,I\'m here if you ever need a friend
April 20th, 2022 16:32
