Comments received on poems by Dev Parth
My Last Hope
Bobby O said:
Nice content but you use the same subject/verb sentence structure throughout and that detracts from the message
For example , a quick rearrange 2nd stanza
ie;
Conducting this journey we’re on is love
As destiny guides us from above
Through twists and turns
Our Embers burn
Joined until the final dawn
May 6th, 2023 08:38
Bobby O said:
Nice content but you use the same subject/verb sentence structure throughout and that detracts from the message
For example , a quick rearrange 2nd stanza
ie;
Conducting this journey we’re on is love
As destiny guides us from above
Through twists and turns
Our Embers burn
Joined until the final dawn
May 6th, 2023 08:38
Tears in Dev Parth\'s Eyes
Goldfinch60 said:
Fine words Dev, that light in our life is always there for us and brings joy to us all.
Andy
April 29th, 2023 00:27
Goldfinch60 said:
Fine words Dev, that light in our life is always there for us and brings joy to us all.
Andy
April 29th, 2023 00:27
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