Comments received on poems by Dev Parth
Unleashed Fire: The Spirit of Dev Parth
2781 said:
Before destruction the heart of man is haughty, and before honour is humility.
May 20th, 2023 17:11
2781 said:
Before destruction the heart of man is haughty, and before honour is humility.
May 20th, 2023 17:11
I Love You
Debake said:
I loved your poem! and it inspired me to write this one.
May 18th, 2023 10:13
Debake said:
I loved your poem! and it inspired me to write this one.
May 18th, 2023 10:13
I Love You
Debake said:
fingers, hands, and hearts intertwined as one
love so strong, this time he\'s not gonna run
and in turn, she doesn\'t feel the need for self-sabotage
this time it\'s real not hidden, nor camouflaged
they want to grow gray and wrinkled together
to say the cliche I need, or I will love you forever
to pack the kid\'s lunches or to the principal offices
to pack the family up for those church services
time flys and soon enough, those gray hairs arrived
covered up with a hat or some dye, and your age denied
wrinkles here covered up with makeup or existence refused
till in the end, they accept that they are fragile and easily bruised
though time seemed to have passed oh so fast
they did seem to create a love that will last
the deal was sealed with the first young call
they made it work I guess it wasn\'t a cliche after all
May 18th, 2023 10:11
Debake said:
fingers, hands, and hearts intertwined as one
love so strong, this time he\'s not gonna run
and in turn, she doesn\'t feel the need for self-sabotage
this time it\'s real not hidden, nor camouflaged
they want to grow gray and wrinkled together
to say the cliche I need, or I will love you forever
to pack the kid\'s lunches or to the principal offices
to pack the family up for those church services
time flys and soon enough, those gray hairs arrived
covered up with a hat or some dye, and your age denied
wrinkles here covered up with makeup or existence refused
till in the end, they accept that they are fragile and easily bruised
though time seemed to have passed oh so fast
they did seem to create a love that will last
the deal was sealed with the first young call
they made it work I guess it wasn\'t a cliche after all
May 18th, 2023 10:11
Failure Rise Up
2781 said:
Down under they legislate against failure. Not allowing people to make mistakes only dumbs them down. Good advice, cheers.
May 17th, 2023 09:39
2781 said:
Down under they legislate against failure. Not allowing people to make mistakes only dumbs them down. Good advice, cheers.
May 17th, 2023 09:39
Failure Rise Up
Bobby O said:
A stepping stone indeed. “The credit belongs to the man who is actually in the arena …. so that his place shall never be with those cold and timid souls who neither know victory nor defeat.”
…an abridged excerpt from Teddy Roosevelt.
May 17th, 2023 07:58
Bobby O said:
A stepping stone indeed. “The credit belongs to the man who is actually in the arena …. so that his place shall never be with those cold and timid souls who neither know victory nor defeat.”
…an abridged excerpt from Teddy Roosevelt.
May 17th, 2023 07:58
My Earth Looks Like
L. B. Mek said:
\'My Earth is a place of diversity,
A world where all life thrives in unity.\'
great message!
a wonderful read
thanks for sharing
May 12th, 2023 04:14
L. B. Mek said:
\'My Earth is a place of diversity,
A world where all life thrives in unity.\'
great message!
a wonderful read
thanks for sharing
May 12th, 2023 04:14
Love\'s Eternal Symphony
Caring dove said:
This is a beautiful poem )) liked reading this ))
May 10th, 2023 14:39
Caring dove said:
This is a beautiful poem )) liked reading this ))
May 10th, 2023 14:39
School is cinema
L. B. Mek said:
I like your strong resolve
well written, tight editing
thanks for sharing
May 8th, 2023 05:58
L. B. Mek said:
I like your strong resolve
well written, tight editing
thanks for sharing
May 8th, 2023 05:58
My Last Hope
Bobby O said:
Nice content but you use the same subject/verb sentence structure throughout and that detracts from the message
For example , a quick rearrange 2nd stanza
ie;
Conducting this journey we’re on is love
As destiny guides us from above
Through twists and turns
Our Embers burn
Joined until the final dawn
May 6th, 2023 08:38
Bobby O said:
Nice content but you use the same subject/verb sentence structure throughout and that detracts from the message
For example , a quick rearrange 2nd stanza
ie;
Conducting this journey we’re on is love
As destiny guides us from above
Through twists and turns
Our Embers burn
Joined until the final dawn
May 6th, 2023 08:38
Tears in Dev Parth\'s Eyes
Goldfinch60 said:
Fine words Dev, that light in our life is always there for us and brings joy to us all.
Andy
April 29th, 2023 00:27
Goldfinch60 said:
Fine words Dev, that light in our life is always there for us and brings joy to us all.
Andy
April 29th, 2023 00:27
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