Comments received on poems by vividvoid14
poem for a mother
Bobby O said:
Perfect topic and a heartfelt tribute and you can keep this and keep adding and you can hold 96 pages or more of love in your hands.
January 2nd, 2024 23:42
Bobby O said:
Perfect topic and a heartfelt tribute and you can keep this and keep adding and you can hold 96 pages or more of love in your hands.
January 2nd, 2024 23:42
Suicide
Parisab said:
Sometimes it’s a good exercise to bring out what’s on your mind-good to see you fete, Vivid…
January 1st, 2024 23:38
Parisab said:
Sometimes it’s a good exercise to bring out what’s on your mind-good to see you fete, Vivid…
January 1st, 2024 23:38
Don’t judge a book by its cover
Bobby O said:
Your comment about your poem is wise. You mostly did succeed. I won’t repeat anything about the pronouns since you already admitted you didn’t go back to fix things
December 29th, 2023 18:31
Bobby O said:
Your comment about your poem is wise. You mostly did succeed. I won’t repeat anything about the pronouns since you already admitted you didn’t go back to fix things
December 29th, 2023 18:31
Insecurities of your beauty
Bella Shepard said:
Insecurity does need encouragement to find self worth. Beautifully penned!
November 19th, 2023 13:32
Bella Shepard said:
Insecurity does need encouragement to find self worth. Beautifully penned!
November 19th, 2023 13:32
HAPYY!
Parisab said:
I love the spelling you chose for the title “Hapyy” it grabs the attention and brings joy -I would keep that spelling throughout the poem-as for the rest go through your spelling and punctuation and chose them carefully- but what is perfect is your talent and all the Joy and good wisdom you bring-thank you for sharing this special poem and your talent here-asking for comments is brave and smart-all the best, Vivid!
October 20th, 2023 00:42
Parisab said:
I love the spelling you chose for the title “Hapyy” it grabs the attention and brings joy -I would keep that spelling throughout the poem-as for the rest go through your spelling and punctuation and chose them carefully- but what is perfect is your talent and all the Joy and good wisdom you bring-thank you for sharing this special poem and your talent here-asking for comments is brave and smart-all the best, Vivid!
October 20th, 2023 00:42
Burdened Soul
Parisab said:
Vivid, your words are getting stronger and the soul of a poet notices things some others don’t, and that is pressure! I’m proud of this poem…
October 13th, 2023 11:52
Parisab said:
Vivid, your words are getting stronger and the soul of a poet notices things some others don’t, and that is pressure! I’m proud of this poem…
October 13th, 2023 11:52
Burdened Soul
Bobby O said:
I love the invention present here. I also have faith that this pressure will make diamonds that translate to success
October 11th, 2023 06:30
Bobby O said:
I love the invention present here. I also have faith that this pressure will make diamonds that translate to success
October 11th, 2023 06:30
Depressing s
Bobby O said:
This is good. It had “body” and vision and speaks to a great maturity.
October 5th, 2023 01:10
Bobby O said:
This is good. It had “body” and vision and speaks to a great maturity.
October 5th, 2023 01:10
friendly compotision
Bobby O said:
Author author. You need spell check. The tulle of the piece is misspelled
September 24th, 2023 22:30
Bobby O said:
Author author. You need spell check. The tulle of the piece is misspelled
September 24th, 2023 22:30
friendly compotision
vividvoid14 said:
Thanks for the compliments on both sides
September 24th, 2023 22:04
vividvoid14 said:
Thanks for the compliments on both sides
September 24th, 2023 22:04
friendly compotision
Parisab said:
Great job looking for mentorship in an intelligent and culturally sophisticated voice of Bobby O! You’re cool to want to expand your skills in a friendly “competition”
September 24th, 2023 19:27
Parisab said:
Great job looking for mentorship in an intelligent and culturally sophisticated voice of Bobby O! You’re cool to want to expand your skills in a friendly “competition”
September 24th, 2023 19:27
cold heart
Bobby O said:
25 times. Excessive
What’s next , challenging Steph on shooting 3’s?
Abandon all hope all ye that enter here!!
September 24th, 2023 01:04
Bobby O said:
25 times. Excessive
What’s next , challenging Steph on shooting 3’s?
Abandon all hope all ye that enter here!!
September 24th, 2023 01:04
cold heart
Parisab said:
You gots to hit the stage
Already dreamin 24-7
At least you’re not a poser
Already you’re a closer
I’ll be an opener for yo’ show
You’re a genius and I already know
Keep rhyming Vivid and I’ll be a fan…
September 23rd, 2023 20:57
Parisab said:
You gots to hit the stage
Already dreamin 24-7
At least you’re not a poser
Already you’re a closer
I’ll be an opener for yo’ show
You’re a genius and I already know
Keep rhyming Vivid and I’ll be a fan…
September 23rd, 2023 20:57
cold heart
vividvoid14 said:
this is what i ment to post
yeah, yeah, yeah,
i been saying i dont need sleep feels like im already dreaming. everything ive done already saw it in my head
swear its 24-7 that the snakes stay scheaming keep a cold heart ill make friends when im dead
like where were you when i was down bad chilling in the darkness had no one to save me but i did it al reguardless
where were you when i was stuck with all my hardships target on my back so i got to stay heartless
flying privat to island cop a manchine in the hills buying everything i want cuzz i worked for family bout to eat we been crawling out the dirt for it.
i dont care what they been telling me swear imma make it i put that on everything and when i do know my friends are going to carry me. i\'d give up anything
i been saying i dont need sleep feels like im already dreaming. everything ive done already saw it in my head
swear its 24-7 that the snakes stay scheaming keep a cold heart ill make friends when im dead
2023 going exctly how i planed it anxiety been running though my head but i still mange
fighting all my demons till thy drop and it the canvas
you\'ll never understand it
i been doing things you could never even fanisize
i hit the stage then make them come alive
i came along way showing my vision now there seeing
i use to be tearing thought tickets now my life is a move
back in 2016 when i was down in my lunch then i finnaly switch teams and now im brady with the bucks
i got a hand full of rings i could never get enough
i been saying i dont need sleep feels like im already dreaming. everything ive done already saw it in my head
swear its 24-7 that the snakes stay scheaming keep a cold heart ill make friends when im dead
September 23rd, 2023 18:31
vividvoid14 said:
this is what i ment to post
yeah, yeah, yeah,
i been saying i dont need sleep feels like im already dreaming. everything ive done already saw it in my head
swear its 24-7 that the snakes stay scheaming keep a cold heart ill make friends when im dead
like where were you when i was down bad chilling in the darkness had no one to save me but i did it al reguardless
where were you when i was stuck with all my hardships target on my back so i got to stay heartless
flying privat to island cop a manchine in the hills buying everything i want cuzz i worked for family bout to eat we been crawling out the dirt for it.
i dont care what they been telling me swear imma make it i put that on everything and when i do know my friends are going to carry me. i\'d give up anything
i been saying i dont need sleep feels like im already dreaming. everything ive done already saw it in my head
swear its 24-7 that the snakes stay scheaming keep a cold heart ill make friends when im dead
2023 going exctly how i planed it anxiety been running though my head but i still mange
fighting all my demons till thy drop and it the canvas
you\'ll never understand it
i been doing things you could never even fanisize
i hit the stage then make them come alive
i came along way showing my vision now there seeing
i use to be tearing thought tickets now my life is a move
back in 2016 when i was down in my lunch then i finnaly switch teams and now im brady with the bucks
i got a hand full of rings i could never get enough
i been saying i dont need sleep feels like im already dreaming. everything ive done already saw it in my head
swear its 24-7 that the snakes stay scheaming keep a cold heart ill make friends when im dead
September 23rd, 2023 18:31
my ex
Parisab said:
Maybe she is too young and/or not fit for your love! Let your heart’s hurt heal in its own time. Keep writing, Vivid…
September 16th, 2023 17:17
Parisab said:
Maybe she is too young and/or not fit for your love! Let your heart’s hurt heal in its own time. Keep writing, Vivid…
September 16th, 2023 17:17
brothers/sisters
vividvoid14 said:
thank you very much your words are appreciated
September 11th, 2023 18:09
vividvoid14 said:
thank you very much your words are appreciated
September 11th, 2023 18:09
brothers/sisters
AuburnScribbler said:
A brilliant poem about the strength of friendship and guideship of family here vividvoid14, the way I read this, it\'s clear that it\'s most definitely written in the style of a powerful syncopated rap, which I enjoyed very much.
Also, being an older brother myself, I can indeed relate to the content mentioned here.
Bravo, and I hope that all is well.
September 11th, 2023 08:28
AuburnScribbler said:
A brilliant poem about the strength of friendship and guideship of family here vividvoid14, the way I read this, it\'s clear that it\'s most definitely written in the style of a powerful syncopated rap, which I enjoyed very much.
Also, being an older brother myself, I can indeed relate to the content mentioned here.
Bravo, and I hope that all is well.
September 11th, 2023 08:28
change&growth
Bobby O said:
That’s really good. Whoever is helping w your style , please send him my way?
September 8th, 2023 18:45
Bobby O said:
That’s really good. Whoever is helping w your style , please send him my way?
September 8th, 2023 18:45
change&growth
vividvoid14 said:
yes i did mean strings and thank you for your comment glad u enjoyed
September 8th, 2023 14:18
vividvoid14 said:
yes i did mean strings and thank you for your comment glad u enjoyed
September 8th, 2023 14:18
change&growth
Bella Shepard said:
I love \"wind blows over in syllables\" and \"notes hewn in brass and stings\" did you mean strings? Perhaps a little typo. Beautiful analogy throughout.
September 8th, 2023 14:14
Bella Shepard said:
I love \"wind blows over in syllables\" and \"notes hewn in brass and stings\" did you mean strings? Perhaps a little typo. Beautiful analogy throughout.
September 8th, 2023 14:14
heart broken
Bella Shepard said:
You pour out your heart out in this poem, and I feel the intensity of your words leap out at me. You have a remarkable style of your own that is unique, and the talent to use it forcefully. Keep it up my friend, you are going places.
September 7th, 2023 13:36
Bella Shepard said:
You pour out your heart out in this poem, and I feel the intensity of your words leap out at me. You have a remarkable style of your own that is unique, and the talent to use it forcefully. Keep it up my friend, you are going places.
September 7th, 2023 13:36
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