Comments received on poems by vividvoid14
Don’t judge a book by its cover
Bobby O said:
Your comment about your poem is wise. You mostly did succeed. I won’t repeat anything about the pronouns since you already admitted you didn’t go back to fix things
December 29th, 2023 18:31
Bobby O said:
Your comment about your poem is wise. You mostly did succeed. I won’t repeat anything about the pronouns since you already admitted you didn’t go back to fix things
December 29th, 2023 18:31
Insecurities of your beauty
Bella Shepard said:
Insecurity does need encouragement to find self worth. Beautifully penned!
November 19th, 2023 13:32
Bella Shepard said:
Insecurity does need encouragement to find self worth. Beautifully penned!
November 19th, 2023 13:32
HAPYY!
Parisab said:
I love the spelling you chose for the title “Hapyy” it grabs the attention and brings joy -I would keep that spelling throughout the poem-as for the rest go through your spelling and punctuation and chose them carefully- but what is perfect is your talent and all the Joy and good wisdom you bring-thank you for sharing this special poem and your talent here-asking for comments is brave and smart-all the best, Vivid!
October 20th, 2023 00:42
Parisab said:
I love the spelling you chose for the title “Hapyy” it grabs the attention and brings joy -I would keep that spelling throughout the poem-as for the rest go through your spelling and punctuation and chose them carefully- but what is perfect is your talent and all the Joy and good wisdom you bring-thank you for sharing this special poem and your talent here-asking for comments is brave and smart-all the best, Vivid!
October 20th, 2023 00:42
Burdened Soul
Parisab said:
Vivid, your words are getting stronger and the soul of a poet notices things some others don’t, and that is pressure! I’m proud of this poem…
October 13th, 2023 11:52
Parisab said:
Vivid, your words are getting stronger and the soul of a poet notices things some others don’t, and that is pressure! I’m proud of this poem…
October 13th, 2023 11:52
Burdened Soul
Bobby O said:
I love the invention present here. I also have faith that this pressure will make diamonds that translate to success
October 11th, 2023 06:30
Bobby O said:
I love the invention present here. I also have faith that this pressure will make diamonds that translate to success
October 11th, 2023 06:30
Depressing s
Bobby O said:
This is good. It had “body” and vision and speaks to a great maturity.
October 5th, 2023 01:10
Bobby O said:
This is good. It had “body” and vision and speaks to a great maturity.
October 5th, 2023 01:10
friendly compotision
Bobby O said:
Author author. You need spell check. The tulle of the piece is misspelled
September 24th, 2023 22:30
Bobby O said:
Author author. You need spell check. The tulle of the piece is misspelled
September 24th, 2023 22:30
friendly compotision
vividvoid14 said:
Thanks for the compliments on both sides
September 24th, 2023 22:04
vividvoid14 said:
Thanks for the compliments on both sides
September 24th, 2023 22:04
friendly compotision
Parisab said:
Great job looking for mentorship in an intelligent and culturally sophisticated voice of Bobby O! You’re cool to want to expand your skills in a friendly “competition”
September 24th, 2023 19:27
Parisab said:
Great job looking for mentorship in an intelligent and culturally sophisticated voice of Bobby O! You’re cool to want to expand your skills in a friendly “competition”
September 24th, 2023 19:27
cold heart
Bobby O said:
25 times. Excessive
What’s next , challenging Steph on shooting 3’s?
Abandon all hope all ye that enter here!!
September 24th, 2023 01:04
Bobby O said:
25 times. Excessive
What’s next , challenging Steph on shooting 3’s?
Abandon all hope all ye that enter here!!
September 24th, 2023 01:04
cold heart
Parisab said:
You gots to hit the stage
Already dreamin 24-7
At least you’re not a poser
Already you’re a closer
I’ll be an opener for yo’ show
You’re a genius and I already know
Keep rhyming Vivid and I’ll be a fan…
September 23rd, 2023 20:57
Parisab said:
You gots to hit the stage
Already dreamin 24-7
At least you’re not a poser
Already you’re a closer
I’ll be an opener for yo’ show
You’re a genius and I already know
Keep rhyming Vivid and I’ll be a fan…
September 23rd, 2023 20:57
cold heart
vividvoid14 said:
this is what i ment to post
yeah, yeah, yeah,
i been saying i dont need sleep feels like im already dreaming. everything ive done already saw it in my head
swear its 24-7 that the snakes stay scheaming keep a cold heart ill make friends when im dead
like where were you when i was down bad chilling in the darkness had no one to save me but i did it al reguardless
where were you when i was stuck with all my hardships target on my back so i got to stay heartless
flying privat to island cop a manchine in the hills buying everything i want cuzz i worked for family bout to eat we been crawling out the dirt for it.
i dont care what they been telling me swear imma make it i put that on everything and when i do know my friends are going to carry me. i\'d give up anything
i been saying i dont need sleep feels like im already dreaming. everything ive done already saw it in my head
swear its 24-7 that the snakes stay scheaming keep a cold heart ill make friends when im dead
2023 going exctly how i planed it anxiety been running though my head but i still mange
fighting all my demons till thy drop and it the canvas
you\'ll never understand it
i been doing things you could never even fanisize
i hit the stage then make them come alive
i came along way showing my vision now there seeing
i use to be tearing thought tickets now my life is a move
back in 2016 when i was down in my lunch then i finnaly switch teams and now im brady with the bucks
i got a hand full of rings i could never get enough
i been saying i dont need sleep feels like im already dreaming. everything ive done already saw it in my head
swear its 24-7 that the snakes stay scheaming keep a cold heart ill make friends when im dead
September 23rd, 2023 18:31
vividvoid14 said:
this is what i ment to post
yeah, yeah, yeah,
i been saying i dont need sleep feels like im already dreaming. everything ive done already saw it in my head
swear its 24-7 that the snakes stay scheaming keep a cold heart ill make friends when im dead
like where were you when i was down bad chilling in the darkness had no one to save me but i did it al reguardless
where were you when i was stuck with all my hardships target on my back so i got to stay heartless
flying privat to island cop a manchine in the hills buying everything i want cuzz i worked for family bout to eat we been crawling out the dirt for it.
i dont care what they been telling me swear imma make it i put that on everything and when i do know my friends are going to carry me. i\'d give up anything
i been saying i dont need sleep feels like im already dreaming. everything ive done already saw it in my head
swear its 24-7 that the snakes stay scheaming keep a cold heart ill make friends when im dead
2023 going exctly how i planed it anxiety been running though my head but i still mange
fighting all my demons till thy drop and it the canvas
you\'ll never understand it
i been doing things you could never even fanisize
i hit the stage then make them come alive
i came along way showing my vision now there seeing
i use to be tearing thought tickets now my life is a move
back in 2016 when i was down in my lunch then i finnaly switch teams and now im brady with the bucks
i got a hand full of rings i could never get enough
i been saying i dont need sleep feels like im already dreaming. everything ive done already saw it in my head
swear its 24-7 that the snakes stay scheaming keep a cold heart ill make friends when im dead
September 23rd, 2023 18:31
my ex
Parisab said:
Maybe she is too young and/or not fit for your love! Let your heart’s hurt heal in its own time. Keep writing, Vivid…
September 16th, 2023 17:17
Parisab said:
Maybe she is too young and/or not fit for your love! Let your heart’s hurt heal in its own time. Keep writing, Vivid…
September 16th, 2023 17:17
brothers/sisters
vividvoid14 said:
thank you very much your words are appreciated
September 11th, 2023 18:09
vividvoid14 said:
thank you very much your words are appreciated
September 11th, 2023 18:09
brothers/sisters
AuburnScribbler said:
A brilliant poem about the strength of friendship and guideship of family here vividvoid14, the way I read this, it\'s clear that it\'s most definitely written in the style of a powerful syncopated rap, which I enjoyed very much.
Also, being an older brother myself, I can indeed relate to the content mentioned here.
Bravo, and I hope that all is well.
September 11th, 2023 08:28
AuburnScribbler said:
A brilliant poem about the strength of friendship and guideship of family here vividvoid14, the way I read this, it\'s clear that it\'s most definitely written in the style of a powerful syncopated rap, which I enjoyed very much.
Also, being an older brother myself, I can indeed relate to the content mentioned here.
Bravo, and I hope that all is well.
September 11th, 2023 08:28
change&growth
Bobby O said:
That’s really good. Whoever is helping w your style , please send him my way?
September 8th, 2023 18:45
Bobby O said:
That’s really good. Whoever is helping w your style , please send him my way?
September 8th, 2023 18:45
change&growth
vividvoid14 said:
yes i did mean strings and thank you for your comment glad u enjoyed
September 8th, 2023 14:18
vividvoid14 said:
yes i did mean strings and thank you for your comment glad u enjoyed
September 8th, 2023 14:18
change&growth
Bella Shepard said:
I love \"wind blows over in syllables\" and \"notes hewn in brass and stings\" did you mean strings? Perhaps a little typo. Beautiful analogy throughout.
September 8th, 2023 14:14
Bella Shepard said:
I love \"wind blows over in syllables\" and \"notes hewn in brass and stings\" did you mean strings? Perhaps a little typo. Beautiful analogy throughout.
September 8th, 2023 14:14
heart broken
Bella Shepard said:
You pour out your heart out in this poem, and I feel the intensity of your words leap out at me. You have a remarkable style of your own that is unique, and the talent to use it forcefully. Keep it up my friend, you are going places.
September 7th, 2023 13:36
Bella Shepard said:
You pour out your heart out in this poem, and I feel the intensity of your words leap out at me. You have a remarkable style of your own that is unique, and the talent to use it forcefully. Keep it up my friend, you are going places.
September 7th, 2023 13:36
heart broken
Parisab said:
I am so glad that you write about all kinds of emotions such as pride, joy, and even isolation. Life is a source of inspiration, take your time and look at the whole picture. Hope is your fuel each day. Your poetry at your age (and beyond) is special, poet friend…
September 7th, 2023 10:06
Parisab said:
I am so glad that you write about all kinds of emotions such as pride, joy, and even isolation. Life is a source of inspiration, take your time and look at the whole picture. Hope is your fuel each day. Your poetry at your age (and beyond) is special, poet friend…
September 7th, 2023 10:06
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