Comments received on poems by vividvoid14
Root to my issues
Bella Shepard said:
I think it is cathartic, I think it is self realization, I think it is maturity and growth, I think it is defining who you as a person and not being defined by the past. I think you are brave and fine my friend, add to that a very good write!
May 29th, 2024 14:35
Bella Shepard said:
I think it is cathartic, I think it is self realization, I think it is maturity and growth, I think it is defining who you as a person and not being defined by the past. I think you are brave and fine my friend, add to that a very good write!
May 29th, 2024 14:35
Root to my issues
Bobby O said:
That’s powerful. Excellent variance in phrasing promotes action and draws reader in. You come a long way and when I was rough you took it and turned it into strength.
May 29th, 2024 10:52
Bobby O said:
That’s powerful. Excellent variance in phrasing promotes action and draws reader in. You come a long way and when I was rough you took it and turned it into strength.
May 29th, 2024 10:52
Life cycle
vividvoid14 said:
Thanks for your support. My mothers still present in my life. The poems about a baby bird
May 2nd, 2024 23:52
vividvoid14 said:
Thanks for your support. My mothers still present in my life. The poems about a baby bird
May 2nd, 2024 23:52
Life cycle
Cassie58 said:
Out of ashes …. stick with it. It’s possible to make a bright future even when you have had a rotten start. Don’t let a mother who abandoned you define your life. Your poem spoke to me. I have grandchildren who were abandoned by their mother. Pleased I stopped by.
May 2nd, 2024 23:24
Cassie58 said:
Out of ashes …. stick with it. It’s possible to make a bright future even when you have had a rotten start. Don’t let a mother who abandoned you define your life. Your poem spoke to me. I have grandchildren who were abandoned by their mother. Pleased I stopped by.
May 2nd, 2024 23:24
Life cycle
vividvoid14 said:
Thanks! Although I\'m not sure what \" 500 to your 8th\" means
May 2nd, 2024 11:40
vividvoid14 said:
Thanks! Although I\'m not sure what \" 500 to your 8th\" means
May 2nd, 2024 11:40
Life cycle
Jesse G. said:
We reflect our parents mistakes, and just when we give up we pour our hearts out, I see you! And I know you contain the strength, 500 at your 80th, continue to burn with wisdom. Never quit
May 2nd, 2024 09:47
Jesse G. said:
We reflect our parents mistakes, and just when we give up we pour our hearts out, I see you! And I know you contain the strength, 500 at your 80th, continue to burn with wisdom. Never quit
May 2nd, 2024 09:47
just another sadness
Bobby O said:
Strategies. With your permission I’d like to dig into points of origin and see if part of the core impetus here that spends that effort painting a certain theme could be set aside so we could examine points of beneficial focus.
March 27th, 2024 20:18
Bobby O said:
Strategies. With your permission I’d like to dig into points of origin and see if part of the core impetus here that spends that effort painting a certain theme could be set aside so we could examine points of beneficial focus.
March 27th, 2024 20:18
cristal my angel
Bobby O said:
Dude, that’s a good piece. It’s gratifying to the strength in your prose. I’m really happy for you. grasshopper.
March 21st, 2024 06:49
Bobby O said:
Dude, that’s a good piece. It’s gratifying to the strength in your prose. I’m really happy for you. grasshopper.
March 21st, 2024 06:49
cristal my angel
Bragee said:
Sounds like she is the type of woman everyone needs!
March 19th, 2024 23:32
Bragee said:
Sounds like she is the type of woman everyone needs!
March 19th, 2024 23:32
lost one
Bobby O said:
That’s nice. It’s honest and to an exact point. Nice job
March 13th, 2024 04:05
Bobby O said:
That’s nice. It’s honest and to an exact point. Nice job
March 13th, 2024 04:05
bad boy
Parisab said:
Looks like this “baddie” has grit like the poem…you are describing the character in an interesting way and there’s so much more to this “bad boy” so it makes one wanting to read on …
March 11th, 2024 19:35
Parisab said:
Looks like this “baddie” has grit like the poem…you are describing the character in an interesting way and there’s so much more to this “bad boy” so it makes one wanting to read on …
March 11th, 2024 19:35
bad boy
Bobby O said:
Nice. Maybe kick that ending up a notch
People see the truth is just a technicality, so why not for me to decide what all should see a shell of conveys true hell lookin like omnipotent baddie
March 9th, 2024 21:50
Bobby O said:
Nice. Maybe kick that ending up a notch
People see the truth is just a technicality, so why not for me to decide what all should see a shell of conveys true hell lookin like omnipotent baddie
March 9th, 2024 21:50
bad boy
Cassie58 said:
A hard nut exterior with a soft centre, usually comes as a result of past hurts. Building walls to protect against future sharps. How wonderful it is when those walks crumble and you get to know and feel the real personality . Sunny days so much nicer than cloudy ones. Bad boy has a great guy hiding inside. I enjoyed reading you.
March 8th, 2024 23:17
Cassie58 said:
A hard nut exterior with a soft centre, usually comes as a result of past hurts. Building walls to protect against future sharps. How wonderful it is when those walks crumble and you get to know and feel the real personality . Sunny days so much nicer than cloudy ones. Bad boy has a great guy hiding inside. I enjoyed reading you.
March 8th, 2024 23:17
even if I lose my soul
Bobby O said:
Is it more of an admission or an announcement?
March 5th, 2024 19:29
Bobby O said:
Is it more of an admission or an announcement?
March 5th, 2024 19:29
cant block the sun
Cassie58 said:
May you always see the stars on the darkest nights. Depression sucks. I hear you vividvoid14.
March 3rd, 2024 03:07
Cassie58 said:
May you always see the stars on the darkest nights. Depression sucks. I hear you vividvoid14.
March 3rd, 2024 03:07
cant block the sun
Bobby O said:
I like the writing we gotta get you off the subject matter though cause you said all you can and this way and this subject, let’s just start a couple of women that you’re gonna find in cajole
March 2nd, 2024 22:53
Bobby O said:
I like the writing we gotta get you off the subject matter though cause you said all you can and this way and this subject, let’s just start a couple of women that you’re gonna find in cajole
March 2nd, 2024 22:53
my reality
Parisab said:
His poetry crew see that
His words still jam!
(Maybe the last two lines?)
March 1st, 2024 18:01
Parisab said:
His poetry crew see that
His words still jam!
(Maybe the last two lines?)
March 1st, 2024 18:01
my reality
Parisab said:
“this smile to me its just arts and crafts”
Brilliant line, describing faking to look ok, even though it takes hard work and artistry..
Tho the witch ain’t gone
The witchcraft is done
Don’t ya’ll hate masks
Now Vivid is the speed master
Now his magic is to move on
No more harmed or harmin’
His poetry crew see to it
That he knows he’s all that!
He he, see you made me flow too early in the morning, be well and keep writing !
March 1st, 2024 11:55
Parisab said:
“this smile to me its just arts and crafts”
Brilliant line, describing faking to look ok, even though it takes hard work and artistry..
Tho the witch ain’t gone
The witchcraft is done
Don’t ya’ll hate masks
Now Vivid is the speed master
Now his magic is to move on
No more harmed or harmin’
His poetry crew see to it
That he knows he’s all that!
He he, see you made me flow too early in the morning, be well and keep writing !
March 1st, 2024 11:55
my reality
Bobby O said:
The witch fits perfect but then you quit applying that magic. For instance this line- now I want you to look at it like it’s a naked girl waiting to be ravaged for fun fun but instead you leave it and do nothing. Now I’m a little peeves. After you read this line, which I’m going to print out in a second no forever never leave a fucking line that way is sitting there waiting for knockout for home run and you just left it like with no effort and you keep doing it I don’t keep telling you you don’t know how to look back at what you wrote and say Ollie I need to fix this now by now you gotta know it you gotta look at this shit you write different you gotta go back and think I gotta fix some stuff and you don’t do that yet you have to do that OK here’s the line
persona
i know im sad even when i smile even when i laugh
March 1st, 2024 00:01
Bobby O said:
The witch fits perfect but then you quit applying that magic. For instance this line- now I want you to look at it like it’s a naked girl waiting to be ravaged for fun fun but instead you leave it and do nothing. Now I’m a little peeves. After you read this line, which I’m going to print out in a second no forever never leave a fucking line that way is sitting there waiting for knockout for home run and you just left it like with no effort and you keep doing it I don’t keep telling you you don’t know how to look back at what you wrote and say Ollie I need to fix this now by now you gotta know it you gotta look at this shit you write different you gotta go back and think I gotta fix some stuff and you don’t do that yet you have to do that OK here’s the line
persona
i know im sad even when i smile even when i laugh
March 1st, 2024 00:01
closed door
Cassie58 said:
The upsets in life do make us stronger, though at the time that can be difficult to accept. Keep writing and reading a lot of poetry. That is the best way to learn. I didn’t write my first poem until I was forty. Have s great day.
February 27th, 2024 10:43
Cassie58 said:
The upsets in life do make us stronger, though at the time that can be difficult to accept. Keep writing and reading a lot of poetry. That is the best way to learn. I didn’t write my first poem until I was forty. Have s great day.
February 27th, 2024 10:43
closed door
Bobby O said:
I like the content but it’s just statements. Poetry needs to be alive w comparison , draw the reader’s mind to a recognizable image and draw them to it. Like the “tears” lines
Fighting back tears but they broke free slowly then my cheek felt a stampede as my eyes surrendered to my sadness ,
In other words create an image of crying , font Judy say you cried. Yiu should know ski that by now. You’re talking in love with your ideas and forgetting to improve concepts. Sentences are biting. The whole thing needs a to rewritten.
February 27th, 2024 01:14
Bobby O said:
I like the content but it’s just statements. Poetry needs to be alive w comparison , draw the reader’s mind to a recognizable image and draw them to it. Like the “tears” lines
Fighting back tears but they broke free slowly then my cheek felt a stampede as my eyes surrendered to my sadness ,
In other words create an image of crying , font Judy say you cried. Yiu should know ski that by now. You’re talking in love with your ideas and forgetting to improve concepts. Sentences are biting. The whole thing needs a to rewritten.
February 27th, 2024 01:14
lovely sight
Parisab said:
Your words light a candle to face the dark. Ignorance is the weapon of evil, so keep writing and be kind to yourself. Side note I like some of the anime work too, except when has hidden clues to encourage self harm or hurting others. Bet if you look closely you’ll see them. Consume it like art, but nothing more, my poetic friend.
February 25th, 2024 11:27
Parisab said:
Your words light a candle to face the dark. Ignorance is the weapon of evil, so keep writing and be kind to yourself. Side note I like some of the anime work too, except when has hidden clues to encourage self harm or hurting others. Bet if you look closely you’ll see them. Consume it like art, but nothing more, my poetic friend.
February 25th, 2024 11:27
i miss you my dear friend
Cassie58 said:
Your pain was truly felt by this reader. I hope you are able to salvage your friendship with mia and your other friends. Your detailed write was touching.
February 25th, 2024 00:17
Cassie58 said:
Your pain was truly felt by this reader. I hope you are able to salvage your friendship with mia and your other friends. Your detailed write was touching.
February 25th, 2024 00:17
fusion poem
Parisab said:
Good job, I’ll join like this:
“Burning the Demon” of fear,
Vivid words win, over pain
Freezing ney saying evil,
he’ll win, be it, sun or rain.
February 16th, 2024 20:13
Parisab said:
Good job, I’ll join like this:
“Burning the Demon” of fear,
Vivid words win, over pain
Freezing ney saying evil,
he’ll win, be it, sun or rain.
February 16th, 2024 20:13
fusion poem
Parisab said:
Hey Vivid, to start your fusioned poem go to your public profile and stroll down to Start a poem on Fusioned Poem section
February 16th, 2024 18:04
Parisab said:
Hey Vivid, to start your fusioned poem go to your public profile and stroll down to Start a poem on Fusioned Poem section
February 16th, 2024 18:04
fusion poem
NinjaGirl said:
its not working i want to participate tho so if you figure it out lmk
February 16th, 2024 10:59
NinjaGirl said:
its not working i want to participate tho so if you figure it out lmk
February 16th, 2024 10:59
till the day i die
Parisab said:
Great symbolism of the beehive to describe dangerously bitter thoughts. Our racing minds can sting and make our life situation sticky. I like this concept and can’t wait to hear about when the honey turns sweet. Keep writing Vivid, but don’t forget to dance, talented one!
February 16th, 2024 01:02
Parisab said:
Great symbolism of the beehive to describe dangerously bitter thoughts. Our racing minds can sting and make our life situation sticky. I like this concept and can’t wait to hear about when the honey turns sweet. Keep writing Vivid, but don’t forget to dance, talented one!
February 16th, 2024 01:02
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