Comments received on poems by Lorenz
Ostend souls
L. B. Mek said:
ok I related to your words
enough to overcome my distaste
for that unseemly word \'moist\'
nothing else can express
how much i enjoyed reading your Poem
thank you!
September 4th, 2023 05:58
L. B. Mek said:
ok I related to your words
enough to overcome my distaste
for that unseemly word \'moist\'
nothing else can express
how much i enjoyed reading your Poem
thank you!
September 4th, 2023 05:58
Clouds
Gibran Banhakeia said:
Analysis:
The poem Clouds in the Sky of Nova Scotia explores the transient and fleeting nature of clouds against the backdrop of the vastness of the sky. The clouds areified as messengers, drawing imaginary continents and symbolizing the remnants of past and broken loves. These clouds serve as a reminder of the pettiness of human concerns in comparison to the immensity of the world around. The poet describes the clouds as yawning mouths of illusions and \"fluid smiles,\" suggesting a sense of ambiguity and shifting nature. The \"rainy silence\" further emphasizes the ephemeral nature of the clouds. The clouds are depicted as woolly ramblers passing through dreams and drama, suggesting their unpredictable movement and their ability to evoke different emotions and thoughts in the observer\'s mind. The poet also refers to them as \"enigmatic herd\" and \"impassible Buddhas,\" conveying a sense of mystery and wisdom associated with these natural phenomena. The poem poses a rhetorical question about the clouds\' destination, highlighting their inscrutability and enigmatic nature. The clouds are described as on their \"last journey to the midnight of the worlds,\" which could be interpreted as a metaphor for the end of life or the unknown realms beyond our world. The poet hints at a personal connection with the clouds, suggesting that they are slowly attracting them towards the end. This could be interpreted as a reflection on mortality and the existential contemplation that arises when confronted with the transience of life. The final line, Clouds vanishing in the sky of Nova Scotia, brings a sense of finality and closure to the poem, reinforcing the ephemeral nature of the clouds and the fleeting moments they represent.
Gibran Bn
September 3rd, 2023 22:32
Gibran Banhakeia said:
Analysis:
The poem Clouds in the Sky of Nova Scotia explores the transient and fleeting nature of clouds against the backdrop of the vastness of the sky. The clouds areified as messengers, drawing imaginary continents and symbolizing the remnants of past and broken loves. These clouds serve as a reminder of the pettiness of human concerns in comparison to the immensity of the world around. The poet describes the clouds as yawning mouths of illusions and \"fluid smiles,\" suggesting a sense of ambiguity and shifting nature. The \"rainy silence\" further emphasizes the ephemeral nature of the clouds. The clouds are depicted as woolly ramblers passing through dreams and drama, suggesting their unpredictable movement and their ability to evoke different emotions and thoughts in the observer\'s mind. The poet also refers to them as \"enigmatic herd\" and \"impassible Buddhas,\" conveying a sense of mystery and wisdom associated with these natural phenomena. The poem poses a rhetorical question about the clouds\' destination, highlighting their inscrutability and enigmatic nature. The clouds are described as on their \"last journey to the midnight of the worlds,\" which could be interpreted as a metaphor for the end of life or the unknown realms beyond our world. The poet hints at a personal connection with the clouds, suggesting that they are slowly attracting them towards the end. This could be interpreted as a reflection on mortality and the existential contemplation that arises when confronted with the transience of life. The final line, Clouds vanishing in the sky of Nova Scotia, brings a sense of finality and closure to the poem, reinforcing the ephemeral nature of the clouds and the fleeting moments they represent.
Gibran Bn
September 3rd, 2023 22:32
The sea of trees
aDarkerMind said:
impressive stuff here. the more i read it the better it gets.
September 3rd, 2023 15:43
aDarkerMind said:
impressive stuff here. the more i read it the better it gets.
September 3rd, 2023 15:43
Clouds
L. B. Mek said:
transformative vividity, utilising
such majestic imagery
a throwback thread to a Time, stolen
by tyrannical greed
still, we\'re gifted a glimpse
in a passing cloud or two
and the hills, still remember
those galloping drums
we just have to be ready
for when that gust of wind
offers us a sample of what was
once...
(thanks for sharing)
September 1st, 2023 05:35
L. B. Mek said:
transformative vividity, utilising
such majestic imagery
a throwback thread to a Time, stolen
by tyrannical greed
still, we\'re gifted a glimpse
in a passing cloud or two
and the hills, still remember
those galloping drums
we just have to be ready
for when that gust of wind
offers us a sample of what was
once...
(thanks for sharing)
September 1st, 2023 05:35
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