Comments received on poems by Lorenz
Alemanic melancholy
Ellen Marsell said:
The poem feels like a bitter and precise diagonal cut through modernity. The satire, the metaphors, the cultural allusions - everything strikes directly at a deep inner nerve.
November 15th, 2025 14:13
Ellen Marsell said:
The poem feels like a bitter and precise diagonal cut through modernity. The satire, the metaphors, the cultural allusions - everything strikes directly at a deep inner nerve.
November 15th, 2025 14:13
Alemanic melancholy
sorenbarrett said:
Siegfried\'s Rhine journey is one answer but I prefer the Pilgrim\'s chorus.
November 15th, 2025 13:07
sorenbarrett said:
Siegfried\'s Rhine journey is one answer but I prefer the Pilgrim\'s chorus.
November 15th, 2025 13:07
Beatrice
Ellen Marsell said:
It feels like a letter written by someone wandering through the ruins of their own soul, touching the stones with their fingers, recognizing them, and smiling with sadness. There is remorse here, and tenderness, and that quiet acceptance that comes only after a great inner shipwreck. A very delicate, touching poem with profound psychological depth.
November 14th, 2025 14:51
Ellen Marsell said:
It feels like a letter written by someone wandering through the ruins of their own soul, touching the stones with their fingers, recognizing them, and smiling with sadness. There is remorse here, and tenderness, and that quiet acceptance that comes only after a great inner shipwreck. A very delicate, touching poem with profound psychological depth.
November 14th, 2025 14:51
Beatrice
sorenbarrett said:
(wireless thightrope walker ,
trying to escape a webless spider ...) A great set of lines. The surreal nature of this poem is most enthralling.
November 14th, 2025 12:35
sorenbarrett said:
(wireless thightrope walker ,
trying to escape a webless spider ...) A great set of lines. The surreal nature of this poem is most enthralling.
November 14th, 2025 12:35
Dry guillotine
NinjaGirl said:
Very truthful poem, I find the morality of most to be so corrupted
November 13th, 2025 14:22
NinjaGirl said:
Very truthful poem, I find the morality of most to be so corrupted
November 13th, 2025 14:22
Dry guillotine
sorenbarrett said:
Rebellion rules everywhere but where it should. Anger is a precursor to tears of shame, Lepers do have beautiful people if you look on the inside. A good read
November 13th, 2025 13:54
sorenbarrett said:
Rebellion rules everywhere but where it should. Anger is a precursor to tears of shame, Lepers do have beautiful people if you look on the inside. A good read
November 13th, 2025 13:54
Dry guillotine
Ellen Marsell said:
The human within us can survive only through the ability to feel pain and to see the truth within it.
A deeply moving poem, Lorenz.
November 13th, 2025 13:23
Ellen Marsell said:
The human within us can survive only through the ability to feel pain and to see the truth within it.
A deeply moving poem, Lorenz.
November 13th, 2025 13:23
Bipolar metaverse
Ellen Marsell said:
Genius and madness are the two wings of the same being.
November 12th, 2025 13:40
Ellen Marsell said:
Genius and madness are the two wings of the same being.
November 12th, 2025 13:40
Bipolar metaverse
sorenbarrett said:
To be a true artist one must be mad for no normal person can see the depths of beauty. One must suffer to express the exquisite. A lovely write Lorenz
November 12th, 2025 12:07
sorenbarrett said:
To be a true artist one must be mad for no normal person can see the depths of beauty. One must suffer to express the exquisite. A lovely write Lorenz
November 12th, 2025 12:07
@.Organ
sorenbarrett said:
Ah the organ, penis or pianist I take it a god at any rate and leader of the party. Part of political machinery in which one is a cog. Another surrealistic write and well done Lorenz.
November 11th, 2025 14:55
sorenbarrett said:
Ah the organ, penis or pianist I take it a god at any rate and leader of the party. Part of political machinery in which one is a cog. Another surrealistic write and well done Lorenz.
November 11th, 2025 14:55
@.Organ
Ellen Marsell said:
There is a prophet’s irony running through the text, foretelling an age to come.
A strikingly precise and coldly beautiful vision of a civilization that elevates its own submission to the rank of religion.
November 11th, 2025 13:37
Ellen Marsell said:
There is a prophet’s irony running through the text, foretelling an age to come.
A strikingly precise and coldly beautiful vision of a civilization that elevates its own submission to the rank of religion.
November 11th, 2025 13:37
Sweet urban depression
NafisaSB said:
is it still depression, or do i see a ray of hope at the end?
November 10th, 2025 23:39
NafisaSB said:
is it still depression, or do i see a ray of hope at the end?
November 10th, 2025 23:39
The black sun of melancholy
Ellen Marsell said:
A twilight dressed in verse.
A magnetic atmosphere where melancholy turns into matter, cosmology, and the very space of poetic experience.
Profoundly philosophical and beautifully written.
November 10th, 2025 13:07
Ellen Marsell said:
A twilight dressed in verse.
A magnetic atmosphere where melancholy turns into matter, cosmology, and the very space of poetic experience.
Profoundly philosophical and beautifully written.
November 10th, 2025 13:07
The black sun of melancholy
sorenbarrett said:
It is amazing how this poem begins with a sense of metaphorical reality that dissolves into the mists of surreal and cryptic images barely intelligible. There is a stream of logic to the illogical a drift from reality (whatever that may be) to free floating associations with no key, locked in the mind of the creator. It is very nicely crafted. A fave
November 10th, 2025 11:56
sorenbarrett said:
It is amazing how this poem begins with a sense of metaphorical reality that dissolves into the mists of surreal and cryptic images barely intelligible. There is a stream of logic to the illogical a drift from reality (whatever that may be) to free floating associations with no key, locked in the mind of the creator. It is very nicely crafted. A fave
November 10th, 2025 11:56
The black sun of melancholy
NafisaSB said:
A haunting and lyrical poem. Loved it
November 10th, 2025 11:43
NafisaSB said:
A haunting and lyrical poem. Loved it
November 10th, 2025 11:43
Despair island
sorenbarrett said:
A siren\'s trade in this poem. Very satisfying since I always loved sirens whether in myth or life. Nicely done Lorenz
November 8th, 2025 12:52
sorenbarrett said:
A siren\'s trade in this poem. Very satisfying since I always loved sirens whether in myth or life. Nicely done Lorenz
November 8th, 2025 12:52
Despair island
Ellen Marsell said:
Without light, without salvation yet with the dignity of a madman who stares into the abyss and does not look away.
A gothic poem. Epic in tone. Absolutely love it.
November 8th, 2025 12:37
Ellen Marsell said:
Without light, without salvation yet with the dignity of a madman who stares into the abyss and does not look away.
A gothic poem. Epic in tone. Absolutely love it.
November 8th, 2025 12:37
Matrix
sorenbarrett said:
Here the cow jumped over the moon but never said where she landed. The dog star barked to see such a sport and Saturn looks like a dish with a meat ball, hell knows what happened to the spoon. A cosmic poem of epic proportions Lorenz.
November 6th, 2025 13:57
sorenbarrett said:
Here the cow jumped over the moon but never said where she landed. The dog star barked to see such a sport and Saturn looks like a dish with a meat ball, hell knows what happened to the spoon. A cosmic poem of epic proportions Lorenz.
November 6th, 2025 13:57
Matrix
Ellen Marsell said:
A cosmic confession of a mind that has survived disintegration and found in it the source of poetry.
November 6th, 2025 13:22
Ellen Marsell said:
A cosmic confession of a mind that has survived disintegration and found in it the source of poetry.
November 6th, 2025 13:22
Sweet urban depression
Priya Tomar said:
Romanticization of sorrow !
Nicely done .
November 4th, 2025 22:52
Priya Tomar said:
Romanticization of sorrow !
Nicely done .
November 4th, 2025 22:52
Sweet urban depression
NinjaGirl said:
This is such a powerful poem, and I love the Peter Pan allusion. On a side note the contrast between your profile picture and the image used on the poem made me smile--two very different time periods!
November 4th, 2025 16:48
NinjaGirl said:
This is such a powerful poem, and I love the Peter Pan allusion. On a side note the contrast between your profile picture and the image used on the poem made me smile--two very different time periods!
November 4th, 2025 16:48
Sweet urban depression
Ellen Marsell said:
\"In the depth of winter, I finally learned that within me there lay an invincible summer.\" — Albert Camus
November 4th, 2025 13:55
Ellen Marsell said:
\"In the depth of winter, I finally learned that within me there lay an invincible summer.\" — Albert Camus
November 4th, 2025 13:55
Sweet urban depression
sorenbarrett said:
Lorenz this sounds like the beginning of a noir novel maybe Sin City. The echoes of machinery in the background of a dark foggy night. Well done
November 4th, 2025 11:58
sorenbarrett said:
Lorenz this sounds like the beginning of a noir novel maybe Sin City. The echoes of machinery in the background of a dark foggy night. Well done
November 4th, 2025 11:58
Madame la Mort
NafisaSB said:
oh yes - she reaches out and grabs everyone either by making a thumping entry..or lurking up unawares
November 4th, 2025 03:15
NafisaSB said:
oh yes - she reaches out and grabs everyone either by making a thumping entry..or lurking up unawares
November 4th, 2025 03:15
Shipwreck
Ellen Marsell said:
A masterpiece of inner storm and lyrical power.
November 2nd, 2025 13:13
Ellen Marsell said:
A masterpiece of inner storm and lyrical power.
November 2nd, 2025 13:13
Shipwreck
sorenbarrett said:
The key word for me was unsane where most would use insane I agree with you a better word is unsane. So much mention of madness and the crazy in this poem the mermaid a siren convincing one that they are the master of tides. Megalomania runs ramped in these waters. A good read my friend.
November 2nd, 2025 12:52
sorenbarrett said:
The key word for me was unsane where most would use insane I agree with you a better word is unsane. So much mention of madness and the crazy in this poem the mermaid a siren convincing one that they are the master of tides. Megalomania runs ramped in these waters. A good read my friend.
November 2nd, 2025 12:52
Sirius
Ellen Marsell said:
An inspiring journey into the depths of consciousness and the universe!
October 31st, 2025 14:24
Ellen Marsell said:
An inspiring journey into the depths of consciousness and the universe!
October 31st, 2025 14:24
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