Comments received on poems by 𝓱𝓪𝔂𝓵𝓮𝓲𝓰𝓱
Untouchable, Unlovable
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Reading this, I felt the pull between desire and inability…the kind of tension that doesn’t shout but presses into the chest. You’ve captured that inner bind beautifully. A fave from me, my friend.🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 21st, 2025 13:18
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Reading this, I felt the pull between desire and inability…the kind of tension that doesn’t shout but presses into the chest. You’ve captured that inner bind beautifully. A fave from me, my friend.🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 21st, 2025 13:18
Untouchable, Unlovable
sorenbarrett said:
Love is more than just a word although society treats it as such. A lovely poem
August 21st, 2025 13:05
sorenbarrett said:
Love is more than just a word although society treats it as such. A lovely poem
August 21st, 2025 13:05
Sculpture
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Wow! That line “if fear is the heart of love, you are most terrifying” really struck me. Love as awe and tremor...captured perfectly, imho. Strong writing, Hayleigh. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🦇🐦⬛
August 20th, 2025 19:51
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Wow! That line “if fear is the heart of love, you are most terrifying” really struck me. Love as awe and tremor...captured perfectly, imho. Strong writing, Hayleigh. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🦇🐦⬛
August 20th, 2025 19:51
Sculpture
sorenbarrett said:
This poem presents uncommon parings in metaphor that require a bit of thought. The serial presentation of sequential metaphors give them more sense and present love in a most uncommon manner. Nicely done
August 20th, 2025 03:53
sorenbarrett said:
This poem presents uncommon parings in metaphor that require a bit of thought. The serial presentation of sequential metaphors give them more sense and present love in a most uncommon manner. Nicely done
August 20th, 2025 03:53
Anthem for the Apocalypse
NafisaSB said:
this is such a serious subject - well defined..
August 20th, 2025 02:39
NafisaSB said:
this is such a serious subject - well defined..
August 20th, 2025 02:39
Blood in the Snow
NafisaSB said:
trying to interpret - and hoping it\'s just for fun indeed...
August 20th, 2025 01:25
NafisaSB said:
trying to interpret - and hoping it\'s just for fun indeed...
August 20th, 2025 01:25
Missing Persons Report
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Beautifully crafted, Hayleigh. The stillness is unnerving…each line folding in like a curtain over light. The decay isn’t shouted, it just settles heavy. Powerful piece. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛ A fave.
August 19th, 2025 07:09
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Beautifully crafted, Hayleigh. The stillness is unnerving…each line folding in like a curtain over light. The decay isn’t shouted, it just settles heavy. Powerful piece. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛ A fave.
August 19th, 2025 07:09
Missing Persons Report
sorenbarrett said:
A sense of darkness and decay mentioned here. Well done
August 18th, 2025 09:22
sorenbarrett said:
A sense of darkness and decay mentioned here. Well done
August 18th, 2025 09:22
Finally Numb
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Another raw and unflinching poem, Hayleigh, which you know I love…you’ve poured it all straight onto the page without filter. The scars, the questions, the surrender...it all lands with a stark honesty that’s hard to ignore. Powerfully expressed, my friend. My type of poetry for sure! And amen to your note, as well. Very heartfelt! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 17th, 2025 07:20
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Another raw and unflinching poem, Hayleigh, which you know I love…you’ve poured it all straight onto the page without filter. The scars, the questions, the surrender...it all lands with a stark honesty that’s hard to ignore. Powerfully expressed, my friend. My type of poetry for sure! And amen to your note, as well. Very heartfelt! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 17th, 2025 07:20
Bye, Honey!
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Now this is a master class Senryu, Hayleigh and I don\'t say that lightly. Haiku-like in structure (5-7-5) and, instead of a nature or seasonal focus (haiku), it’s centered on human behavior/emotion, irony, and wit...the humor of a fridge left open, the accusation, and then the shrugging “it’s only spilt milk.” Perfection, my dear friend. This is a fave from me just on nailing the senryu alone, let alone its meaning. Powerful stuff! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 17th, 2025 07:14
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Now this is a master class Senryu, Hayleigh and I don\'t say that lightly. Haiku-like in structure (5-7-5) and, instead of a nature or seasonal focus (haiku), it’s centered on human behavior/emotion, irony, and wit...the humor of a fridge left open, the accusation, and then the shrugging “it’s only spilt milk.” Perfection, my dear friend. This is a fave from me just on nailing the senryu alone, let alone its meaning. Powerful stuff! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 17th, 2025 07:14
Finally Numb
Poetic Licence said:
A passionate write of the pain of feeling unimportant and undervalued and they have just had enough of it , nicely expressed and written
August 17th, 2025 04:47
Poetic Licence said:
A passionate write of the pain of feeling unimportant and undervalued and they have just had enough of it , nicely expressed and written
August 17th, 2025 04:47
Finally Numb
sorenbarrett said:
There is such pain in this poem and a feeling of insignificance and unimportance. A heartfelt write
August 17th, 2025 04:42
sorenbarrett said:
There is such pain in this poem and a feeling of insignificance and unimportance. A heartfelt write
August 17th, 2025 04:42
Bye, Honey!
Demar Desu said:
Can you explain this one too me, just tryna understand more. Feels like it was written in the moment
August 16th, 2025 20:09
Demar Desu said:
Can you explain this one too me, just tryna understand more. Feels like it was written in the moment
August 16th, 2025 20:09
Expectations
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Great job, Hayleigh! Boys seem to play \"men\" more oft\' than not. Is anyone, other than themselves, fooled? Not I says...well...I. 🤪 Again, great poem, Hayleigh. A fave! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 15th, 2025 10:07
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Great job, Hayleigh! Boys seem to play \"men\" more oft\' than not. Is anyone, other than themselves, fooled? Not I says...well...I. 🤪 Again, great poem, Hayleigh. A fave! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 15th, 2025 10:07
Expectations
sorenbarrett said:
The last line seals it. One that relies on violence is not mature or in this case a man but remains a boy. Boys do not belong in serious relationships. Well written a fave
August 15th, 2025 05:22
sorenbarrett said:
The last line seals it. One that relies on violence is not mature or in this case a man but remains a boy. Boys do not belong in serious relationships. Well written a fave
August 15th, 2025 05:22
Expectations
Poetic Licence said:
Someone who hasn\'t grown up yet and learned how to treat people properly, nicely expressed write
August 15th, 2025 05:13
Poetic Licence said:
Someone who hasn\'t grown up yet and learned how to treat people properly, nicely expressed write
August 15th, 2025 05:13
Blood in the Snow
Aradhya said:
what a spectacular piece, absolutely loved this! keep penning
August 14th, 2025 13:15
Aradhya said:
what a spectacular piece, absolutely loved this! keep penning
August 14th, 2025 13:15
Blood in the Snow
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Love this Senryu, Hayleigh! I can feel the emotions in this and its brevity only helps them land strong. Open to many different interpretations. Brilliantly penned! 🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 14th, 2025 12:10
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Love this Senryu, Hayleigh! I can feel the emotions in this and its brevity only helps them land strong. Open to many different interpretations. Brilliantly penned! 🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 14th, 2025 12:10
Blood in the Snow
Poetic Licence said:
Really enjoyed this, leaving us to decide if good or bad, nicely done
August 14th, 2025 08:31
Poetic Licence said:
Really enjoyed this, leaving us to decide if good or bad, nicely done
August 14th, 2025 08:31
Blood in the Snow
sorenbarrett said:
A magnificent senryu that speaks to numerous interpretations. Good or bad the reader chooses
August 14th, 2025 07:55
sorenbarrett said:
A magnificent senryu that speaks to numerous interpretations. Good or bad the reader chooses
August 14th, 2025 07:55
Glass
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Hayleigh, this one cuts sharp and clean—just like the glass in its title. I can feel your pain. The simplicity in your phrasing makes the hurt hit harder, especially that last couplet…it’s the kind of line that lingers. There’s a fragile beauty here, even in the breaking. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛ So very well done! A fave!
August 12th, 2025 10:02
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Hayleigh, this one cuts sharp and clean—just like the glass in its title. I can feel your pain. The simplicity in your phrasing makes the hurt hit harder, especially that last couplet…it’s the kind of line that lingers. There’s a fragile beauty here, even in the breaking. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛ So very well done! A fave!
August 12th, 2025 10:02
Glass
sorenbarrett said:
Unappreciated is the word that comes to mind. A most lovely write that carries with it a sense of a love unrequited. Nicely written without malise of anger.
August 12th, 2025 07:15
sorenbarrett said:
Unappreciated is the word that comes to mind. A most lovely write that carries with it a sense of a love unrequited. Nicely written without malise of anger.
August 12th, 2025 07:15
Ode to Your Memory
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Hayleigh, this carries the weight of love and loss in every stanza. The voice feels spent yet unwavering…moving from longing to resignation with a painful grace. You’ve given the goodbye a haunting beauty, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 11th, 2025 19:50
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Hayleigh, this carries the weight of love and loss in every stanza. The voice feels spent yet unwavering…moving from longing to resignation with a painful grace. You’ve given the goodbye a haunting beauty, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 11th, 2025 19:50
Ode to Your Memory
Poetic Licence said:
A beautiful write to all those loved one\'s that can no longer be here in body, enjoyed the read
August 11th, 2025 08:23
Poetic Licence said:
A beautiful write to all those loved one\'s that can no longer be here in body, enjoyed the read
August 11th, 2025 08:23
Ode to Your Memory
sorenbarrett said:
A fond farewell to those we wished were still here with us. A lovely write
August 11th, 2025 07:16
sorenbarrett said:
A fond farewell to those we wished were still here with us. A lovely write
August 11th, 2025 07:16
Anthem for the Apocalypse
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Hayleigh, this has major urgency. You’ve caught both the scale of collapse and the intimate cost…the smoke in the eyes, the soul ready to break away. It’s raw, direct, and it lands hard. Well done, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 8th, 2025 20:15
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Hayleigh, this has major urgency. You’ve caught both the scale of collapse and the intimate cost…the smoke in the eyes, the soul ready to break away. It’s raw, direct, and it lands hard. Well done, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 8th, 2025 20:15
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