Comments received on poems by 𝓱𝓪𝔂𝓵𝓮𝓲𝓰𝓱
Girlhood
sorenbarrett said:
Dark thoughts in this poem of feeling unwanted. A sad poem with a desperate ending. Nicely written with high emotional effect
August 24th, 2025 04:40
sorenbarrett said:
Dark thoughts in this poem of feeling unwanted. A sad poem with a desperate ending. Nicely written with high emotional effect
August 24th, 2025 04:40
Every Wrong Turn
sorenbarrett said:
Here are mixed feeling and feelings disguised. I feel a turmoil in this poem. Well done
August 23rd, 2025 04:30
sorenbarrett said:
Here are mixed feeling and feelings disguised. I feel a turmoil in this poem. Well done
August 23rd, 2025 04:30
Untouchable, Unlovable
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Reading this, I felt the pull between desire and inability…the kind of tension that doesn’t shout but presses into the chest. You’ve captured that inner bind beautifully. A fave from me, my friend.🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 21st, 2025 13:18
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Reading this, I felt the pull between desire and inability…the kind of tension that doesn’t shout but presses into the chest. You’ve captured that inner bind beautifully. A fave from me, my friend.🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 21st, 2025 13:18
Untouchable, Unlovable
sorenbarrett said:
Love is more than just a word although society treats it as such. A lovely poem
August 21st, 2025 13:05
sorenbarrett said:
Love is more than just a word although society treats it as such. A lovely poem
August 21st, 2025 13:05
Sculpture
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Wow! That line “if fear is the heart of love, you are most terrifying” really struck me. Love as awe and tremor...captured perfectly, imho. Strong writing, Hayleigh. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🦇🐦⬛
August 20th, 2025 19:51
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Wow! That line “if fear is the heart of love, you are most terrifying” really struck me. Love as awe and tremor...captured perfectly, imho. Strong writing, Hayleigh. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🦇🐦⬛
August 20th, 2025 19:51
Sculpture
sorenbarrett said:
This poem presents uncommon parings in metaphor that require a bit of thought. The serial presentation of sequential metaphors give them more sense and present love in a most uncommon manner. Nicely done
August 20th, 2025 03:53
sorenbarrett said:
This poem presents uncommon parings in metaphor that require a bit of thought. The serial presentation of sequential metaphors give them more sense and present love in a most uncommon manner. Nicely done
August 20th, 2025 03:53
Anthem for the Apocalypse
NafisaSB said:
this is such a serious subject - well defined..
August 20th, 2025 02:39
NafisaSB said:
this is such a serious subject - well defined..
August 20th, 2025 02:39
Blood in the Snow
NafisaSB said:
trying to interpret - and hoping it\'s just for fun indeed...
August 20th, 2025 01:25
NafisaSB said:
trying to interpret - and hoping it\'s just for fun indeed...
August 20th, 2025 01:25
Missing Persons Report
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Beautifully crafted, Hayleigh. The stillness is unnerving…each line folding in like a curtain over light. The decay isn’t shouted, it just settles heavy. Powerful piece. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛ A fave.
August 19th, 2025 07:09
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Beautifully crafted, Hayleigh. The stillness is unnerving…each line folding in like a curtain over light. The decay isn’t shouted, it just settles heavy. Powerful piece. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛ A fave.
August 19th, 2025 07:09
Missing Persons Report
sorenbarrett said:
A sense of darkness and decay mentioned here. Well done
August 18th, 2025 09:22
sorenbarrett said:
A sense of darkness and decay mentioned here. Well done
August 18th, 2025 09:22
Finally Numb
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Another raw and unflinching poem, Hayleigh, which you know I love…you’ve poured it all straight onto the page without filter. The scars, the questions, the surrender...it all lands with a stark honesty that’s hard to ignore. Powerfully expressed, my friend. My type of poetry for sure! And amen to your note, as well. Very heartfelt! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 17th, 2025 07:20
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Another raw and unflinching poem, Hayleigh, which you know I love…you’ve poured it all straight onto the page without filter. The scars, the questions, the surrender...it all lands with a stark honesty that’s hard to ignore. Powerfully expressed, my friend. My type of poetry for sure! And amen to your note, as well. Very heartfelt! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 17th, 2025 07:20
Bye, Honey!
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Now this is a master class Senryu, Hayleigh and I don\'t say that lightly. Haiku-like in structure (5-7-5) and, instead of a nature or seasonal focus (haiku), it’s centered on human behavior/emotion, irony, and wit...the humor of a fridge left open, the accusation, and then the shrugging “it’s only spilt milk.” Perfection, my dear friend. This is a fave from me just on nailing the senryu alone, let alone its meaning. Powerful stuff! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 17th, 2025 07:14
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Now this is a master class Senryu, Hayleigh and I don\'t say that lightly. Haiku-like in structure (5-7-5) and, instead of a nature or seasonal focus (haiku), it’s centered on human behavior/emotion, irony, and wit...the humor of a fridge left open, the accusation, and then the shrugging “it’s only spilt milk.” Perfection, my dear friend. This is a fave from me just on nailing the senryu alone, let alone its meaning. Powerful stuff! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 17th, 2025 07:14
Finally Numb
Poetic Licence said:
A passionate write of the pain of feeling unimportant and undervalued and they have just had enough of it , nicely expressed and written
August 17th, 2025 04:47
Poetic Licence said:
A passionate write of the pain of feeling unimportant and undervalued and they have just had enough of it , nicely expressed and written
August 17th, 2025 04:47
Finally Numb
sorenbarrett said:
There is such pain in this poem and a feeling of insignificance and unimportance. A heartfelt write
August 17th, 2025 04:42
sorenbarrett said:
There is such pain in this poem and a feeling of insignificance and unimportance. A heartfelt write
August 17th, 2025 04:42
Bye, Honey!
Demar Desu said:
Can you explain this one too me, just tryna understand more. Feels like it was written in the moment
August 16th, 2025 20:09
Demar Desu said:
Can you explain this one too me, just tryna understand more. Feels like it was written in the moment
August 16th, 2025 20:09
Expectations
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Great job, Hayleigh! Boys seem to play \"men\" more oft\' than not. Is anyone, other than themselves, fooled? Not I says...well...I. 🤪 Again, great poem, Hayleigh. A fave! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 15th, 2025 10:07
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Great job, Hayleigh! Boys seem to play \"men\" more oft\' than not. Is anyone, other than themselves, fooled? Not I says...well...I. 🤪 Again, great poem, Hayleigh. A fave! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 15th, 2025 10:07
Expectations
sorenbarrett said:
The last line seals it. One that relies on violence is not mature or in this case a man but remains a boy. Boys do not belong in serious relationships. Well written a fave
August 15th, 2025 05:22
sorenbarrett said:
The last line seals it. One that relies on violence is not mature or in this case a man but remains a boy. Boys do not belong in serious relationships. Well written a fave
August 15th, 2025 05:22
Expectations
Poetic Licence said:
Someone who hasn\'t grown up yet and learned how to treat people properly, nicely expressed write
August 15th, 2025 05:13
Poetic Licence said:
Someone who hasn\'t grown up yet and learned how to treat people properly, nicely expressed write
August 15th, 2025 05:13
Blood in the Snow
Aradhya said:
what a spectacular piece, absolutely loved this! keep penning
August 14th, 2025 13:15
Aradhya said:
what a spectacular piece, absolutely loved this! keep penning
August 14th, 2025 13:15
Blood in the Snow
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Love this Senryu, Hayleigh! I can feel the emotions in this and its brevity only helps them land strong. Open to many different interpretations. Brilliantly penned! 🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 14th, 2025 12:10
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Love this Senryu, Hayleigh! I can feel the emotions in this and its brevity only helps them land strong. Open to many different interpretations. Brilliantly penned! 🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 14th, 2025 12:10
Blood in the Snow
Poetic Licence said:
Really enjoyed this, leaving us to decide if good or bad, nicely done
August 14th, 2025 08:31
Poetic Licence said:
Really enjoyed this, leaving us to decide if good or bad, nicely done
August 14th, 2025 08:31
Blood in the Snow
sorenbarrett said:
A magnificent senryu that speaks to numerous interpretations. Good or bad the reader chooses
August 14th, 2025 07:55
sorenbarrett said:
A magnificent senryu that speaks to numerous interpretations. Good or bad the reader chooses
August 14th, 2025 07:55
Glass
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Hayleigh, this one cuts sharp and clean—just like the glass in its title. I can feel your pain. The simplicity in your phrasing makes the hurt hit harder, especially that last couplet…it’s the kind of line that lingers. There’s a fragile beauty here, even in the breaking. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛ So very well done! A fave!
August 12th, 2025 10:02
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Hayleigh, this one cuts sharp and clean—just like the glass in its title. I can feel your pain. The simplicity in your phrasing makes the hurt hit harder, especially that last couplet…it’s the kind of line that lingers. There’s a fragile beauty here, even in the breaking. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛ So very well done! A fave!
August 12th, 2025 10:02
Glass
sorenbarrett said:
Unappreciated is the word that comes to mind. A most lovely write that carries with it a sense of a love unrequited. Nicely written without malise of anger.
August 12th, 2025 07:15
sorenbarrett said:
Unappreciated is the word that comes to mind. A most lovely write that carries with it a sense of a love unrequited. Nicely written without malise of anger.
August 12th, 2025 07:15
Ode to Your Memory
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Hayleigh, this carries the weight of love and loss in every stanza. The voice feels spent yet unwavering…moving from longing to resignation with a painful grace. You’ve given the goodbye a haunting beauty, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 11th, 2025 19:50
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Hayleigh, this carries the weight of love and loss in every stanza. The voice feels spent yet unwavering…moving from longing to resignation with a painful grace. You’ve given the goodbye a haunting beauty, my friend. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
August 11th, 2025 19:50
Ode to Your Memory
Poetic Licence said:
A beautiful write to all those loved one\'s that can no longer be here in body, enjoyed the read
August 11th, 2025 08:23
Poetic Licence said:
A beautiful write to all those loved one\'s that can no longer be here in body, enjoyed the read
August 11th, 2025 08:23
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