Comments received on poems by Peggi
Pray for my brother
mvvenkataraman said:
Highly silly to pray for getting a girl
Is she the only woman on this Earth?
Please use prayer for useful things
Let her choose the man she loves
Still, I will pray with utmost sincerity
But, never bother about a woman
If she has no guts to choose her man
Such type of woman wil fail in life surely.
mvvenkataraman
October 7th, 2012 11:39
mvvenkataraman said:
Highly silly to pray for getting a girl
Is she the only woman on this Earth?
Please use prayer for useful things
Let her choose the man she loves
Still, I will pray with utmost sincerity
But, never bother about a woman
If she has no guts to choose her man
Such type of woman wil fail in life surely.
mvvenkataraman
October 7th, 2012 11:39
The Bus Man
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. What a poignant tale! Poor fellow. Glad you all took pity on him and helped him as much as you could. Thanks for this depiction of the poor and the example we ought to live. For your second line, perhaps instead of "...full of crush" you try "...fully crushed"? Same syllable count and probably expresses your idea a bit better...? Either way, I enjoyed it.
February 23rd, 2011 22:53
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow. What a poignant tale! Poor fellow. Glad you all took pity on him and helped him as much as you could. Thanks for this depiction of the poor and the example we ought to live. For your second line, perhaps instead of "...full of crush" you try "...fully crushed"? Same syllable count and probably expresses your idea a bit better...? Either way, I enjoyed it.
February 23rd, 2011 22:53
First Kiss
Cheeky Missy said:
Sweet....delightfully romantic topic to write on. The image is so perfect too. A couple suggestions.....I would change "hiss" in the 8th line to "bliss"...same end-rhyme but seems more appropriate to this topic; regarding the 12th line, you might change it to something like "I want to kiss her so much" instead of "wove"....maybe?....just my stupid suggestions. Anyway, I certainly enjoyed this delightful little discussion on that wonderful first kiss!
February 21st, 2011 00:12
Cheeky Missy said:
Sweet....delightfully romantic topic to write on. The image is so perfect too. A couple suggestions.....I would change "hiss" in the 8th line to "bliss"...same end-rhyme but seems more appropriate to this topic; regarding the 12th line, you might change it to something like "I want to kiss her so much" instead of "wove"....maybe?....just my stupid suggestions. Anyway, I certainly enjoyed this delightful little discussion on that wonderful first kiss!
February 21st, 2011 00:12
Classroom
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow! Excellent!!!! I LOVE this one! Oh, this is an absolute favourite of mine! You drew the classroom picture so fully and so delightfully....hitting all the amusing angles and so very realistically.....what an excellent tribute to the classroom and school! Impressive, delightful....wonderful! Thanks for this one!
January 19th, 2011 10:24
Cheeky Missy said:
Wow! Excellent!!!! I LOVE this one! Oh, this is an absolute favourite of mine! You drew the classroom picture so fully and so delightfully....hitting all the amusing angles and so very realistically.....what an excellent tribute to the classroom and school! Impressive, delightful....wonderful! Thanks for this one!
January 19th, 2011 10:24
Friends
Cheeky Missy said:
Fascinating the image you began it with that "lie" is buried in "believe." Key point with friendship....there are true as well as false friends....friends in fair weather or friends in bad...."friends" who flatter versus true friends who tell you the truth, whether you want to hear it or not....and being a friend is the most we each can do.....I have both nor am not good enough for my best friend. There is exemplified it seems, in the Lord Jesus Christ, the truest of friends for He laid down His life for us...when we were His enemies.
January 18th, 2011 14:46
Cheeky Missy said:
Fascinating the image you began it with that "lie" is buried in "believe." Key point with friendship....there are true as well as false friends....friends in fair weather or friends in bad...."friends" who flatter versus true friends who tell you the truth, whether you want to hear it or not....and being a friend is the most we each can do.....I have both nor am not good enough for my best friend. There is exemplified it seems, in the Lord Jesus Christ, the truest of friends for He laid down His life for us...when we were His enemies.
January 18th, 2011 14:46
She (untold story)
Cheeky Missy said:
Anime! Wow. It is a very sweet poem expressing your affections for her! A very lovely tribute to the wonderful girl you love! I quite enjoyed this beautiful poem about the girl you love...may she make you forever happy!
January 17th, 2011 20:16
Cheeky Missy said:
Anime! Wow. It is a very sweet poem expressing your affections for her! A very lovely tribute to the wonderful girl you love! I quite enjoyed this beautiful poem about the girl you love...may she make you forever happy!
January 17th, 2011 20:16
Pragya(My lover)
Cheeky Missy said:
Very sweet....and delightfully expressed! Very enjoyable! The similes you used were so fascinating....you described it all so very pleasantly...so like a guy. I quite enjoyed this!
January 15th, 2011 12:17
Cheeky Missy said:
Very sweet....and delightfully expressed! Very enjoyable! The similes you used were so fascinating....you described it all so very pleasantly...so like a guy. I quite enjoyed this!
January 15th, 2011 12:17
“Let go u”
gerrylegister said:
good start to your creative writing, don't let go of the flow of inspiration
January 14th, 2011 15:45
gerrylegister said:
good start to your creative writing, don't let go of the flow of inspiration
January 14th, 2011 15:45
“Let go u”
Cheeky Missy said:
For your very first poem....and for all I suspect it is not in your mother tongue....Excellent!!!! My first "poems" are so simplistic I haven't really posted any of them...all you other beginning poets only show me up for your abilities in your starting out....Keep on writing and improving....I look forward to much more!!
Yet, if I may ask, what do you intend by your rather startling last line? It rather sounds like an adulterous amorous request, which against all the bulk of the poem preceding it, seems not exactly fitting.....you are initially seeming to express such freedom and yet no man is really free to take another's wife, really. Is that what you mean? Would you explain?
January 14th, 2011 12:25
Cheeky Missy said:
For your very first poem....and for all I suspect it is not in your mother tongue....Excellent!!!! My first "poems" are so simplistic I haven't really posted any of them...all you other beginning poets only show me up for your abilities in your starting out....Keep on writing and improving....I look forward to much more!!
Yet, if I may ask, what do you intend by your rather startling last line? It rather sounds like an adulterous amorous request, which against all the bulk of the poem preceding it, seems not exactly fitting.....you are initially seeming to express such freedom and yet no man is really free to take another's wife, really. Is that what you mean? Would you explain?
January 14th, 2011 12:25
